Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to make your sentences more natural and direct. For example, say "I don't usually visit the library every day, but when I need to focus on studying, I prefer going there because of its calm and quiet atmosphere." Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

Exemplo: I don't usually visit the library every day, but when I need to focus on studying, I prefer going there because of its calm and quiet atmosphere.

Sugestão: Your answer repeats the same idea and has grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons using linking words. For example, "I usually study in the library because its quiet atmosphere helps me concentrate better. Moreover, being in a calm environment keeps my mind relaxed, which improves my focus."

Exemplo: I usually study in the library because its quiet atmosphere helps me concentrate better. Moreover, being in a calm environment keeps my mind relaxed, which improves my focus.

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words. For example, "I didn't have the luxury of visiting libraries as a kid because there were none in my area. However, I did visit school libraries, which I enjoyed a lot. As I grew older, I got more opportunities to visit public libraries."

Exemplo: I didn't have the luxury of visiting libraries as a kid because there were none in my area. However, I did visit school libraries, which I enjoyed a lot. As I grew older, I got more opportunities to visit public libraries.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to be honest if you don't know and give a simple, clear response. For example, "I am from India, so I am not sure about Chinese kids. However, I believe children in every country have different opportunities to visit libraries depending on their local facilities."

Exemplo: I am from India, so I am not sure about Chinese kids. However, I believe children in every country have different opportunities to visit libraries depending on their local facilities.

× Usually I everyday doesn't have in my routine a library visit, but when I am need in focus study I prefer going to library because of its cool, composed and quite atmosphere.

✓ Usually, I don't have a library visit in my daily routine, but when I need to focus on studying, I prefer going to the library because of its cool, calm, and quiet atmosphere.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and verb usage. 'Usually I everyday doesn't have in my routine a library visit' is ungrammatical; it should be 'Usually, I don't have a library visit in my daily routine.' Also, 'when I am need in focus study' is incorrect; it should be 'when I need to focus on studying.' The adjectives 'composed' and 'quite' are incorrect here; 'calm' and 'quiet' are appropriate. The sentence structure needs to be corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Usually I everyday doesn't have in my routine a library visit, but when I am need in focus study I prefer going to library because of its cool, composed and quite atmosphere.

✓ Usually, I don't have a library visit in my daily routine, but when I need to focus on studying, I prefer going to the library because of its cool, calm, and quiet atmosphere.

The adjectives 'composed' and 'quite' are incorrectly used to describe the atmosphere. The correct adjectives are 'calm' and 'quiet' to describe a peaceful environment suitable for studying.

× Usually I everyday doesn't have in my routine a library visit, but when I am need in focus study I prefer going to library because of its cool, composed and quite atmosphere.

✓ Usually, I don't have a library visit in my daily routine, but when I need to focus on studying, I prefer going to the library because of its cool, calm, and quiet atmosphere.

The phrase 'need in focus study' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'need to focus on studying.' Also, 'going to library' should be 'going to the library' with the definite article.

× Usually I everyday doesn't have in my routine a library visit, but when I am need in focus study I prefer going to library because of its cool, composed and quite atmosphere.

✓ Usually, I don't have a library visit in my daily routine, but when I need to focus on studying, I prefer going to the library because of its cool, calm, and quiet atmosphere.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Hence, 'going to library' should be 'going to the library.'

× Because of its composed quite atmosphere I study.

✓ Because of its calm and quiet atmosphere, I study.

The adjectives 'composed' and 'quite' are incorrectly used. The correct adjectives to describe the atmosphere are 'calm' and 'quiet.' Also, a comma is needed after the introductory phrase for clarity.

× I prefer to study there because there I I have my cool mind and with the cool mind I get the great focus to study.

✓ I prefer to study there because I have a calm mind, and with a calm mind, I can focus better on my studies.

The original sentence has repetition ('there I I'), awkward phrasing ('my cool mind'), and unclear expression ('get the great focus to study'). The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammatical structure.

× I usually don't have that much of luxuries with me of going to library when I was a kid because of no libraries in my area.

✓ I usually didn't have the luxury of going to the library when I was a kid because there were no libraries in my area.

The phrase 'that much of luxuries with me of going to library' is incorrect. 'Luxury' is uncountable here, so 'the luxury of going to the library' is correct. Also, 'don't have' should be past tense 'didn't have' to match 'when I was a kid.' The preposition 'of' is used correctly in 'luxury of going.' The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library.'

× I usually don't have that much of luxuries with me of going to library when I was a kid because of no libraries in my area.

✓ I usually didn't have the luxury of going to the library when I was a kid because there were no libraries in my area.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a kid'), so the verb tense should be past ('didn't have') instead of present ('don't have').

× I usually don't have that much of luxuries with me of going to library when I was a kid because of no libraries in my area.

✓ I usually didn't have the luxury of going to the library when I was a kid because there were no libraries in my area.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Hence, 'going to library' should be 'going to the library.'

× But as I grew up I got a chance to visit the libraries.

✓ But as I grew up, I got a chance to visit libraries.

The phrase 'the libraries' is too general here; 'libraries' without 'the' is more natural when speaking generally. Also, a comma is needed after the introductory phrase 'But as I grew up' for clarity.

× Apart from that, in schools I have visited libraries and I love to visit libraries.

✓ Apart from that, I have visited libraries in schools, and I love visiting libraries.

The phrase 'in schools' is better placed after 'visited libraries' for natural word order. Also, 'love to visit' can be more naturally expressed as 'love visiting.'

× As I am from India and I am, I just know that most fair how Indian students and how Indian kids have that luxury to go to library.

✓ As I am from India, I only know how Indian students and kids have the luxury to go to the library.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Most fair how' is incorrect; it should be 'only know how.' Also, 'go to library' needs the definite article 'the library.' The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× As I am from India and I am, I just know that most fair how Indian students and how Indian kids have that luxury to go to library.

✓ As I am from India, I only know how Indian students and kids have the luxury to go to the library.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Hence, 'go to library' should be 'go to the library.'

× So I don't think so and I don't have any idea about the Chinese but I think they should have different kind of opportunities back in their country.

✓ So, I don't think so, and I don't have any idea about Chinese kids, but I think they must have different kinds of opportunities in their country.

The sentence needs commas for clarity. 'Different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' to agree with 'opportunities.' Also, 'the Chinese' is vague; 'Chinese kids' is clearer. 'Back in their country' is better expressed as 'in their country.'