Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 간결하고 자연스럽게 응답하세요. 우선 직접 질문에 대해 간단한 주제문을 말하고(예: 거의 사지 않는다), 그 이유를 1~2개의 구체적 근거로 연결사(so, because, although)로 이어 주세요. 불필요한 중복(‘buy it’, ‘very’)을 줄이고 문장 수를 3~4문장 이내로 유지하세요.

Exemplo: I don't buy shoes very often because they are quite expensive. I usually only buy new ones when my old shoes are worn out. For that reason, I try to choose durable pairs that last longer so I can save money.

Sugestão: 명확한 주제문으로 시작하세요(예: 가끔 산다). 온라인 구매 경험과 이유를 논리적으로 연결하고, 문법 오류(주어, 동사, 관사)를 고치세요. ‘God’ 같은 불필요한 단어는 제거하고, 사이즈 때문에 직접 신어봐야 한다는 점을 구체적으로 설명하세요.

Exemplo: I have bought shoes online a few times, but not often. I prefer buying in person because sizes can vary between brands, so it's easier to try them on to make sure they fit properly.

Sugestão: 가격을 말할 때는 단위와 범위를 분명히 하세요(예: around $50 or about 100,000 won). 브랜드 언급은 간결하게 하고 이유(품질, 스타일)로 구체화하세요. 반복 표현(‘very very’)을 피하고, 문장 구조를 단순화하세요.

Exemplo: I usually spend around 100,000 won on a pair of shoes because I prefer Adidas; I find their shoes comfortable and durable. If I'm buying a casual pair, I might spend less, but for sports shoes I spend more.

Sugestão: 명확한 이유를 간결하게 제시하세요. 주제문으로 선호를 바로 말하고, 이유는 구체적으로(예: 많이 걷기 때문에, 오랜 시간 착용) 연결사를 사용해 설명하세요. 문법과 어휘 오류(‘I'll see them’, ‘my food’)를 고치고 한두 개의 구체적 예시를 덧붙이세요.

Exemplo: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I walk and stand for long periods while studying in the library. For example, I usually choose sneakers with good cushioning so my feet don't hurt after several hours.

× Not really because the price is very high these days and I have no money to buy it so I can't buy shoes very often.

✓ Not really, because prices are very high these days and I have no money to buy them, so I can't buy shoes very often.

The sentence uses 'the price' and 'it' incorrectly. 'Price' should be plural 'prices' when speaking generally, and pronoun 'it' should match plural 'shoes' as 'them'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents.

× But when I have to buy some new shoes, I buy it.

✓ But when I have to buy some new shoes, I buy them.

The pronoun 'it' does not agree in number with 'shoes' (plural). Use 'them' for plural objects. Also maintain simple present tense 'buy' which is appropriate here.

× Yes, God is very sometimes because I think shoes are very different size, so I have to wear in person and know whether it is fit my shoe fit.

✓ Yes, sometimes I do, because I think shoes come in very different sizes, so I have to try them on in person to know whether they fit me.

The original sentence has multiple structural issues: misplaced words ('God is very sometimes'), wrong adjective/noun forms ('different size' should be 'different sizes'), incorrect verb phrases ('wear in person' -> 'try them on in person'), and pronoun/verb agreement ('it is fit my shoe fit' -> 'they fit me'). Suggestion: simplify clause order, use 'sometimes' as adverb, 'come in different sizes', 'try on' for shoes, and ensure pronouns agree with 'shoes'.

× Maybe 100,001 because I usually take a Adidas shoes but they are very very expensive so I usually spend my pocket money to buy Adidas shoes.

✓ Maybe 100,000 won because I usually buy Adidas shoes, but they are very expensive, so I usually spend my pocket money to buy them.

Problems include incorrect numeral formatting ('100,001' unclear), article use before brand ('a Adidas' -> 'Adidas shoes' or 'an Adidas pair' but better 'Adidas shoes'), plural agreement and pronoun reference ('them' for shoes). Also remove duplicated 'very'. Suggestion: state currency clearly, use 'buy' not 'take', and ensure articles before vowel sounds if needed.

× I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because these days I'm busy studying for the I'll see them so I go to a library every day and I prefer comfortable because my I think my food is have to compare.

✓ I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because these days I'm busy studying; I go to the library every day, so I prefer comfort over fashion.

Original sentence contains tense and cohesion errors ('studying for the I'll see them' is meaningless), repetition ('I prefer comfortable' twice), and incorrect phrasing ('my I think my food is have to compare'). Simplify to clear reasons: use present continuous 'I'm busy studying', 'I go to the library every day', and the phrase 'prefer comfort over fashion' to express comparison. Suggestion: make one clear reason per clause and remove redundant or unclear fragments.