Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct word choice (use 'shoes' not 'suits'), start with a clear topic sentence, and add one specific detail about buying frequency or types. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I prefer ones that are both comfortable and stylish. I usually buy new shoes about once a year, choosing durable brands that last three to four years.

Sugestão: Use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'online' as an adverb, 'size' and 'try them on'), give a brief reason and one supporting example, and avoid filler words. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: No, I have never bought shoes online because I find it hard to judge the fit without trying them on. Therefore I prefer visiting a physical store to try shoes on and ensure the size and comfort are right.

Sugestão: Open with a clear topic sentence about spending habits, avoid redundancy, and use precise phrasing (e.g., 'I don’t buy shoes often, but I invest in quality brands that cost around...'). Add a specific price range or percentage to make it concrete.

Exemplo: I don’t buy shoes often, but when I do I invest in quality branded pairs that cost around $80–$150. I prefer to pay more for durability, because a good pair usually lasts four to five years.

Sugestão: Use correct nouns ('shoes' not 'suits'), avoid fillers and repetition, and state preference clearly then support with 1–2 specific reasons or an example. Keep within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because I need to be able to move and stand for long periods. For example, I often choose flat sneakers or low boots that pair well with jeans and are suitable for a full day of activities.

× Yes, I like buying shoes, and I love to wear comfortable and fashionable shoes because they are more convenient and easy to wear.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes, and I love wearing comfortable and fashionable shoes because they are more convenient and easy to wear.

The original uses 'love to wear' which is not incorrect but 'love wearing' is more natural and parallel with 'like buying'. This is an adjective/adverb usage issue in style and parallel structure; use the gerund to match 'like buying' for smoother, more idiomatic English.

× And I usually buy suits once a year because shoes are very expensive and I use them for three to four years.

✓ And I usually buy shoes once a year because shoes are very expensive and I use them for three to four years.

The student used 'suits' instead of 'shoes', a wrong lexical choice causing a singular/plural/confusion error. Replace with the correct plural noun 'shoes' to match context and meaning.

× No, I have never bought any shoes online because in online you cannot decide which size will fit you perfectly.

✓ No, I have never bought any shoes online because online you cannot decide which size will fit you perfectly.

The phrase 'in online' is incorrect. Use 'online' without a preposition or say 'on the internet'. This is a preposition usage error; remove 'in' to correct the expression.

× So I usually go to the physical shop and try it with my real slick so that it fits me perfectly and.

✓ So I usually go to a physical shop and try shoes on with my actual socks so that they fit me perfectly.

Multiple problems: 'try it with my real slick' is unclear and uses wrong words/pronouns. 'Try shoes on' requires plural 'they' to agree with 'shoes'. 'Real slick' is likely meant to be 'real socks' or 'actual socks'. This is primarily incorrect pronoun and word choice; correct to 'try shoes on with my actual socks' and use 'they fit' for agreement.

× Normally, I do not buy shoes that often. However, when I buy shoes, then I spend a lot of money in shoes because I always buy the shoes which are more expensive and branded ones so that it will last longer, about four to five years.

✓ Normally, I do not buy shoes that often. However, when I buy shoes, I spend a lot of money on them because I always buy more expensive, branded shoes so that they will last longer, about four to five years.

Errors include preposition use ('spend money on'), pronoun agreement ('on them'), article and demonstrative use, and singular/plural agreement ('they will last'). This mainly concerns present tense and subject-verb/pronoun agreement: use simple present 'I spend' (not 'then I spend'), 'on them' instead of 'in shoes', and plural reference 'they will last'.

× Obviously I would prefer comfortable suits because uh, being comfortable to do any kinds of activities is most important and I cannot work work for hours by wearing high heels.

✓ Obviously I would prefer comfortable shoes because being comfortable while doing any kind of activity is most important and I cannot work for hours wearing high heels.

'Suits' is the wrong noun; 'shoes' fits. Word order and adjective/adverb phrases need correction: use 'being comfortable while doing' and 'any kind of activity' (singular after 'any'). Remove duplicated 'work'. This is an adjective/adverb and word choice issue to make the sentence natural and grammatical.

× So I prefer to wear comfortable and easy going shoes that will go with every outfit like jeans.

✓ So I prefer to wear comfortable, easy-going shoes that go with every outfit, like jeans.

Use hyphenated adjective 'easy-going' and simpler present 'go' instead of 'will go' to sound natural when stating preferences. This is an adjective/adverb usage and tense preference issue; present simple is appropriate for general truths.