Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes, then give a simple frequency and one reason. Use linking words if you add a second supporting detail. Work on fluency to remove fillers and hesitations.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I buy them fairly often—about once every two months—because I like having different styles for work and weekends.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and vocabulary (shoe, not show). Give a clear frequency and a brief reason. Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid repeating the same idea.

Exemplo: Yes, I sometimes buy shoes online when I find a wider selection. I prefer online shopping because it lets me compare styles and read reviews before I decide.

Sugestão: Give a specific amount or range and explain why you choose that budget. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Structure your answer: state the amount, then give a clear reason using a linking word (because/so).

Exemplo: I usually spend around $30–$50 on a pair of shoes because I like good value; I prefer affordable but durable styles rather than expensive brands.

Sugestão: Give a direct preference and support it with a clear, specific reason. Improve fluency by avoiding repetition and complete your sentence. Use a linking word (because/so) to connect the reason.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because I work long hours in a corporate job and need footwear that supports me all day. For example, I often choose cushioned loafers over high heels.

× Yes, I like buying shoes. I often buy shoes because I like, I love buying shoes and I love shoes. The, the, the, that's the reason I often buy these shoes, that is.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes. I often buy them because I enjoy it.

This sentence has repetitive phrases and poor sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type ID:26). Repeating 'I like, I love buying shoes and I love shoes' is redundant. Simplify by using a pronoun ('them') and a concise reason. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same idea and combine information into a single clear sentence.

× Yes, I sometimes bought shows online when I see many type of shows.

✓ Yes, I sometimes buy shoes online when I see many types of shoes.

This sentence uses an incorrect past tense 'bought' with 'sometimes' (a habitual adverb), so present simple 'buy' should be used (Grammar Problem Type ID:5 and 6). Also 'shows' is a misspelling of 'shoes' and 'many type' should be 'many types'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct plural formation for 'types'.

× I'm very interest, interest about shows and and that's why I, uh, shop online, uh, often because I love shows and I enjoy pair of shows.

✓ I'm very interested in shoes, and that's why I often shop online because I love shoes and enjoy trying pairs on.

The adjective 'interest' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'interested' and it requires the preposition 'in' (Grammar Problem Type ID:13 and 11). 'Pair of shows' should be 'pairs of shoes' or 'trying pairs on' to be natural. Remove filler words like 'uh' and duplicate words. Suggestion: use 'interested in' and pluralize 'pairs' when talking about multiple items.

× I am very low but low price money usually spent on shoes because I love shows but I cannot waste my money and that's why I always prefer reasonable price shows and that's that's it and I love shows.

✓ I usually spend very little on shoes because I love them but I don't want to waste money, so I prefer reasonably priced shoes.

This sentence has multiple issues: incorrect word choice ('low price money'), wrong word order, article and adjective formation ('reasonable price shows' should be 'reasonably priced shoes'), and run-on structure (Grammar Problem Type IDs:26 and 22). Use 'very little' to express small amount, 'don't' for negative, and 'reasonably priced' as the correct adjective phrase. Suggestion: break into shorter clauses and use proper adjective forms.

× Well, I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I am a corporate job holder.

✓ Well, I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I work in a corporate job.

'I am a corporate job holder' is awkward and uses incorrect noun phrasing; use 'I work in a corporate job' or 'I have a corporate job' (Grammar Problem Type ID:12 and 26). Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'work in a corporate job' or 'have a corporate job.'

× That means I I always carry shoes and I want to comfortable that's that's why I prefer comfortable shoes and I.

✓ That means I am on my feet a lot and I want to be comfortable, which is why I prefer comfortable shoes.

The phrase 'I always carry shoes' is incorrect; likely meaning 'I am on my feet a lot.' Also 'I want to comfortable' needs the verb 'to be' before the adjective (Grammar Problem Type IDs:12 and 26). Remove duplicated words and incomplete ending. Suggestion: express cause clearly ('I am on my feet a lot') and use 'be comfortable.'