Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì và cấu trúc câu), phát âm và làm câu tự nhiên hơn; tránh lặp từ và dùng từ phù hợp (ví dụ: 'sleeping' dùng tốt nhưng nên nói 'I enjoy sleeping' hoặc 'I like to sleep'); rút gọn để rõ ràng trong tối đa 4-5 câu. Thêm liên từ để nối ý rõ hơn (e.g., 'and', 'which helps me...').

Exemplo: I have several hobbies, but my favourites are sleeping and cooking. I enjoy cooking because it helps me relax and I like trying new recipes. Sleeping also makes me feel refreshed, especially after a busy day. Both activities help me feel peaceful and recharged.

Sugestão: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ (ví dụ 'Other child' -> 'When I was a child'); dùng liên từ để nối ý; tăng cụ thể bằng cách thêm chi tiết về tần suất hoặc kỷ niệm; giữ độ dài hợp lý. Chú ý động từ đúng ('rode bikes', không 'drove bikes').

Exemplo: When I was a child, I loved playing outdoors because I had a lot of energy. For example, I often rode my bike and played football with my friends after school. We usually played for a couple of hours until dinner. Those activities kept me active and happy.

Sugestão: Cần cải thiện rõ rệt về ngữ pháp, vốn từ và tính mạch lạc. Tránh nói lặp và ngắt quãng ('umm'); dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) rồi giải thích lý do với các chi tiết cụ thể. Thay các từ sai ('beef full' không đúng) bằng từ phù hợp ('be more calm'/'prefer quieter activities').

Exemplo: No, my hobbies have changed since childhood. When I was young I enjoyed energetic activities like cycling and football, but now I prefer quieter pastimes such as cooking and reading because they help me relax.

Sugestão: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (thì và chia động từ), tránh câu hỏi không cần thiết ở cuối. Nên mở rộng với chi tiết cụ thể về món ăn, tần suất học nấu và cảm nhận cá nhân. Dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: Yes, I share a hobby with my mother: cooking. She taught me many recipes and techniques, so I often cook traditional family dishes with her at weekends. I especially enjoy making soups and stir-fries because they taste comforting and bring the family together.

× For example, I really like sleeping and cooking because when I sleeping or cooking I can feel relaxed and feel more peaceful.

✓ For example, I really like sleeping and cooking because when I am sleeping or cooking I can feel relaxed and more peaceful.

The verb 'sleep' needs the present participle form 'sleeping' after 'am' to form the present continuous. 'When I sleeping' lacks the auxiliary verb 'am'. Suggestion: use 'when I am + -ing' for ongoing actions (e.g., 'when I am sleeping'). Also remove the repeated 'feel' for conciseness.

× Other child I enjoyed playing outdoors because I had a lot of energy.

✓ When I was a child I enjoyed playing outdoors because I had a lot of energy.

The phrase 'Other child' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'When I was a child'. This requires the past tense of 'to be' ('was') and the time phrase 'when'. Suggestion: use 'When I was a child' to introduce childhood experiences.

× For example, I often drove bikes and played football with my friends after school.

✓ For example, I often rode bikes and played football with my friends after school.

The verb 'drive' is incorrect for using a bike; the correct past tense of 'ride' is 'rode'. 'Drove' is used with cars. Suggestion: use 'ride/rode a bike' to describe cycling.

× No, my hobby had changed saying childhood because umm other child I full of energy but now I like beef full and in my set I want to. Relax and quiet.

✓ No, my hobbies have changed since childhood because when I was a child I was full of energy, but now I prefer peaceful and quiet activities to relax.

Multiple errors: 'had changed saying childhood' should be 'have changed since childhood' (present perfect to describe change from past to now). 'Other child I full of energy' needs 'when I was a child I was full of energy' (past tense of 'to be'). 'beef full' is incorrect; likely 'be more peaceful' or 'peaceful and quiet activities'. Sentence structure was fragmented. Suggestion: use present perfect for changes over time and clear clauses: 'have changed since childhood', 'when I was a child', 'now I prefer peaceful and quiet activities'.

× I have the same hobby as my mother. For example, the same hobby is cooking and my mother teach me how to cook and how to make make the dishes. Feel delicious?

✓ I have the same hobby as my mother. For example, our shared hobby is cooking, and my mother taught me how to cook and make delicious dishes.

Verb tense and pronoun errors: 'teach' should be past tense 'taught' because learning occurred in the past. 'The same hobby is cooking' is awkward; 'our shared hobby is cooking' is clearer. 'Make make the dishes. Feel delicious?' is ungrammatical; combine into 'make delicious dishes'. Suggestion: use past tense for past teaching and revise sentence to be cohesive.