Part 1
Examinador
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Candidato
Yes, there are several rules in my school for students, for instance that strict rules to assistants and the umm dormitory safety because the street the school thinks the dormitory safety is part of its vital importance to the attendance.
Examinador
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Candidato
No, I don't think so. I think students need help, their own places, their own thoughts for their rules and more importantly, the society has not rely on the single rules.
Examinador
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Candidato
Yes, I have a history teacher. She does his job very well. She is in my primary school years and her education thought is to teach students how to learn history in a more fundamental way and the deep learning of the subject, not just the knowledge from the books.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Pontuação: 50.0Sugestão: 回答不够清晰,表达混乱,缺乏连贯性。建议简化句子结构,明确表达规则内容,并使用连接词使回答更流畅。
Exemplo: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, there are strict rules for assistants and important safety regulations in the dormitory. The school believes that dormitory safety is vital for students' well-being.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Pontuação: 55.0Sugestão: 回答表达不够准确,逻辑不清晰。建议明确表达观点,使用连接词,并给出具体理由支持观点。
Exemplo: No, I don't think more rules would help students. Instead, students need freedom to think independently and make their own decisions. Moreover, society cannot rely solely on strict rules to guide behavior.
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清,建议注意人称一致,简化句子结构,并具体说明老师的教学方法和效果。
Exemplo: Yes, I had a history teacher in primary school who did her job very well. She taught us to understand history deeply, not just memorize facts from books. Her teaching helped me develop a real interest in the subject.
× Yes, there are several rules in my school for students, for instance that strict rules to assistants and the umm dormitory safety because the street the school thinks the dormitory safety is part of its vital importance to the attendance.
✓ Yes, there are several rules in my school for students, for instance strict rules for assistants and dormitory safety because the school thinks dormitory safety is vitally important to attendance.
原句中“that strict rules to assistants”结构不正确,且“the street the school”表达混乱,应改为“strict rules for assistants”且去掉多余词语,使句子更通顺。复数和单数的使用需与上下文一致。
× Yes, I have a history teacher. She does his job very well.
✓ Yes, I have a history teacher. She does her job very well.
句中“She does his job”中“his”与主语“she”性别不符,代词应保持一致,改为“her”。
× She is in my primary school years and her education thought is to teach students how to learn history in a more fundamental way and the deep learning of the subject, not just the knowledge from the books.
✓ She was my teacher during my primary school years, and her educational philosophy is to teach students how to learn history in a more fundamental way and to deeply understand the subject, not just the knowledge from the books.
原句中“She is in my primary school years”表达不准确,应使用过去时态“was my teacher during my primary school years”。“education thought”应为“educational philosophy”或“education thought”表达不清,改为“educational philosophy”。此外,句子结构混乱,需调整使表达更清晰。
× She is in my primary school years and her education thought is to teach students how to learn history in a more fundamental way and the deep learning of the subject, not just the knowledge from the books.
✓ She was my teacher during my primary school years, and her educational philosophy was to teach students how to learn history in a more fundamental way and to deeply understand the subject, not just the knowledge from the books.
描述过去的事情时,动词时态应使用过去时,原句中“is”和“thought is”应改为过去时“was”和“was”。