Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence about your main hobby, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid mixing two activities (journaling and jogging) without clear relation.

Exemplo: I enjoy journaling as my main hobby. For example, I spend 20–30 minutes each evening writing about my day and planning tasks, which helps me stay productive; I also personalize my journal with colorful stickers and washi tape to make the habit more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Clarify vocabulary and give concrete details: use correct words (e.g., 'gifts' instead of 'dose') and describe one clear example of what you made and how others reacted. Use linking words to organize ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed arts and crafts as a child, especially making small decorative cradles. For instance, I once made a painted wooden cradle as a gift for my grandmother, which she treasured; occasionally I would swap crafts with friends to learn new techniques.

Sugestão: Make the response more direct and precise: state clearly that rollerblading has continued since childhood, then give a brief supporting detail (frequency, where you practice, or a skill). Avoid vague claims like 'I'm still good at it' without evidence.

Exemplo: Yes, rollerblading has been a long-term interest of mine since childhood. For example, I skate at the local park two or three times a week and used to take occasional figure skating lessons, which helped me develop good balance and basic tricks.

Sugestão: Give a clearer structure and one specific detail: start with agreement, then compare your level or role, and add a concrete example of what you do in gardening. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'love' not 'loves').

Exemplo: Yes, my family shares an interest in gardening. For example, my brother grows a lot of roses in his garden while I focus on a small flower bed at home, where I grow annuals like marigolds and learn pruning techniques from him.

× Yes, I love journaling so every day I set time for jogging and put my thoughts together.

✓ Yes, I love journaling, so every day I set aside time for jogging and put my thoughts together.

The original sentence is mostly correct but needs a clearer collocation: 'set time for' is less natural than 'set aside time for'. Adding a comma before 'so' improves sentence flow. Suggestion: use common verb + -ing collocations and punctuation for clarity.

× It helps me to be productive and also I decorate my pages with colorful stickers and decoration tapes.

✓ It helps me to be productive, and I also decorate my pages with colorful stickers and decorative tapes.

Use 'decorative' (adjective) instead of 'decoration' to modify 'tapes'. Also place 'also' in a natural position: 'I also decorate'. Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' when joining independent clauses.

× Yes, I enjoyed arts and crafts and especially I loved making cradles.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed arts and crafts, and especially I loved making cradles.

No major verb form error, but a comma is needed before 'and' to join independent clauses. The verbs 'enjoyed' and 'loved' are correctly in past tense. Maintain consistent past tense for childhood activities.

× I usually create something decorative and it gave my dose to my grandparents and my parents.

✓ I usually created something decorative, and I gave my crafts to my grandparents and my parents.

Tense inconsistency: 'usually' with past context should use past tense 'created'. 'It gave my dose' is incorrect wording; likely intended 'I gave my crafts'. Use clear noun 'crafts'. Keep past tense consistent when speaking about childhood.

× Occasionally I exchanged with my friends.

✓ Occasionally I exchanged them with my friends.

The verb 'exchange' needs a direct object to indicate what was exchanged: 'exchanged them' (referring to crafts). Alternatively 'I exchanged crafts with my friends.' Specify the object for clarity.

× I don't necessarily call it my hobby, but I still enjoy rollerblading.

✓ I don't necessarily call it my hobby, but I still enjoy rollerblading.

Sentence is correct; no verb form change needed. 'Enjoy' correctly takes the -ing form 'rollerblading'. No change necessary.

× I did it a lot when I was a child and occasionally I practiced figure skating.

✓ I did it a lot when I was a child, and occasionally I practiced figure skating.

Tenses are correct (past). Add a comma before 'and' for clarity when joining two independent clauses.

× Figure skating and rollerblading are pretty similar, so I'm still good at it.

✓ Figure skating and rollerblading are pretty similar, so I'm still good at them.

Pronoun agreement error: 'Figure skating and rollerblading' is plural, so use the plural pronoun 'them' instead of singular 'it'. Match pronoun number to its antecedent.

× Yes, both my parents and my brother loves gardening, especially my brother's garden is full of beautiful roses.

✓ Yes, both my parents and my brother love gardening; especially, my brother's garden is full of beautiful roses.

Subject-verb agreement: compound subject 'both my parents and my brother' is plural and requires the plural verb 'love' not 'loves'. Also improve punctuation: a semicolon or period separates the ideas; add a comma after 'especially' for natural flow.

× I'm not as savvy as he, but I'm trying to grow flowers in my bed as well.

✓ I'm not as savvy as he is, but I'm trying to grow flowers in my bed as well.

When using a pronoun in a comparison 'as...as', include the verb for clarity: 'as he is' or use the object form 'him' ('as him') in informal speech. Formal correct form: 'as he is'.