Part 1
Examinador
Do you make a list when you shop?
Candidato
To be honest, I don't like to make I need this when I go to a shop because I think life needs surprise and if I listen all the things I need I I'm controlled by myself. I hope I can find what I need just when I in shop.
Examinador
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Candidato
Of course, I always make a list when I have a program to do, because I have the belief that I should know what I I'm doing right now and what I should do next, and my list always work well.
Examinador
Why don't some people like making lists?
Candidato
In my opinion, I think the people who don't want to make a list, not because they are lazy, but because they think it's a waste of time. They want to just do the work, they don't want to spend the time on this. But I think they are wrong.
Examinador
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Candidato
For myself, I prefer to make a list on paper because I think if I write a word on the paper I can remember it in my heart and if I just use my phone to do it I will forget it. It not works.
Do you make a list when you shop?
Pontuação: 55.0Sugestão: 你的答案比较自然,但语法和表达不够准确,且有重复与冗长。建议:1) 开头用一句简洁的主旨句直接回答问题;2) 用1-2句具体理由支持,并用连词(because, so)连接;3) 注意语法(如动词形式、冠词和代词位置),避免重复。示例结构:主旨句 + 原因 + 简短例子。
Exemplo: I usually don't make a shopping list because I enjoy the spontaneity of browsing. For example, when I visit the market I like to see new items and choose things that catch my eye, so I don't want to be limited by a fixed list.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Pontuação: 70.0Sugestão: 回答直接且内容相关,但有语法错误和冗余表达。建议:1) 用更简洁的主题句说明做清单的习惯;2) 用清晰的原因和结果支持(use linking words like because, so);3) 修正时态和数的一致性(e.g., "lists work"),并控制在三到四句内。
Exemplo: Yes, I always make a list for work because it helps me prioritise tasks. For instance, I write down urgent tasks first and tick them off as I finish, so my workflow is more organised and efficient.
Why don't some people like making lists?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 观点明确但表达重复且否定句结构混乱。建议:1) 开门见山给出原因,并用连接词展开1-2个具体原因;2) 避免重复短语(如"I think"多次出现);3) 如要表达反驳,简短说明理由并给例子支持。
Exemplo: Some people avoid making lists because they feel it takes extra time and interrupts their flow. However, I believe lists save time overall; for example, a quick checklist helped my friend finish tasks faster by reducing forgetfulness.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: 理由清楚但表达有语法错误和非地道用法。建议:1) 用一句简短明确的偏好句;2) 用because提供具体原因并给出简短例子;3) 注意语法(e.g., "it doesn't work"),避免口语化错误。
Exemplo: I prefer making lists on paper because physically writing helps me remember tasks better. For example, after writing a to-do list by hand I often recall items without checking, whereas phone lists are easy to ignore.
× To be honest, I don't like to make I need this when I go to a shop because I think life needs surprise and if I listen all the things I need I I'm controlled by myself. I hope I can find what I need just when I in shop.
✓ To be honest, I don't like to make a 'I need this' list when I go shopping, because I think life needs surprises and if I list all the things I need I'm controlled by myself. I hope I can find what I need just when I'm in a shop.
句中多处动名词/动词形式使用不当:"make I need this" 应为"make a 'I need this' list"或"make a list of what I need";"go to a shop" 更自然为短语动名词结构"go shopping"或保留"go to a shop"但后文要一致;"life needs surprise" 中的名词应为复数"surprises";"if I listen all the things I need" 中的"listen"用错,应为动词"list"(列清单)或用短语"write down";"I I'm" 有重复;"just when I in shop" 缺少系动词,应为"just when I'm in a shop"。建议:注意动名词(-ing)和不定式的用法,区分 listen(听)与 list(列)、并确保有适当的冠词和系动词。
× Of course, I always make a list when I have a program to do, because I have the belief that I should know what I I'm doing right now and what I should do next, and my list always work well.
✓ Of course, I always make a list when I have a project to do, because I believe that I should know what I'm doing right now and what I should do next, and my list always works well.
问题包括时态与主谓一致:"have a program to do" 用词不自然,改为"have a project to do";"I have the belief that I should know" 可简化为"I believe that";"what I I'm doing" 有冗余的代词和助动词,改为"what I'm doing";"my list always work well" 主语是单数,动词需三单形式"works"。建议:注意主谓一致与简洁表达,使用现在进行时时确保只保留一个助动词。
× In my opinion, I think the people who don't want to make a list, not because they are lazy, but because they think it's a waste of time. They want to just do the work, they don't want to spend the time on this. But I think they are wrong.
✓ In my opinion, the people who don't want to make a list are not doing so because they are lazy, but because they think it's a waste of time. They just want to do the work; they don't want to spend time on this. But I think they are wrong.
句子存在代词与句子结构问题:原句中多余的引导词和逗号使用不当("I think the people... not because"),应把否定结构放在谓语位置:"are not doing so because...";"They want to just do" 中副词位置可以调整为更自然的"They just want to do";"spend the time on this" 中冠词可省略为"spend time on this"。建议:注意代词和句子内部的主谓位置,副词通常放在实义动词前或助动词后,避免多余的代词或短语。
× For myself, I prefer to make a list on paper because I think if I write a word on the paper I can remember it in my heart and if I just use my phone to do it I will forget it. It not works.
✓ For myself, I prefer to make a list on paper because I think if I write words on paper I can remember them in my heart, and if I just use my phone to do it I will forget it. It doesn't work.
存在介词和数的一致问题:"write a word on the paper" 更自然为复数或无冠词的"write words on paper";"remember it in my heart" 指代应该与前文一致,改为复数"remember them";"It not works" 为错误的否定与主谓形式,应为"It doesn't work"。建议:注意不可数/可数名词与冠词的使用,以及英语否定时助动词的位置(doesn't + 动词原形)。