Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to avoid filler words like 'UH' and redundant phrases such as 'on the time' and 'mostly UH'. Use clear and concise sentences. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, for example, 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, I often go to the library because I need a quiet place to study. I usually visit it twice a week when I cannot concentrate at home.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and filler words like 'Uh' and repeated 'I'. Use more precise vocabulary and link your ideas clearly. For example, use 'in addition' or 'also' to connect your points.

Exemplo: In the library, I usually read various novels, magazines, and fictional books to enhance my knowledge. In addition, I also read books related to health and fitness.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words and repeated words. Make your sentences clearer and more direct. Also, explain your reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'as'.

Exemplo: No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because I did not understand the importance of libraries and books for gaining knowledge.

Sugestão: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Avoid filler words and incomplete phrases. Use linking words like 'however' or 'while' to contrast ideas and be specific in your descriptions.

Exemplo: Yes, many Chinese kids now understand the importance of libraries thanks to their parents and teachers. While some visit the library regularly, others only go during exams to find a quiet place to study.

× I frequently go to the library for my studies purpose.

✓ I frequently go to the library for my study purposes.

The phrase 'for my studies purpose' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'for my study purposes' because 'study' is used as a noun here and 'purposes' should be plural to indicate multiple reasons. Also, 'studies' as a plural noun is not used with 'purpose' in this context.

× Sometimes whenever I do not get a peaceful environment on the time, I prefer to go to the library mostly UH.

✓ Sometimes, whenever I do not get a peaceful environment at the time, I prefer to go to the library mostly.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to 'the time'. The correct preposition is 'at' to indicate a specific time. Also, the sentence needed a comma after 'Sometimes' for clarity.

× On the other hand side, I mostly visit the library twice a week.

✓ On the other hand, I mostly visit the library twice a week.

The phrase 'On the other hand side' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'On the other hand'. The word 'side' is unnecessary and incorrect in this idiomatic expression.

× I usually read the different kind of novels, magazines and some fictional books in order to enhance my knowledge.

✓ I usually read different kinds of novels, magazines, and some fictional books in order to enhance my knowledge.

The phrase 'the different kind of' is incorrect. It should be 'different kinds of' because 'kinds' is plural to match the plural objects 'novels, magazines, and books'. Also, commas are added for proper list separation.

× Uh, secondly, I I also read the books related to our health and fitness.

✓ Secondly, I also read books related to health and fitness.

The repetition 'I I' is an error and should be corrected to a single 'I'. Also, 'the books' is better as 'books' here because it refers generally, and 'our health and fitness' is better as 'health and fitness' for general reference.

× Unfortunately, when I was a kid, I I did not go to the library because on the time I did not know the importance of library in our life and the importance of books.

✓ Unfortunately, when I was a kid, I did not go to the library because at that time I did not know the importance of the library in our life and the importance of books.

The repetition 'I I' is an error and should be corrected to a single 'I'. The phrase 'on the time' is incorrect; it should be 'at that time'. Also, 'importance of library' needs the definite article 'the' before 'library'.

× Uh, in order to enhance my in-depth knowledge related to the specific topic.

✓ I did not go to the library to enhance my in-depth knowledge related to specific topics.

This sentence is a fragment without a main verb and subject. It needs to be connected properly to the previous sentence or rewritten as a complete sentence. Also, 'the specific topic' is better as 'specific topics' for general meaning.

× Yes, as now the kids know the importance of the library from their parents and the teachers.

✓ Yes, now kids know the importance of the library from their parents and teachers.

The phrase 'as now' is awkward and unnecessary; 'now' suffices. Also, 'the kids' is better as 'kids' for general reference. 'The teachers' is better as 'teachers' for general meaning.

× Now they some the individ, some children's uh go to the library on their regular basis, some others who only visit the libraries during their examinations for the concentrate environment.

✓ Now some individuals, some children go to the library regularly, while others only visit the library during their examinations for a concentrated environment.

The phrase 'they some the individ, some children's uh' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'some individuals, some children'. 'On their regular basis' should be 'regularly'. 'Libraries' should be singular 'library' to match the context. 'Concentrate environment' should be 'concentrated environment'. Also, sentence structure is improved for clarity.