Part 1
Examinador
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Candidato
Of course there are many rules for students at my school. For example, for the girls your hair can't pass your ears and for boys your hairs can't longer than 11 CMI think is really terrible and you can't take your phone to school.
Examinador
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Candidato
No, I don't think so. I strongly believe that students have their own opinions and they they have their own habits. They don't have to obey more and more rules. For example, for some people, they can take their phone to school because they have to contact with their family and the other.
Examinador
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Candidato
Yes of course. When it comes to a nice teacher, the first person popped into my mind was my high school math teacher. She is really a nice and patient person. He teach, she teach me a lot and she really helps me very much.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题,且信息组织不够清晰。建议注意时态和单复数的正确使用,避免语句冗长,分句表达更清楚。
Exemplo: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For instance, girls are not allowed to have hair longer than their ears, and boys must keep their hair shorter than 11 centimeters. Also, students are not permitted to bring phones to school.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Pontuação: 55.0Sugestão: 回答中存在重复词汇和语法错误,表达不够连贯。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅,并且提供更具体的理由和例子。
Exemplo: No, I don't think more rules would benefit students. I believe that students have their own opinions and habits, so imposing too many rules can be restrictive. For example, some students need to bring their phones to stay in touch with their families.
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Pontuação: 50.0Sugestão: 回答中存在性别代词混用和语法错误,表达不够准确。建议注意代词一致性,使用正确的时态和句式,并丰富细节。
Exemplo: Yes, I do. The first teacher that comes to my mind is my high school math teacher. She is very kind and patient. She taught me a lot and helped me improve my skills significantly.
× for boys your hairs can't longer than 11 CM
✓ for boys your hair can't be longer than 11 CM
hair 是不可数名词,不能用复数形式 hairs。这里应使用单数形式 hair。
× your hairs can't longer than 11 CM
✓ your hair can't be longer than 11 CM
情态动词 can't 后面应接动词原形或 be + 形容词,不能直接接比较级 longer,需加 be 形成被动结构。
× you can't take your phone to school
✓ you can't take your phone to school
此句语法正确,无需修改。
× they they have their own habits
✓ they have their own habits
重复使用了代词 they,应删除多余的一个。
× they can take their phone to school because they have to contact with their family
✓ they can take their phone to school because they have to contact their family
动词 contact 后不需要介词 with,直接接宾语。
× and the other
✓ and others
短语 'and the other' 用法不当,应改为复数形式 others 表示其他人。
× He teach, she teach me a lot
✓ She teaches me a lot
前半句 'He teach' 与后文不符且语法错误,应删除;动词 teach 第三人称单数形式为 teaches。
× He teach, she teach me a lot
✓ She teaches me a lot
第三人称单数主语时,动词需加 -s,teach 应改为 teaches。