Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity and accuracy: answer directly, correct grammar, and keep within 2–3 clear sentences. Start with a topic sentence stating your preference, then give one brief reason with a linking word (because/so). Avoid irrelevant or confusing words.

Exemplo: I don’t like buying shoes very often. Because I tend to keep shoes for a long time and prefer to spend my money on other things, I usually only buy new shoes once a year or less.

Sugestão: Be concise and use correct vocabulary: give a clear yes/no, then one or two reasons using correct words (unreliable, try on, fit). Use linking words (because, so) and avoid unclear phrases.

Exemplo: No, I haven’t bought shoes online because sizes and fit can be unreliable. I prefer to try shoes on in a shop to make sure they match my clothes and feel comfortable.

Sugestão: State the amount clearly, then briefly explain why using a linking word (because/so). Use natural phrasing for spending habits and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I usually spend about 60,000 KRW on shoes because I’m not very interested in shopping for footwear. So I prefer to save that money or spend it on other things like hobbies.

Sugestão: Good idea and opinion; improve grammar and concision. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give one specific reason with a linking word (because) and a brief example. Correct small errors (fit, feet).

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because they need to fit well and support my feet. For example, when I walk or commute, comfortable shoes help me avoid pain and stay active.

× I do not like buying shares regularly because if I buy shoe at a start of year I always wear on the shoes and I do not like spend money on buying shoes.

✓ I do not like buying shoes regularly because if I buy a pair of shoes at the start of the year I always wear the shoes and I do not like to spend money on buying shoes.

Errors: 'share' vs 'shoes' unclear but main plural issue is 'buy shoe' (singular) which should be 'buy a pair of shoes' and 'at a start of year' needs articles; 'wear on the shoes' uses unnecessary preposition. Suggestions: use 'a pair of shoes' for one purchase, include articles 'the' or 'a', and use infinitive 'to spend'. Use 'at the start of the year' for time expressions.

× No I haven't because I think very unreal shoes and the shoping murder is really important to match my shoe and my fits. But when I buy on a line, I don't know

✓ No, I haven't because I think very unusual shoes and shopping in a store is really important to match my shoes and my outfits. But when I buy online, I don't know.

Errors: 'shoping' should be the gerund or noun 'shopping'; incorrect word 'murder' likely intended 'manner' or 'method' but context is 'shopping in a store' so use 'shopping in a store'. 'Buy on a line' should be 'buy online'. Suggestions: use correct gerund/noun forms and standard adverb 'online'; choose appropriate vocabulary ('unusual' not 'unreal'). Ensure gerund forms when using nouns for activities.

× I usually spend on shoes around sixty thousand KRW because I am not interested in buying shoes. So I want to say money or spend money on the other thing rather than shoes.

✓ I usually spend around sixty thousand KRW on shoes because I am not interested in buying many shoes. So I prefer to save or spend money on other things rather than shoes.

Errors: wrong preposition order 'spend on shoes around' should be 'spend around ... on shoes'. 'On the other thing' should be 'on other things'. Suggestions: place amount before 'on shoes' as 'spend around X on shoes'; use plural 'other things' and clearer verbs 'save or spend'.

× Between two, I love comfortable shoes because I think shoes should be comfortable and can fit to my to my fet. Whenever I go outside I have to feel comfortable on shoes.

✓ Between the two, I prefer comfortable shoes because I think shoes should be comfortable and fit my feet. Whenever I go outside, I need to feel comfortable in my shoes.

Errors: 'Between two' needs article 'the two'; 'can fit to my to my fet' has pronoun and spelling errors—'fit my feet' is correct without 'to'. 'Feel comfortable on shoes' should be 'comfortable in my shoes'. Suggestions: use correct object pronouns and prepositions for footwear: 'fit my feet' and 'comfortable in my shoes'; use definite article with 'the two' and correct spelling 'feet'.