Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct verb forms (collect, prefer) and use singular/plural consistently. Avoid repetition like “collect a collection.” Mention a clear frequency phrase.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I prefer sports shoes and like to collect different styles, so I usually buy a new pair about every six months.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a concise reason with clearer vocabulary and linking words. Avoid filler words (uh) and redundant phrases. Use correct nouns/articles (a/the shoes → shoes or a pair of shoes). Provide one clear supporting detail, e.g., trying on or avoiding fraud.

Exemplo: No, I have never bought shoes online because I worry about fraud and fitting problems. Therefore, I prefer going to a physical store where I can try on shoes and check the quality before buying.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct estimate or general statement, then explain reasons briefly using linking words. Use correct collocations (reasonable price, high-end shoes, comfort and durability) and avoid repeating the same idea. Give a specific price range if possible.

Exemplo: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes, around $50–$100 per pair, because I value comfort and durability more than expensive brands. For daily wear I prefer reliable, well-made shoes rather than high-end fashion ones.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (comfortable shoes), avoid repetition and unfinished ideas. Use concrete examples to illustrate daily situations where comfort matters.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because they make walking and standing for long periods much easier. For example, when I go to work or do grocery shopping I choose shoes with good support so my feet don’t hurt at the end of the day.

× Yes, I like to buy new shoes. I like to collected collection, I like to collect a collection of the different shoes like I most probably prefer to be a sports shoes and I buy once a while in six months.

✓ Yes, I like to buy new shoes. I like to collect a variety of different shoes. I most probably prefer sports shoes and I buy them once every six months.

The phrase 'collected' is the past participle and is incorrectly used instead of the base verb 'collect'. 'Collected collection' is redundant; use 'collect a variety of' or 'collect different'. 'Be a sports shoes' is incorrect: use 'prefer sports shoes' and match plural noun 'shoes' with appropriate pronouns ('them'). 'Once a while in six months' is unnatural; use 'once every six months'. Improve by using base verb forms for habitual actions and clear, idiomatic time expressions.

× No I never bought a shoes online because I find it can some it can give uh fraud or any fault in the shoes and I most prefer to visit a store because it's more easy and convenient to check and buy your according to choice and what matter the most to me.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I think it can sometimes lead to fraud or defects in the shoes, and I prefer to visit a store because it is easier and more convenient to check and buy according to my choice; that matters most to me.

Use present perfect 'have never bought' for past experience up to now. 'A shoes' is wrong—use plural 'shoes' without 'a'. 'I find it can some it can give' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I think it can sometimes lead to'. Use 'defects' or 'faults' instead of 'any fault'. 'More easy' should be 'easier'. Reorganize sentence for clarity and correct verb forms for experiences and habitual preferences.

× I prefer to buy a shoes at reasonable price because I need more comfort and reliable shoes rather than the big brands or the high fi shoes because I prefer to promote comfortability and reliability.

✓ I prefer to buy shoes at a reasonable price because I need comfortable and reliable shoes rather than big brands or high-end shoes; I value comfort and reliability.

'A shoes' is incorrect—'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'. Use 'a reasonable price' with the article before singular 'price'. 'Comfortability' is nonstandard; use 'comfort'. 'High fi' is informal/misspelled; use 'high-end'. Use parallel adjective structure 'comfortable and reliable shoes'. Streamline repetition by stating 'I value comfort and reliability.'

× Undoubtedly, I prefer a comfortable shoes because they are more easy to wear and we can walk easily and feel comfortable for the daily use. Moreover, the moreover, if we want to go for the like for the local work and forever buy a grocery or to buy something.

✓ Undoubtedly, I prefer comfortable shoes because they are easier to wear; we can walk easily and feel comfortable for daily use. Also, if we want to go to do local errands or buy groceries, comfortable shoes are better.

'A comfortable shoes' wrongly combines singular article with plural noun; use 'comfortable shoes' without 'a'. 'More easy' should be 'easier'. Remove repetitive 'moreover'. 'For the daily use' -> 'for daily use'. 'Go for the like for the local work and forever buy a grocery' is ungrammatical; replace with 'go to do local errands or buy groceries'. Use concise, idiomatic phrases and correct article-noun agreement.