Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to avoid filler words like "like" and repeated words such as "I I". Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain why you go to the library, and finish with an additional detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I often go to the library at my university because it provides a quiet environment for studying. Moreover, I enjoy borrowing books to expand my knowledge. This peaceful atmosphere also helps me relax and focus better.

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit long and lacks clear linking words. Try to organize your ideas with connectors like "because", "also", and "for example". Avoid informal contractions like "'cause" in formal speaking. Make your sentences concise and clear.

Exemplo: I usually study in the library because I can concentrate better there. Also, I listen to music to help me focus. Additionally, I have access to many books that I can borrow and read whenever I want.

Sugestão: Good direct answer and explanation. To improve, avoid ending with "So there's only bookstores left" which is unclear. Instead, clarify your point with linking words and more precise vocabulary.

Exemplo: No, I didn't go to the library as a child because there were none near my home. Instead, I usually visited bookstores to find books to read.

Sugestão: Avoid vague phrases like "I can imagine" and informal fillers such as "like". Provide a more confident and structured answer with clear reasons and linking words. Also, correct the phrase "their Chinese have high standards" to "Chinese students have high academic standards".

Exemplo: Yes, Chinese children often spend a lot of time in libraries because they face high academic standards. Therefore, they need to study diligently, and the library provides a suitable environment for this.

× That helps me like to gain knowledge because I I like to borrow books from there and also it's like a quiet space when I can relax and just read.

✓ That helps me gain knowledge because I like to borrow books from there and also it's a quiet space where I can relax and just read.

The phrase 'helps me like to gain knowledge' is incorrect because 'help' is followed by the base form of the verb without 'to' or 'like'. Also, 'like to gain' is redundant here. The correct form is 'helps me gain knowledge'. Additionally, 'it's like a quiet space' should be 'it's a quiet space' to express a fact rather than a comparison. Use 'where' instead of 'when' to refer to a place.

× In my opinion the best place to study is the library 'cause I am able to concentrate much better, I can put my music too and also I have a lot of books that I can read in the moment if I only borrow them.

✓ In my opinion, the best place to study is the library because I am able to concentrate much better. I can play my music too, and I have a lot of books that I can read at the moment if I borrow them.

The use of 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in this context. The sentence is a run-on and should be split into clearer sentences. 'Put my music' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'play my music'. 'In the moment' should be 'at the moment'. Also, 'if I only borrow them' is better as 'if I borrow them' for clarity.

× No, unfortunately not. When I was a kid, I didn't have the chance to go to the library because I didn't know any of them near my house. So there's only bookstores left.

✓ No, unfortunately not. When I was a kid, I didn't have the chance to go to the library because I didn't know any near my house. So there were only bookstores nearby.

The phrase 'any of them' is incorrect; 'any' alone is sufficient when referring to libraries. 'There's only bookstores left' is incorrect because 'there's' is singular and 'bookstores' is plural; it should be 'there were only bookstores'. Also, 'left' is unnecessary and 'nearby' is a better choice than 'left' here.

× Well, I can imagine that they spend their whole days there. I mean, their Chinese have high standards that they must accomplish. So yeah, I imagine those kids have to study there, like, all the time.

✓ Well, I can imagine that they spend their whole days there. I mean, Chinese students have high standards that they must meet. So yeah, I imagine those kids have to study there, like, all the time.

The phrase 'their Chinese' is incorrect; it should be 'Chinese students' or 'Chinese children'. Also, 'standards that they must accomplish' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'meet' or 'achieve' standards. This correction clarifies the subject and verb usage.