Chatting— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid redundancy; use a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Remove repeated words and unnecessary connectors (e.g. "since" and "therefore" used together).

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I'm an extrovert, so I enjoy chatting with friends in my free time. Living in Australia gives me the chance to meet people from many cultures, and I often learn interesting things about their traditions and food when we talk.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid repetitive phrasing. Use linking words sparingly and give one specific example to make the answer more vivid.

Exemplo: We usually talk about food. My friends and I enjoy trying different cuisines, so we often visit new restaurants and discuss our favourite dishes, like the best Thai curry or the tastiest sushi we’ve tried recently.

Sugestão: Avoid sweeping negative statements about society and be more balanced. Give a clear preference sentence and one reason or a brief example that supports it.

Exemplo: I prefer chatting with one close friend. I find one-to-one conversations more genuine; for example, I have a loyal friend I’ve known for three years who listens carefully and gives honest advice.

Sugestão: Give a concise preference with a specific reason that is relevant and phrased neutrally. Avoid overgeneralisation and wordy repetition.

Exemplo: I prefer face-to-face communication because it feels more personal and I can read body language. For instance, meeting a friend in person helps avoid misunderstandings that can happen in online chats.

Sugestão: Answer directly and briefly, then support with a specific method you use to resolve disagreements. Saying you 'never' argue can sound unrealistic; acknowledge that disagreements may happen and explain how you handle them.

Exemplo: I try not to argue with friends; when we disagree, I stay calm and listen carefully. For example, if we have different opinions, I ask questions to understand their view and then explain mine respectfully so we can find a solution.

× Since you get to meet people from different nationalities, therefore you will get the opportunity to learn about their cultures which which is quite fascinating.

✓ Since you get to meet people from different nationalities, you will get the opportunity to learn about their cultures, which is quite fascinating.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'since' and 'therefore' together; this is redundant because both indicate cause-result. Also there is a repeated word 'which'. Remove 'therefore' and the duplicate 'which' and add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause. Suggestion: use either 'Since... you...' or 'You... therefore...'. (grammar_problem_type_id:16)

× Me and my friends love to try food from different types of cuisines.

✓ My friends and I love to try food from different types of cuisine.

The subject pronoun 'I' should be used instead of the object form 'me', and polite order places others before oneself. 'Types of cuisines' is redundant; use 'types of cuisine' or 'different cuisines'. (grammar_problem_type_id:12)

× Therefore, whenever we get together, we go to various restaurants in order to try out these food items.

✓ Whenever we get together, we go to various restaurants to try these dishes.

The initial 'Therefore' is unnecessary and disrupts flow; 'try out' is wordy and 'food items' is awkward. Simplify to 'go to various restaurants to try these dishes.' Ensure concise structure. (grammar_problem_type_id:26)

× As a result of that, we usually talk a lot about food items and it has been so for the past few years.

✓ As a result, we usually talk a lot about food and this has been the case for the past few years.

'A result of that' is wordy; 'food items' is unnatural in conversation. Use present perfect 'has been the case' to indicate an action continuing to the present. Maintain present tense for habitual actions. (grammar_problem_type_id:6)

× Me and my friends love to try food from different types of cuisines. Therefore, whenever we get together, we go to various restaurants in order to try out these food items.

✓ My friends and I love to try different cuisines. Therefore, whenever we get together, we go to various restaurants to try these dishes.

Combined corrections: use subject pronoun order 'My friends and I'; 'different cuisines' is more natural; 'try out these food items' -> 'try these dishes'. Keep 'Therefore' only if showing result from prior sentence. (grammar_problem_type_id:12)

× In today's society, I don't trust a lot of people since they only talk to you if they want something to be done, otherwise they never talk with you.

✓ In today's society, I don't trust many people because they only talk to you if they want something done; otherwise, they never speak to you.

Using 'since' can be ambiguous; 'because' is clearer for cause. 'A lot of people' should be 'many people'. 'Something to be done' is awkward; use 'something done'. Use a semicolon or period before 'otherwise' and prefer 'speak to you' over 'talk with you'. (grammar_problem_type_id:16)

× Because of that, I only talk with one friend who has been very loyal to me and we have known each other for the past three years.

✓ Because of that, I only talk to one friend who has been very loyal to me, and we have known each other for the past three years.

Use 'talk to' rather than 'talk with' in this context to indicate direction of communication. Add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. This keeps tense consistent. (grammar_problem_type_id:11)

× To be honest, I prefer to communicate face to face rather than communicating via social media because I get to see the person since there are a lot of scammers in social media especially in today's society and most of them try to talk with you and get your money.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to communicate face to face rather than via social media because I can see the person, and there are many scammers on social media, especially today; most of them try to trick you into giving them money.

Use 'on social media' not 'in social media'. 'A lot of' -> 'many'. 'Try to talk with you and get your money' is informal and awkward; 'try to trick you into giving them money' is clearer. Shorten and punctuate for readability. (grammar_problem_type_id:22)

× Well, as a disability support worker myself, I have realized the importance of always communicating with people politely and listening to what they're saying at all times.

✓ Well, as a disability support worker, I have realized the importance of always communicating politely with people and listening to what they are saying at all times.

'Myself' is unnecessary and often used for emphasis incorrectly. Move 'politely' to follow the verb and expand contraction for formality if desired. This improves word order and style. (grammar_problem_type_id:12)

× Therefore, I would never argue with my friends, instead, I would always talk with them very respectfully.

✓ Therefore, I never argue with my friends; instead, I always speak to them very respectfully.

Using 'would' suggests hypothetical; for habitual behavior use simple present 'never argue' and 'always speak'. Replace 'talk with' by 'speak to' and use a semicolon before 'instead' for correct sentence separation. (grammar_problem_type_id:4)