Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce redundancy (e.g., repeated phrases about pairing) and correct minor grammar (e.g., "a pair of shoes").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and collect several pairs. For example, I keep different colours and styles so they match my outfits, and I usually buy a new pair every few months when I notice a trend or need a replacement.

Sugestão: Avoid vague praise and provide a brief reason or example to support your opinion. Use clearer grammar (e.g., "The shoes have been" instead of "it comes") and drop redundancy like "very great". Use one linking phrase to add detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. For instance, I often use Myntra because the sizing is reliable and the shoes I ordered were high quality and lasted well.

Sugestão: Give a clear, direct price range and one concrete detail about durability or a specific memorable purchase. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences; correct grammar (e.g., "those shoes lasted about...").

Exemplo: I usually spend between 2,500 and 3,000 rupees because I find shoes in that range are more durable. For example, I once paid 2,800 rupees for a pair that lasted almost two years.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and use a linking word to contrast choices. Remove filler words like "uh" and ensure subject-verb agreement (e.g., "that match"). Provide one brief reason for each preference.

Exemplo: Generally, I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday use because they are practical for walking. However, for parties or special events I choose fashionable shoes that match my outfit to look more polished.

× I even have a collection of different shoes because I like to have different colours and varieties of shoes which can pair, which I can pair with my different outfits.

✓ I even have a collection of different shoes because I like to have different colours and varieties of shoes that I can pair with my different outfits.

The phrase 'which can pair, which I can pair' is redundant and awkward. Replace with a single relative clause 'that I can pair' to correctly quantify and modify 'shoes' and improve clarity. Use 'that' for defining relative clauses and avoid duplicate phrasing. Suggestion: Remove redundancy and use one relative clause: 'that I can pair with my different outfits.'

× Whenever I go out, I always try to buy a pair of shoe for me according to the trend.

✓ Whenever I go out, I always try to buy a pair of shoes for myself according to the trend.

The noun 'shoe' should be plural when used with 'a pair of'. Also 'for me' is better expressed as the reflexive pronoun 'for myself' in this context. Correct plural form and pronoun improves grammatical agreement. Suggestion: Use 'a pair of shoes' and 'for myself.'

× Yes, I have purchased the shoes online many times and it comes in a really great quality.

✓ Yes, I have purchased shoes online many times and they have come in really great quality.

Using the definite article 'the' before 'shoes' is unnecessary here; 'shoes' in general should be plural without 'the'. Also 'it comes' mismatches the plural subject; use 'they have come' or 'they came' with present perfect. 'In a really great quality' is unidiomatic; use 'in really great quality' or 'of really good quality.' Suggestion: Remove unnecessary 'the', match plural verbs, and use idiomatic 'of really good quality.'

× I always buy shoes from Myntra which is a very great shopping app provider providing a very good quality of products.

✓ I always buy shoes from Myntra, which is a very good shopping app that provides products of very good quality.

The phrase 'very great' is nonstandard; use 'very good'. 'Providing a very good quality of products' is awkward: use 'that provides products of very good quality.' Insert comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which'. Suggestion: Use 'very good' instead of 'very great' and restructure clause for natural phrasing.

× I can buy shoes around 2500 to 3000 and I think in that range there are many durable shoes available that last longer.

✓ I usually buy shoes for around 2500 to 3000, and I think in that price range there are many durable shoes that last longer.

Use 'for around 2500 to 3000' to indicate price, and 'price range' clarifies meaning. 'Available that last longer' is redundant; remove 'available.' Suggestion: Specify 'for' with prices and use 'price range.'

× I remember the highest price I spent on a shoe pair was of uh, 2400 something, and that shoes lasted for around uh.

✓ I remember the highest price I spent on a pair of shoes was about 2400, and those shoes lasted for around...

Use 'a pair of shoes' rather than 'shoe pair'. 'Was of 2400 something' is awkward; use 'was about 2400.' 'That shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and needs 'those' not 'that'. Ensure verb tense consistency: 'lasted' is past tense and appropriate here. Suggestion: Use 'a pair of shoes', 'about 2400', and 'those shoes.'

× Casually, I prefer comfortable shoes if I have to just wear it here and there.

✓ Usually, I prefer comfortable shoes if I have to just wear them here and there.

'Casually' is awkward; 'usually' fits better. 'Shoes' is plural so pronoun should be 'them' not 'it.' Suggestion: Use 'usually' and match plural pronoun 'them.'

× But uh, for a specific occasion such as party or any other events, I prefer wearing fashionable shoes that matches my outfit.

✓ But for a specific occasion, such as a party or other events, I prefer wearing fashionable shoes that match my outfit.

Add article 'a' before 'party.' 'Matches' is singular but subject 'shoes' is plural, so use 'match'. Also remove redundant 'uh' and reorder 'such as a party or other events' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'a party' and ensure verb agrees with plural 'shoes' by using 'match.'