Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally clear but contains some hesitations and minor errors, such as 'Labor' instead of 'library' and awkward phrasing like 'have a long attention span'. Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and use more natural expressions. Also, keep sentences concise and directly related to the question.

Exemplo: Yes, I often go to the library because it is very quiet, which helps me concentrate better. I find that I can focus for longer periods there, so I can work more efficiently without distractions.

Sugestão: Your answer shows good content but is interrupted by many filler words like 'umm'. Also, the sentence structure can be improved for clarity and flow. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: Usually, I devote myself to reading various books about psychology, history, and management. Therefore, I believe the library provides an ideal platform to broaden our knowledge.

Sugestão: Your answer has some good points but contains hesitations and unclear expressions like 'I wasn't unaware of the passage of time' which is confusing. Try to express ideas clearly and avoid double negatives. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Exemplo: Yes, I often went to the library as a child because I wanted to avoid distractions from my large family. When I was there, I would lose track of time because I was so focused on reading.

Sugestão: Your answer is repetitive and contains many hesitations and filler phrases. Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to explain reasons logically and provide specific details.

Exemplo: Yes, from my observation, more parents are taking their children to the library because they want to encourage a love of reading in them.

× the atmosphere of Labor is very quiet, which means I could be more concentrated and have a long attention span.

✓ the atmosphere of the library is very quiet, which means I can concentrate better and have a longer attention span.

The word 'Labor' is a typo and should be 'library'. 'Could be more concentrated' is incorrect; 'concentrate' is a verb, so 'can concentrate better' is appropriate. Also, 'have a long attention span' should be 'have a longer attention span' to express comparison.

× the atmosphere of Labor is very quiet, which means I could be more concentrated and have a long attention span.

✓ the atmosphere of the library is very quiet, which means I can concentrate better and have a longer attention span.

The definite article 'the' is missing before 'library'. It is necessary to specify the particular place being referred to.

× the peaceful environment allows me to have more efficient and work.

✓ the peaceful environment allows me to be more efficient and work better.

The phrase 'have more efficient' is incorrect; 'efficient' is an adjective and needs a verb like 'be' to form 'be more efficient'. Also, 'work' needs an adverb 'better' to complete the meaning.

× Usually I just devote myself to reading all kinds of books like UMM, about the psychology, history, management.

✓ Usually I just devote myself to reading all kinds of books, like those about psychology, history, and management.

The preposition 'about' should be connected properly to the subjects. Also, 'the psychology' is incorrect; 'psychology' is an uncountable noun and does not need 'the' here.

× So I think the library, UMM provides us an ideal platform to broaden our knowledge.

✓ So I think the library provides us with an ideal platform to broaden our knowledge.

The phrase 'the library, UMM' is awkward and unnecessary. Also, 'provides us an ideal platform' should be 'provides us with an ideal platform' because 'provide' requires the preposition 'with' when followed by an object.

× I usually went to the library since I don't want, I didn't want to be distracted by my family.

✓ I usually went to the library since I didn't want to be distracted by my family.

The phrase 'I don't want' is present tense and conflicts with the past tense context. It should be removed to maintain past tense consistency.

× So when I was in the library, I wasn't unaware of the passage of time.

✓ So when I was in the library, I was unaware of the passage of time.

The phrase 'wasn't unaware' is a double negative and confusing. It should be 'was unaware' to clearly express the meaning.

× That's mostly because I I suppose that that's mostly because of because, you know, the parents want to want their children to love reading through this way.

✓ That's mostly because, I suppose, the parents want their children to love reading in this way.

The sentence has repeated words and redundant conjunctions. Simplifying the sentence improves clarity and correctness.