Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and a bit unclear due to redundancy and awkward phrasing. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to make your answer flow better. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your preference with reasons.

Exemplo: No, I don't often go to the library because I find online resources more convenient and accessible for research. For instance, I can easily find articles and books online without having to travel to a library nearby.

Sugestão: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as 'Donald’s'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about what you do in the library. Avoid vague expressions and check your vocabulary.

Exemplo: In the library, I usually do research and read articles and journals that help me with my assignments. For example, when I need references from books, I visit the library to find reliable sources.

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct tenses and sentence structures. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Exemplo: When I was a kid, I never went to a library because the area where I was born and raised did not have one. At that time, libraries were not available in rural areas like mine.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat off-topic and includes irrelevant information about stores. Try to focus on the question and provide a clear, concise answer. Use linking words to contrast your knowledge about Chinese kids with your experience in Nepal.

Exemplo: I am not sure about Chinese kids, as I come from Nepal. However, in Nepal, going to the library is not very common because libraries are rare, especially in rural areas where I grew up.

× I find it more convenient and accessible for finding research, doing research, and so on all and online rather than going to the library and finding any nearby libraries.

✓ I find it more convenient and accessible for finding research, doing research, and so on online rather than going to the library or finding any nearby libraries.

The phrase 'and so on all and online' is incorrect and confusing. The correct phrase is 'and so on online' to indicate continuation of similar activities online. Also, 'and' should be replaced with 'or' before 'finding any nearby libraries' to correctly express alternatives.

× In the library I do some research and read some article and journals which will be very helpful for my assignments to do.

✓ In the library I do some research and read some articles and journals which are very helpful for my assignments.

The word 'article' should be plural 'articles' to agree with 'journals' and the context of reading multiple items. Also, 'which will be very helpful for my assignments to do' is awkward; 'which are very helpful for my assignments' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× For example, whenever I need some reference from books and Donald's, I usually go for library.

✓ For example, whenever I need some references from books and Donald's, I usually go to the library.

The word 'reference' should be plural 'references' because it refers to multiple sources. Also, the phrase 'go for library' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go to the library'. 'Donald's' is unclear and may be a mishearing or typo; if it refers to a specific source, it should be clarified.

× When I was a kid I never went to a library because the area where I was born and raised, it does not have library at the moment as well.

✓ When I was a kid I never went to a library because the area where I was born and raised did not have a library at that time either.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'it does not have library at the moment as well' which mixes present tense with past context. It should be 'did not have a library at that time either' to correctly express past absence of a library. Also, 'a library' needs the article 'a' before 'library'.

× So in that time it was far from having a library in that rural areas.

✓ So at that time it was far from having a library in those rural areas.

The phrase 'in that time' should be 'at that time' to correctly indicate a point in time. Also, 'that rural areas' should be 'those rural areas' to agree in number with 'areas'.

× However, in Nepal there isn't any culture of having libraries and going to the library because as I remember when I was a kid, there wasn't any kind of store nearby our house.

✓ However, in Nepal there isn't a culture of having libraries and going to the library because, as I remember when I was a kid, there wasn't any kind of store near our house.

The phrase 'there isn't any culture' is better expressed as 'there isn't a culture' because 'culture' is uncountable but singular. Also, 'nearby our house' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'near our house'. Adding commas improves readability.