Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cevabınız doğal ancak biraz dağınık ve gereksiz tekrarlar içeriyor. Cümlenizi daha kısa ve net yapmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümle yapısını geliştirip bağlaçlar kullanarak daha akıcı hale getirebilirsiniz.

Exemplo: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair once a year because I work in a professional environment and need to keep my shoes updated.

Sugestão: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi hataları ve anlamsal eksiklikler var. "From online" ifadesi yanlış, "online" yeterlidir. Ayrıca, cümleniz tamamlanmamış ve tekrarlar mevcut. Daha net ve tamamlanmış cümleler kurmalısınız.

Exemplo: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I don't have enough time to visit shopping malls. Online shopping is very convenient for me.

Sugestão: Cümleniz karışık ve tamamlanmamış. "At first it's a good questions" ifadesi uygun değil. Ayrıca, tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Cümlenizi daha açık ve doğru yapmalısınız.

Exemplo: That's a good question. In my country, shoes are becoming more expensive every year. I usually spend around 3000 Turkish liras on shoes annually.

Sugestão: Cümleniz yarım kalmış ve tekrarlar içeriyor. "A comfortable shoes" ifadesi dilbilgisi açısından yanlış, "comfortable shoes" olmalı. Cümlenizi tamamlayıp daha akıcı ve doğru yapmalısınız.

Exemplo: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because they make me feel free and relaxed when I wear them.

× I usually buy a pair of shoes in a year because I work in a professional environment so I need to update my former shoes in every year and also.

✓ I usually buy a pair of shoes in a year because I work in a professional environment, so I need to update my old shoes every year.

The phrase 'former shoes' is incorrect; 'former' refers to something previous in order, not used for old items. 'Old shoes' is appropriate. Also, 'in every year' should be 'every year' without 'in'. The sentence also needs a comma before 'so' to separate clauses.

× Usually I buy my shoes from online because I don't have enough time to go to shopping mall to buy shoes or another clothes or another wearings.

✓ Usually I buy my shoes online because I don't have enough time to go to the shopping mall to buy shoes or other clothes or other wear.

The phrase 'buy my shoes from online' is incorrect; 'buy shoes online' is correct. 'Go to shopping mall' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Another clothes' is incorrect because 'clothes' is plural; use 'other clothes'. 'Another wearings' is incorrect; 'wearings' is not a standard plural noun; 'other wear' or 'other clothing' is better.

× Usually I buy my shoes from online because I don't have enough time to go to shopping mall to buy shoes or another clothes or another wearings.

✓ Usually I buy my shoes online because I don't have enough time to go to the shopping mall to buy shoes or other clothes or other wear.

As above, 'another clothes' is incorrect because 'clothes' is plural; 'other clothes' is correct. 'Another wearings' is incorrect; 'wearings' is not a correct plural noun; 'other wear' or 'other clothing' is appropriate.

× Online option is very very attractive for me to buy something because.

✓ The online option is very attractive to me for buying something.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Online option' needs the definite article 'The'. 'Very very' is redundant; one 'very' is enough. 'Attractive for me to buy something' is awkward; 'attractive to me for buying something' or 'attractive to me when buying something' is better. The sentence should be complete.

× At first it's a good questions.

✓ First of all, that's a good question.

'At first' is not appropriate here; 'First of all' or 'Firstly' is better. 'It's a good questions' is incorrect because 'questions' is plural but 'it's' is singular; should be 'that's a good question'.

× In my country shoes are becoming more expensive by year by I usually spend my money for shoes around 3000 Turkish liras in a year.

✓ In my country, shoes are becoming more expensive every year, but I usually spend around 3000 Turkish liras on shoes in a year.

'By year by' is incorrect; 'every year' is correct. 'Spend my money for shoes' should be 'spend money on shoes'. The sentence also needs a comma after 'In my country' and 'but' instead of 'by' to connect clauses.

× It doesn't it it means.

✓ It doesn't mean that.

The sentence is incomplete and contains repeated words. It should be completed to convey meaning clearly.

× I feel more comfortable when I wear a comfortable shoes.

✓ I feel more comfortable when I wear comfortable shoes.

'A comfortable shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. The article 'a' should be removed.