Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers both parts: whether you like buying shoes and how often. Use one or two supporting details with linking words and correct word choice (e.g., “I prefer buying shoes online because markets are crowded”). Avoid repetition (e.g., “heels and also heel shoes” is redundant).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I do it occasionally, mainly online. I prefer online shopping because local markets are often too crowded, so it’s more convenient and saves time. I usually look for heels since I like dressing up for events.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and a specific reason with clearer grammar and vocabulary. Replace vague phrases like “good material” and “branded brands” with precise descriptions (e.g., “quality materials” or “well-known brands”). Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” and avoid repeating the same idea.

Exemplo: Yes, I have. I often buy shoes online because I can find well-known brands and better-quality materials at competitive prices. For example, last month I ordered leather loafers from a reputable retailer and they arrived in good condition.

Sugestão: Answer with a clear amount range and correct sentence structure. Use a topic sentence stating your typical budget, then add a brief explanation or example. Replace unclear phrases such as “minimum maximum prices” with “I usually spend between… and …”.

Exemplo: I usually spend between ₹800 and ₹2,000 on a pair of shoes. I prefer affordable options because I buy shoes for everyday use rather than expensive designer pairs.

Sugestão: Give a direct preference with one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and appropriate vocabulary. Use linking words like “because” and give clear examples of discomfort (e.g., “cause blisters” rather than “shoe bites”). Avoid repetition of the word “comfortable.”

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods and they prevent problems like blisters. For example, I usually choose cushioned sneakers for work since fashionable heels often cause discomfort after a few hours.

× 'Yes I like to buy a shoes but in online sites because I'm going to the market there are many crowded so that reason I prefer online shopping.'

✓ 'Yes, I like to buy shoes on online sites because the market is very crowded, so I prefer online shopping.'

'a shoes' is incorrect article+noun; 'shoes' is plural so no article needed. Use 'on online sites' or 'on online shopping sites'; 'in online sites' -> 'on online sites'. 'there are many crowded' is ungrammatical; change to 'the market is very crowded'. Add commas for clarity.'

× 'I like heels and also heel shoes.'

✓ 'I like high heels and heeled shoes.'

'heel shoes' is incorrect word order and choice; use 'high heels' or 'heeled shoes' to describe shoes with heels. Adjective 'high' modifies 'heels'; 'heeled' is correct adjective form for shoes with heels.'

× 'Yes, I bought shoes online because there are many good material and good shoes branded brands are come out in the online site.'

✓ 'Yes, I bought shoes online because there is a lot of good material and many good branded shoes available on the website.'

Mixed tenses and number errors: 'there are many good material' should be 'there is a lot of good material' (material uncountable). 'good shoes branded brands are come out' is ungrammatical; use 'many good branded shoes available' and keep past action consistent by 'I bought' while describing general availability in present simple.'

× 'So that reason I buy a shoes online.'

✓ 'For that reason, I buy shoes online.'

'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'. Use 'For that reason' rather than 'So that reason' for natural phrasing. Add comma after introductory phrase.'

× 'I don't do much money spend on the shoes because I like minimum maximum prices shoes is like under ₹1000 and sometime 2000 that's all.'

✓ 'I don't spend much money on shoes because I prefer low-priced shoes, usually under ₹1000, sometimes up to ₹2000.'

'I don't do much money spend' is incorrect word order; correct verb phrase is 'I don't spend much money'. 'on the shoes' -> 'on shoes' (no article). 'minimum maximum prices shoes is like' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I prefer low-priced shoes' and use plural agreement and correct prepositions. Use commas for clarity.'

× 'Uh, I prefer comfortable shoes because you can feel comfortable and you can work always comfortable other than the fashionable because mostly fashionable shoes is sometime shoe bites and sometime smell.'

✓ 'I prefer comfortable shoes because they are comfortable to wear and you can work in them all day. Fashionable shoes often cause blisters and sometimes have an odor.'

'you can feel comfortable' mixes pronouns; when speaking about shoes use 'they' or 'they are comfortable to wear'. 'you can work always comfortable' -> 'you can work in them all day'. 'other than the fashionable' -> 'rather than fashionable ones'. 'mostly fashionable shoes is sometime shoe bites and sometime smell' has subject-verb agreement and word choice errors: use 'often cause blisters' and 'sometimes have an odor'. Ensure plural agreement and natural collocations.'