Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and complete. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and avoid fragments. Add one specific detail about why you enjoy volleyball and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep to no more than five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy playing volleyball. I have played since I was seven, and I usually play with a local club twice a week. I love it because it keeps me fit and teaches teamwork, which I find very rewarding.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and make sentences complete. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a linking word to explain. Avoid long run-on sentences and repeat fewer words.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I started playing volleyball in the third grade because my school offered an extracurricular sports class, and I enjoyed learning the skills. As a result, it became my favorite activity throughout primary school.

Sugestão: Clarify which hobby you mean and use consistent tenses. Say whether you still pursue it now and give a clear reason if you stopped. Use linking words (however, because) and complete sentences with correct grammar.

Exemplo: Yes, I did have a childhood hobby: I used to play football. However, I don't play it much now because I realised my skills were limited and I preferred volleyball instead.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then provide brief supporting details with correct vocabulary. Use linking words (for example, although) and avoid repeating 'hobby' too often. Give one or two specific comparisons between your hobbies and family members'.

Exemplo: No, I don't share the same hobbies with my family. For example, my mother enjoys shopping and watching movies, while I prefer playing team sports like volleyball, so our interests are different.

× I played volleyball since I was a kid, like 7 years old.

✓ I have played volleyball since I was a kid, since I was about seven years old.

The student used past simple 'played' with 'since' which requires present perfect to show an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Also 'like 7 years old' is informal and unclear; use 'since I was about seven years old.' Suggestion: Use present perfect with 'since' (have/has + past participle) and express ages with 'when I was...' or 'since I was...'.

× I love playing volleyball because when you hit the ball.

✓ I love playing volleyball because I enjoy the feeling when you hit the ball.

The original is a sentence fragment ending with 'because when you hit the ball' and lacks a main clause explaining the reason. The correction completes the thought by adding the main clause 'I enjoy the feeling' and clarifies the reason. Suggestion: Ensure 'because' clauses include a complete result or reason clause.

× Yes I do my hobby is volleyball when I was a child I played volleyball because when I in 3rd grade I have extra class for sports that is volleyball and.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was volleyball. I played volleyball because in third grade I had an extra sports class that was volleyball.

Multiple tense and form issues: mixing present 'do' with past events and using present 'have' instead of past 'had.' Also sentence run-on and unclear structure. Use past simple ('was', 'played', 'had') to describe past circumstances. Suggestion: Break into shorter sentences and keep past tense consistent for past events.

× Yes I do. When I was childhood, my hobby is playing football.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, my hobby was playing football.

'When I was childhood' is incorrect; use 'when I was a child.' The time reference is past, so use past tense 'was' not present 'is.' Suggestion: Match noun phrase for age and use past tense for past habits.

× I started playing where I was childhood.

✓ I started playing when I was a child.

'Where I was childhood' is ungrammatical and mixes 'where' with a time expression. Use 'when I was a child' for time. Suggestion: Use 'when' for time clauses describing age.

× But no I cannot playing football because my skills, talent.

✓ But no, I cannot play football because of my lack of skill and talent.

'Cannot playing' mixes modal 'cannot' with -ing form incorrectly; after modal verb use base form 'play.' Also list 'skills, talent' needs rephrasing: 'lack of skill and talent' or 'because I don't have the necessary skills and talent.' Suggestion: After modals use base verb and express causes with 'because of' or full clauses.

× No, I don't. Because I don't know my family hobbies, I don't know my father hobbies, my mother more hobbies.

✓ No, I don't. I don't really know my family's hobbies. I don't know my father's hobbies, and my mother has more hobbies than them.

Problems: missing possessive and plural forms ('family's', 'father's'), sentence fragment starting with 'Because', and unclear comparative 'my mother more hobbies.' Use possessive apostrophe and complete sentences. Suggestion: Use possessive forms and join ideas into complete sentences using conjunctions.

× I think my mother movie hobbies is shopping in the mall but I don't have any hobbies same like.

✓ I think my mother's main hobby is watching movies and she also enjoys shopping at the mall, but I don't have any hobbies in common with her.

Errors: 'mother movie hobbies' is incorrect word order and form; use 'mother's main hobby.' 'Is shopping in the mall' mixes activities incorrectly. 'Any hobbies same like' is ungrammatical; use 'hobbies in common with.' Suggestion: Use possessive + noun ('mother's hobby'), parallel structure for listing hobbies, and the phrase 'in common with' to show similarity.