Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like “I like buying shoes before” and redundant phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to enjoy buying shoes, but I don’t do it much now because I’m working and need to be practical with my salary. For example, I prioritize essentials, so I usually only buy new shoes once or twice a year.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence and reduce repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and give one specific example of a platform or a benefit. Replace informal phrases like “no brainer” with natural expressions.

Exemplo: Yes, I mostly buy shoes online now because it’s much more convenient. For instance, I often use Shopee or Lazada to compare styles and prices, and I save time since I rarely have time to visit malls.

Sugestão: Be precise and avoid mixed tenses or vague terms. Start with a clear figure, then explain briefly why you set a budget, using linking words. Use correct singular/plural and phrasing (e.g., “range” not “ranges”).

Exemplo: I usually spend between 2,000 and 3,000 pesos on a pair of shoes because I set a budget to be practical with my salary. For example, I prefer to allocate more money to groceries and savings than to fashion items.

Sugestão: Answer directly and concisely with one clear preference, then give specific reasons and an example. Avoid unnecessary repetition and awkward phrases like “it's not pretty convenient.” Use linking words to connect reason to preference.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I walk a lot around my neighborhood. For example, I choose sneakers with good cushioning so I can walk for an hour without discomfort.

× Yes, I like buying shoes before.

✓ Yes, I used to like buying shoes.

The original uses 'before' with present simple 'like', which is awkward for a past habitual action. Use 'used to' to express a past habit. Also 'like buying shoes before' is unclear; 'used to like buying shoes' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'used to' for past habits (I used to ...).

× However, because I'm working now and I tend to be practical with what I spend on with my salary, I don't buy shoes often anymore.

✓ However, because I am working now and tend to be practical with my salary, I don't buy shoes often anymore.

Redundant and awkward phrasing 'what I spend on with my salary'. Simplify to 'practical with my salary'. Also 'I'm working now and I tend' can be tightened to 'I am working now and tend'. Suggestions: Remove redundant words and keep parallel structure.

× Buying shoes online is what I do now.

✓ Buying shoes online is what I do now.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. (No error from provided list.)

× Scanning the online platform and buying shoes there is pretty convenient for me.

✓ Browsing online platforms and buying shoes there is pretty convenient for me.

'Scanning the online platform' is awkward collocation. Use 'browsing online platforms' for natural phrasing. Also keep plural 'platforms' to match general reference.

× Especially that I don't get to spend time or go to malls anymore just to buy shoes.

✓ Especially since I don't get to spend time or go to malls anymore just to buy shoes.

Using 'that' after 'especially' is informal and nonstandard in this context. 'Since' gives the causal meaning. Suggestion: Use 'since' or rephrase 'Because I don't...' for clarity.

× So online channels to buy shoes for me is a no brainer anymore.

✓ So online channels to buy shoes for me are a no-brainer now.

The subject 'online channels' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'no brainer' should be hyphenated as 'no-brainer' and 'anymore' is better as 'now' in this context.

× The shoes I have bought recently ranges from 2000 to 3000 pesos, so I usually have a cap or a Max for the shoes I buy because I tend to be practical with my salary.

✓ The shoes I have bought recently range from 2000 to 3000 pesos, so I usually set a cap or a maximum for the shoes I buy because I tend to be practical with my salary.

'The shoes... range' requires plural verb 'range' to agree with plural subject 'shoes'. 'Cap or a Max' is awkward; use 'set a cap or a maximum'. Avoid capitalizing 'Max'.

× I'd rather spend it on food rather than shoes.

✓ I'd rather spend it on food than on shoes.

Using 'rather... rather than' is redundant here. Correct comparative construction is 'rather... than...' Also include 'on' before 'shoes' to parallel 'on food'.

× Because I am in my 30s already, I'd rather buy comfortable shoes.

✓ Because I am already in my 30s, I'd rather buy comfortable shoes.

Word order 'in my 30s already' is acceptable but 'already in my 30s' is more natural. No major grammatical error; this is a stylistic improvement.

× If I get to walk around the streets in my neighborhood, it's not pretty convenient.

✓ If I walk around the streets in my neighborhood, it's not very convenient.

'Get to walk' is unnecessary; use 'walk'. 'Pretty convenient' is informal and 'pretty' with negative meaning is inaccurate; 'not very convenient' is clearer. Also 'the streets' is acceptable but 'walk around the streets' is fine.

× So comfortable shoes are very significant when it comes to walking.

✓ So comfortable shoes are very important when it comes to walking.

'Significant' is awkward here; 'important' is the natural collocation with 'comfortable shoes' and context. Use common collocations for clarity.

× And I like comfort more than fashion now, so comfortable shoes it is.

✓ I prefer comfort to fashion now, so comfortable shoes it is.

'Like comfort more than fashion' is acceptable but 'prefer comfort to fashion' is more idiomatic. The phrase 'comfortable shoes it is' is informal but can be kept; the corrected sentence is more natural.