Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and confident: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example and a brief reason. Reduce hesitations and avoid repeating obvious phrases.

Exemplo: Yes. I enjoy reading novels and watching history documentaries. For example, I recently read a biography of Nelson Mandela and watched a documentary about South African history, which helped me understand different cultures and historical perspectives.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and use coherent linking: begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then link to changes using a linking phrase (e.g., “as I grew older”). Give one specific detail about childhood activity.

Exemplo: When I was a child, I played football with my friends almost every afternoon after school. As I grew older, I started preferring quieter hobbies such as reading and watching documentaries because they fitted better with my studies.

Sugestão: Eliminate hesitations and fix grammar: give a direct answer in present perfect or simple present, then explain specifically how reading helps (e.g., improves vocabulary, concentration). Avoid unclear phrases like “work app” or “workcap.”

Exemplo: Yes, I have loved reading since I was a child. Reading has improved my vocabulary and concentration; for instance, reading fiction helps me learn new expressions, while non-fiction expands my knowledge for work.

Sugestão: Be specific and correct vocabulary: answer directly, give one or two reasons why your family shares the hobby, and avoid filler words. Replace unclear terms (“radio boot”) with clear phrases like “reading together” or “book discussions.”

Exemplo: Yes. My family members also enjoy reading, and we often discuss books together. For example, we hold monthly book discussions where everyone shares opinions, which helps us improve vocabulary and learn new perspectives.

× When I was younger, I spent a lot of playing football with my friend after coming back from the school.

✓ When I was younger, I spent a lot of time playing football with my friends after coming back from school.

The original sentence misuses the verb phrase 'spent a lot of' which should be followed by 'time' plus a gerund. 'Playing' is correct as a gerund but needs 'time'. 'My friend' likely refers to multiple occasions with more than one friend, so 'friends' is more natural; if singular was intended, use 'my friend' but keep consistency. 'From the school' is unnatural in this context; use 'from school' to indicate returning from lessons. This keeps the past tense consistent and grammatically correct.

× As I grow older, I decide to take up other hobbies like reading and watching documentaries.

✓ As I grew older, I decided to take up other hobbies like reading and watching documentaries.

The sentence mixes present-tense verbs with a past-time reference. The speaker refers to a change that happened in the past, so use past tense 'grew' and 'decided'. Maintaining tense consistency is important: both verbs should match the time frame described.

× Umm, I think was I was younger.

✓ Umm, I think when I was younger.

The original word order 'I think was I was younger' is ungrammatical. Insert the conjunction 'when' and correct the order to 'I think when I was younger' to express the intended meaning. This fixes sentence structure so it reads naturally.

× I do really like, uh, reading books and until now I really love, uh, reading books.

✓ I really like reading books, and I still love reading them now.

The original repeats ideas and uses unnecessary filler words. Use simple present 'really like' and 'still love' to state a habitual preference that continues to the present. 'Until now' is awkward here; 'still' or 'now' is more natural. Also replace the second 'reading books' with 'reading them' to avoid repetition.

× Uh, this can enhance my work app and uh, workcap vocabulary and this can, umm, give me more.

✓ This can enhance my workplace vocabulary and improve my skills further.

The original uses unclear and incorrect terms 'work app' and 'workcap' which appear to be errors. Replace with 'workplace vocabulary' to refer to vocabulary used at work. Also restructure 'this can give me more' to a clearer result phrase such as 'improve my skills further.' Choose precise nouns and verbs to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes, exactly. My whole family really, really like, uh, reading books because that is a good things about, uh, about radio boot because they can enhance your, uh, vocabulary, uh, and this can help you study and more this.

✓ Yes, exactly. My whole family really likes reading books because it is a good thing; reading can enhance your vocabulary and help you study and learn more.

'My whole family' is a singular collective noun here, so the verb should be 'likes' not 'like'. 'That is a good things' mixes singular and plural; use 'it is a good thing.' 'About radio boot' is unclear and likely erroneous; remove it and clarify the intended point: reading enhances vocabulary and helps study. Also replace informal 'more this' with 'learn more' to form a clear result. These changes fix agreement, article usage, and improve clarity.