Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and structure your answer: start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you like buying shoes and how often, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (types/uses). Avoid filler words and repetition. Use correct verbs and prepositions (e.g., “I don’t buy shoes often,” “I use them for school and outdoor activities”).

Exemplo: I don't buy shoes very often; I only own three pairs. For example, I have a pair of black shoes that I wear to school and a pair of sturdy boots for outdoor activities.

Sugestão: Answer directly (yes/no), then add a clear reason or short past experience. Use correct tense and simpler sentence structures. Avoid unclear phrases like “if I have a just in that marketplace.” Say when or why you would buy online and mention one specific reason (convenience, price, selection).

Exemplo: No, I have never bought shoes online, but I have tried browsing marketplaces. If I save some extra money, I will buy shoes online because it is often cheaper and has more styles to choose from.

Sugestão: Give a clear typical price range and briefly explain the variation. Use numbers and currency consistently, and avoid unrelated comments about exchange rates unless they are concise and relevant. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

Exemplo: Prices vary a lot where I live, but I usually spend between 600 and 3,200 pesos on shoes. For special or branded shoes I might spend as much as 6,500 pesos.

Sugestão: Give a direct preference sentence, then one clear reason with a supporting detail. Avoid repetition and filler sounds. Use correct grammar: say “I prefer comfortable shoes because they protect my feet and help me stay comfortable when I walk a lot.”

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because they protect my feet and help me stay comfortable when I walk or stand for long periods.

× Umm I'm not often by uh buying shoes but I have 3 shoes like for example black shoes.

✓ Umm I don't often buy shoes, but I have three pairs, for example black shoes.

Errors: incorrect adverb placement ('not often by uh buying' is ungrammatical), singular/plural and article errors ('3 shoes' should be 'three pairs'), and sentence structure issues. Suggestion: Place frequency adverb before the main verb ('don't often buy'), use words for numbers in speech when writing, and use 'pairs' for footwear or keep count with 'shoes' plus appropriate quantifier. Also remove filler sounds when producing the final sentence.

× I use it in to the school and umm adventure shows that I used in.

✓ I use them for school and for adventures that I have been on.

Errors: pronoun and preposition misuse and incorrect verb form. 'It' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'shoes' (pronoun error), 'in to the school' should be 'for school' (preposition), and 'shows that I used in' is unclear; use present perfect 'have been on' to indicate experiences. Suggestion: match pronouns to noun number, choose correct prepositions ('for' purpose), and use present perfect to describe past experiences relevant to now.

× I never bought a show shoes in online but I tried to buy an online if I have a just in that marketplace and soon if I have extra money I will buy it online.

✓ I have never bought shoes online, but I tried to buy a pair on a marketplace before, and if I have extra money I will buy them online soon.

Errors: incorrect tense ('never bought' better as present perfect 'have never bought' for life experience), article and singular/plural mistakes ('a show shoes' wrong), preposition misuse ('in online' should be 'online' or 'on a marketplace'), and pronoun agreement. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences, use 'a pair' for shoes, use 'on' with 'marketplace', and ensure pronouns match number ('them').

× Umm for example in our country the BA, the value of the dollars and shoes are have a different in sometimes I buy Asus 6500 pesos and also 600 to 3200 pesos.

✓ For example, in our country the exchange rate makes shoe prices different. Sometimes I buy shoes for around 6500 pesos, and other times between 600 and 3200 pesos.

Errors: unclear clause structure, incorrect articles ('the BA' unclear), subject-verb issues ('prices are have a different' incorrect), and number formatting. Suggestion: clarify the subject (exchange rate or economy), use correct verbs ('makes prices different'), and express price ranges with 'between X and Y' or 'around X'. Spell out numbers consistently and remove unexplained abbreviations.

× I'm proper I'm prepared for comfortable shoes compared to the fashionable shoe shoes because comfortable shoes is it's it's helped my feet or foot that can can relax and also.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because comfortable shoes help my feet to relax.

Errors: wrong word choice ('proper' should be 'prefer'), repetition and filler words, pronoun and subject-verb agreement ('comfortable shoes is' should be 'comfortable shoes help'), pluralization ('shoe shoes' and 'ones'), and duplicated words ('can can'). Suggestion: use 'prefer' for preferences, compare using 'prefer A to B', ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subjects ('shoes help'), and remove duplicates and fillers for clarity.