Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and repetition. Also reduce length to under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially sneakers. I usually buy them when there is a sale because I can save money, so I wait for discounts before purchasing. For example, I often browse online stores during seasonal sales to find styles I like at lower prices.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence, then give specific details (brand, model, reason, price) more smoothly with linking words; correct small hesitations and avoid repeating words. Keep to four sentences max.

Exemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online. For example, I purchased the Adidas Adios 9 running shoes because they are very lightweight and comfortable. I bought them during a sale: the original price was 599 but I paid around 380, which was a great deal. Because of the discount, I felt it was good value for money.

Sugestão: Start with a direct statement giving the price range, then explain the reason with a linking word (because/so). Avoid filler words and minor grammar errors (e.g., 'those money' → 'that money'). Keep it brief and specific.

Exemplo: I usually spend between 200 and 600. I wouldn't spend more than that because I think higher prices are excessive, and I prefer to use extra money for everyday expenses.

Sugestão: Give a concise opinion first, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, and). Finish your sentence—avoid trailing off. Include how this affects choices (e.g., types of shoes you buy).

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because I have a bunion and a low arch in my left foot, so supportive designs are important. Therefore, I choose shoes with wide toe boxes and good arch support rather than purely fashionable styles.

× Uh, there isn't a specific time where I would say, oh, it's time to buy shoes, but I mostly get them when there's an offer and I really like the shoes.

✓ Uh, there isn't a specific time when I would say, oh, it's time to buy shoes, but I mostly get them when there's an offer and I really like the shoes.

Use 'when' not 'where' to refer to a time. 'There is' structure is fine but the relative adverb for time is 'when'. Suggestion: replace 'where' with 'when' to correctly link to 'time'.

× Yeah, I have bought a pair for myself. Actually.

✓ Yeah, I have bought a pair for myself.

The fragment 'Actually.' is a sentence fragment with no verb or clear role (Sentence without a verb / sentence structure error). Removing the isolated word keeps the present perfect sentence correct. Suggestion: combine 'Actually' into the previous sentence if emphasizing: 'Actually, I have bought a pair for myself.'

× It is the Adidas Adi 0 Adios 9.

✓ It is the Adidas Adi Zero Adios 9.

This item seems to contain a naming/typing error rather than a grammar error; if the speaker intended a model name 'Adi Zero Adios 9' ensure correct product naming and articles as needed. If sticking to grammar categories, use 'the' before a specific model is acceptable. Suggestion: confirm and use the correct product name and keep 'the' before a specific model.

× It's a pair of running shoes and it's very lightweight.

✓ They're a pair of running shoes and they're very lightweight.

Referring to 'a pair of shoes' can take plural pronoun 'they' because 'shoes' are plural. Using 'it' is not the best match; use 'they' or rephrase: 'It is a pair of running shoes and it is very lightweight' is possible if you treat 'pair' as singular, but 'they' sounds more natural. Suggestion: use 'they' to refer back to 'shoes' or rephrase to 'The pair is very lightweight.'

× I bought it because it was on a sale.

✓ I bought them because they were on sale.

Use 'on sale' without the article 'a'. Also pronouns should match plurality: 'them'/'they' for shoes. Suggestion: change 'it' to 'them', 'it was' to 'they were', and remove 'a' before 'sale'.

× The original price was was about 599 and I got it at around 380, so it was pretty big this.

✓ The original price was about 599 and I got them for around 380, so the discount was pretty big.

There is a repeated word 'was was' (typo). Pronouns must match plurality: use 'them' for shoes. Use 'for' with a purchase price. The phrase 'so it was pretty big this' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'so the discount was pretty big' or 'so that was a big saving'. Suggestion: remove duplicate 'was', change 'it' to 'them', use 'for around 380', and rephrase ending for clarity.

× Well, I normally spend anywhere from 200 to maybe 600.

✓ Well, I normally spend anywhere from 200 to maybe 600.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable for present habitual action. No correction needed. Suggestion: add currency unit (e.g., 'dollars') for clarity.

× Uh, if it's anything above that I would not consider getting them 'cause I think that is way too much of A spending on shoes and I can definitely use those money on daily stuff.

✓ Uh, if it's anything above that I would not consider buying them because I think that is way too much to spend on shoes and I could definitely use that money for daily expenses.

Colloquial 'cause' should be 'because' in formal grammar. 'Getting them' is acceptable but 'buying them' is clearer. 'Way too much of a spending' is ungrammatical; use 'too much to spend' or 'a lot to spend'. 'Those money' is incorrect; use 'that money'. 'On daily stuff' is informal; use 'for daily expenses'. Suggestion: replace colloquialisms, correct quantifier phrases and pronouns, and use 'could' or 'can' consistently.

× Oh I think it's a very hard question but if I had to pick one I would say comfortable because I actually have a bit of a bunion problem with my feet and so having comfortable shoes would be better and also I have a low arc in my left foot and.

✓ Oh, I think it's a very hard question, but if I had to pick one I would say comfortable, because I actually have a bit of a bunion problem with my feet, and having comfortable shoes would be better; I also have a low arch in my left foot.

Run-on sentence and conjunction misuse: the original uses many 'and' connectors and ends abruptly with 'and.' 'Low arc' should be 'low arch'. Punctuation and clause division are needed to avoid a run-on. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses, replace 'and so' with a comma or semicolon, correct 'arc' to 'arch', and remove trailing 'and' or finish the thought.