Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and incorrect words (e.g., 'at buying', 'Hobbit'). Also use correct verb forms and plural/singular (e.g., 'when I need them'). Aim for 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really. I only buy shoes when I need them, usually about once a year, because I prefer basic, durable styles. For example, I tend to choose neutral trainers or work shoes that are comfortable and long-lasting.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and coherence. Use linking words correctly (firstly, secondly) and correct verb forms (is cheaper -> are cheaper; it save times -> it saves time). Be specific about how you check sizes or which sites you use. Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I have. Firstly, online shoes are often cheaper, and secondly, they save time because I don't have to visit shops. I usually check size charts and read customer reviews to make sure the fit is right.

Sugestão: Be clear and use realistic, correctly formatted amounts. Begin with a direct statement about your typical budget, then explain why. Avoid long hesitations and unclear phrasing. Use currency correctly (e.g., '$50 to $150') and give one reason for your range.

Exemplo: I usually spend about $50 to $150 on a pair of shoes because I buy practical, durable styles rather than high-end brands. This range feels affordable and gives me reliable quality for everyday use.

Sugestão: Make your preference clear and balance opinion with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words to add contrast if needed (e.g., although, however). Avoid repetition and small grammar errors (e.g., 'that's for the outfit'). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer fashionable shoes because dressing well helps me express my personality and boosts my confidence. However, I still make sure they are reasonably comfortable, for example choosing stylish sneakers that look good but have cushioning.

× I'm not interested at buying shoes.

✓ I'm not interested in buying shoes.

Use 'interested in' not 'interested at'. The correct preposition after 'interested' is 'in'. Replace 'at' with 'in' to form the correct phrase 'interested in buying'.

× so I usually just buy shoes when I need it maybe once a year

✓ so I usually just buy shoes when I need them, maybe once a year

The pronoun must agree in number with 'shoes' (plural), so use 'them' instead of 'it'. Also add a comma before 'maybe once a year' for clarity.

× and I just buy the basic and essential ones that can be tough and easy to work.

✓ and I just buy basic, essential ones that are tough and easy to wear.

Use adjectives correctly: 'basic, essential' without 'the' for general reference. 'Can be' is inappropriate here; use 'are' to describe the shoes. 'To work' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'to wear' for shoes. Also add a comma between coordinate adjectives.

× So I think shoes for me is just a necessary, not a Hobbit.

✓ So I think shoes for me are just a necessity, not a hobby.

Subject 'shoes' is plural, so use plural verb 'are' instead of 'is'. 'Necessary' should be a noun 'necessity' in this context. 'Hobbit' is incorrect word choice; the intended word is 'hobby'.

× Have you ever bought shoes online? Student: Yeah, recently I enjoy buying shoes online.

✓ Yeah, recently I've enjoyed buying shoes online.

When referring to a recent period continuing to the present, use present perfect 'have enjoyed'. 'Enjoy' alone suggests a habitual present; 'recently' pairs better with present perfect.

× First is because the price will be more cheaper

✓ First, because the price is cheaper

Do not use 'more cheaper' (double comparative). Use 'cheaper' alone. Also 'will be' is unnecessary; the simple present 'is' states a general fact.

× and then second is actually it save times.

✓ and secondly, it actually saves time.

Use 'secondly' or 'second' for sequence, not 'then second'. 'It saves time' requires third person singular verb 'saves'. Use singular 'time' for the uncountable concept.

× I don't need to try it in the shop and I I just need to check my size and then make sure it's correct.

✓ I don't need to try them on in the shop; I just need to check my size and make sure it's correct.

Use 'try them on' (phrasal verb for shoes) and plural pronoun 'them'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Use a semicolon or split into two clauses for clarity. 'Make sure it's correct' is fine referring to the size.

× Because for me shoes is only a necessary.

✓ Because for me shoes are only a necessity.

Plural subject 'shoes' takes plural verb 'are'. Use the noun 'necessity' rather than adjective 'necessary' to state that shoes are something necessary.

× So I think I'll pick the shoes around $590.00 to 15 hundreds anti dollars.

✓ So I think I'll pick shoes that cost around $590 to $1,500.

Use a clear numeric range with consistent format. '$590.00 to 15 hundreds anti dollars' is incorrect and unclear. Use '$1,500' instead of '15 hundreds' and remove 'anti dollars' which is invalid.

× I think that is more affordable and more reliable prices for me.

✓ I think that is a more affordable and reliable price for me.

Use singular 'price' or 'a more affordable and reliable option/choice'. 'More' repeated is unnecessary; coordinate adjectives can share 'more'. Match number and article (a price).

× And I think I will mainly focus on the uh.

✓ And I think I will mainly focus on that.

The sentence 'focus on the uh' is incomplete and contains a filler. Replace with a complete object such as 'that' or specify what will be focused on.

× Oh, I prefer the fashionable shoes first because I think having a perfect dress code can help you express yourself and build up your own confidence.

✓ Oh, I prefer fashionable shoes because I think having a suitable outfit can help you express yourself and build your confidence.

Do not use 'the' with general plural 'fashionable shoes' when speaking generally. 'First' is unnecessary here. 'Perfect dress code' is awkward; 'suitable outfit' fits better. 'Build up your own confidence' is wordy; use 'build your confidence'.

× So I think having a better shoes that's for the outfit is important.

✓ So I think having better shoes that match the outfit is important.

'Shoes' is plural, so use 'better shoes' without 'a'. 'That's for the outfit' is ungrammatical; use 'that match the outfit'.

× So I will choose the fashionable shoes.

✓ So I will choose fashionable shoes.

Article 'the' makes reference to specific shoes; for general preference use zero article: 'fashionable shoes'. This matches earlier general statements.