Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and directly answer frequency; avoid unclear or repeated phrases (e.g. 'monadic'). Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes and how often, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and correct grammar (plural/singular agreement).

Exemplo: I don't buy shoes very often — maybe once or twice a year. Because I wear my shoes until they are worn out, I currently only own two pairs of shoes and two pairs of slippers, so I replace them only when necessary.

Sugestão: This answer is generally clear and relevant but could be improved by tightening language and adding a linking word to structure the response. Avoid repeating units and refine tense consistency. Add a brief comment about where you buy or a specific example to make it more concrete.

Exemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online. At first I was wary, but after I measured my feet in both inches and centimeters and followed the seller's size chart, the shoes fit well. For example, I ordered a pair of running shoes from Brand X and they arrived exactly as expected.

Sugestão: Give a direct estimate (a price range or typical cost) as your topic sentence, then explain briefly why your spending changed. Avoid repetition ('now' twice) and correct grammar (article and plural agreement). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: I usually spend between $50 and $120 on a good pair of shoes. When I was younger I bought cheaper pairs more frequently, but now I prefer to invest in more expensive shoes because they last much longer.

Sugestão: Start with a concise topic sentence stating your preference, then give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g. 'I walk a lot' twice and redundant numbers). Provide a small example of an activity that requires comfort to strengthen the answer.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because I walk a lot. For instance, when I travel I often take over 10,000 steps a day, so shoes with good support are essential for me.

× Currently I have only two pairs of shoes and two pairs of slippers because I'm a monadic.

✓ Currently I have only two pairs of shoes and two pairs of slippers because I'm monogamous.

The student used 'monadic' incorrectly; this is a word choice/pronoun/pronoun-related error in meaning. Replace with 'monogamous' to convey the intended idea of having one partner or being single-minded; however, if the intended meaning was 'minimalist' or 'only buy one type/brand', use that precise adjective. Suggestion: choose the correct adjective that matches intended meaning (monogamous, minimalist, or solitary).

× I tend to wear out my shoes and then replace it with another shoe.

✓ I tend to wear out my shoes and then replace them with another pair.

The pronoun 'it' does not agree with the plural noun 'shoes'. Use the plural pronoun 'them' and 'pair' to match number. Also 'another shoe' sounds odd when referring to shoes in general; 'another pair' is appropriate. Improve by matching number of noun and pronoun and using natural collocations ('pair of shoes').

× Yes, I've tried to buy shoes online.

✓ Yes, I've tried buying shoes online.

Both forms can be grammatical, but in this conversational context using the present perfect continuous or present perfect with gerund ('tried buying') more naturally emphasizes the experience. 'Tried to buy' implies attempted but possibly failed; 'tried buying' indicates success. Choose 'tried buying' to match the student's following description that it 'turned out fine.'

× At first I was kind of afraid to purchase online, but then I measured my feet, got the exact measurement, the inches, the centimeter, and I use it as a guide to purchase the right shoes for me and it turned out fine.

✓ At first I was kind of afraid to purchase online, but then I measured my feet, got the exact measurements in inches and centimeters, and used them as a guide to purchase the right shoes for me, and it turned out fine.

Errors include inconsistent verb tense ('use' should be past 'used' to match 'measured' and 'got'), number agreement ('measurement' should be plural 'measurements'), and unit phrasing ('the inches, the centimeter' should be 'inches and centimeters'). Also replace 'it' with clearer structure. Improve by keeping past tense consistent and using correct plural forms and unit names.

× Well, when I was younger I would buy many shoes at the cheaper price, but now that I've become older I now appreciate the value of purchasing a more expensive shoes that would last me years.

✓ Well, when I was younger I would buy many shoes at cheaper prices, but now that I'm older I appreciate the value of purchasing more expensive shoes that will last me years.

Multiple issues: 'the cheaper price' should be plural or uncountable ('cheaper prices' or 'cheaper price' without 'the'); 'I've become older' is awkward — use 'I'm older' or 'I've gotten older'; 'a more expensive shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun — remove the article or make noun singular ('a more expensive pair of shoes'). Also tense and modality: use 'will last' (future) or 'that last' (general truth). Improved sentence matches present perspective.

× I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes any day because I walk a lot, I walk a lot and whenever I travel I get to more than 10 thousand 10,000 steps.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones any day because I walk a lot, and whenever I travel I get more than 10,000 steps.

Repetition ('I walk a lot' twice) should be removed. Use 'fashionable ones' for natural pronoun reference. 'I get to more than 10 thousand 10,000 steps' is awkward: use 'I get more than 10,000 steps' or 'I walk more than 10,000 steps.' Also keep present simple tense consistent for habitual actions.