Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: ‘I'm not fond of singing definitely’는 어색하므로 ‘I'm definitely not fond of singing’ 또는 ‘I don't really enjoy singing’이라고 표현하세요. ‘my prowess is substantially poor’는 부자연스럽고 과도하게 격식적이므로 ‘I'm not very good at it’이 적절합니다. 또한 ‘keep up with the rhythm and memorizing’은 병렬 구조가 맞지 않으므로 ‘keeping up with the rhythm and memorizing the lyrics’로 고치세요. 마지막으로 두 가지 이유를 자연스럽게 연결하고, 최대 3문장으로 간결하게 답하는 것이 좋습니다.

Exemplo: I’m definitely not fond of singing because I’m not very good at it. I often struggle to keep up with the rhythm and remember the lyrics. That makes me feel quite uncomfortable when I sing in front of other people.

Sugestão: 첫 문장은 ‘I learned to sing’ 또는 ‘I had singing lessons’가 자연스럽습니다. ‘relish’는 이 문맥에서 지나치게 문어적이므로 ‘enjoy’를 사용하세요. ‘my prowess is substantially important was more’는 의미와 문법이 불분명하므로 삭제하고, ‘I was embarrassed when I had to sing in front of my classmates’처럼 구체적으로 설명하세요. 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 과거 경험과 그에 대한 감정을 명확한 문장으로 연결해야 합니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I learned some basic singing skills in music classes at school. However, I didn’t really enjoy those lessons because I felt embarrassed singing in front of my classmates. I was especially nervous when I had to perform alone.

Sugestão: 내용과 구조는 좋지만 ‘The person that I want to sing for is certainly…’는 다소 길고 부자연스러우므로 ‘I’d like to sing for my girlfriend’로 바로 시작하세요. ‘listen to my song’은 가능하지만 이 상황에서는 ‘hear me sing’이 더 자연스럽습니다. ‘when I propose to her’는 구체적인 계획을 잘 보여 주므로 유지하되, 감정이나 이유를 한 문장 추가하면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다.

Exemplo: I’d like to sing for my girlfriend. She once told me that she wanted to hear me sing, so I’m planning to do it when I propose to her. It would make the moment more personal and memorable.

Sugestão: ‘Saint’는 문맥상 ‘singing’의 발음 인식 오류로 보이며, 문장을 시작할 때 ‘Personally, I think…’처럼 명확한 입장을 제시하세요. 현재 답변은 쉼표로 여러 문장을 연결한 run-on 문장이고, ‘it is so absurd that I once got frightened’는 앞의 내용과 의미가 연결되지 않습니다. 노래가 행복을 주지 않는다고 주장하려면 재정이나 가족 문제와 비교하기보다, 자신의 경험이나 음악의 효과를 근거로 설명해야 합니다. 반대 의견을 인정한 뒤 자신의 이유와 예시를 한 가지 제시하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. It allows them to express their emotions and forget about stress for a while. For example, singing with friends at a party can create a cheerful atmosphere and help people feel more connected.

Sugestão: ‘I prefer to listen to others singing’보다 ‘I prefer listening to other people sing’이 더 자연스럽습니다. ‘I can't listen to me singing’은 ‘I don’t like listening to myself sing’으로 고치고, ‘As a solution’은 이 상황에 어색하므로 삭제하세요. ‘When I listened’는 일반적인 습관을 말하므로 ‘When I listen to music’ 또는 ‘Listening to other people sing helps me…’로 표현해야 합니다. 같은 내용을 반복하지 말고, 어떤 종류의 노래를 듣는지 구체적인 예를 추가하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I prefer listening to other people sing because I’m not very confident about my own singing. I usually listen to calm songs when I’m stressed or tired. They help me relax and improve my mood.

Sugestão: 질문에 직접 답했고 이유도 두 가지 제시하여 구조가 좋습니다. 다만 ‘For starters’와 ‘What’s more’는 Part 1의 짧은 답변에서는 다소 형식적일 수 있으므로 ‘mainly because’와 ‘also’를 사용하면 더 자연스럽습니다. ‘learn singing’은 ‘learn to sing’ 또는 ‘take singing lessons’가 정확합니다. 마지막에는 ‘near my home’ 또는 ‘nearby’라고 표현하고, 현재 상황인지 과거 상황인지 시제를 일관되게 유지하세요.

Exemplo: No, I haven’t taken a singing class. I was under a lot of academic pressure, so I didn’t have enough time to take lessons. Also, there isn’t a singing academy near my home.

× I'm not fond of singing definitely.

✓ I'm definitely not fond of singing.

The adverb definitely should be placed before the adjective phrase not fond of singing. Placing it at the end sounds unnatural in this sentence.

× In addition, it's hard to keep up with the rhythm and memorizing the lyrics.

✓ In addition, it's hard to keep up with the rhythm and memorize the lyrics.

The two verbs should have parallel forms after the infinitive structure it's hard to. Use keep and memorize, not keep and memorizing.

× I've learned singing in music classes at school.

✓ I've learned how to sing in music classes at school.

The verb learn is normally followed by an infinitive or how to plus the base verb when referring to acquiring a skill. Therefore, learn how to sing is the appropriate structure.

× As I mentioned earlier, my prowess is substantially important was more singing in front of classmates made me depressed?

✓ As I mentioned earlier, my prowess is substantially poor, and singing in front of my classmates made me depressed.

The original sentence contains an incomplete and incorrectly connected structure. The ideas should be joined with and, and each clause needs a clear grammatical structure. The question mark should also be replaced with a period because this is a statement.

× I know people have different opinions about this but I don't think Saint can bring happiness to people to begin with, happiness is relevant to one's financial situation or their families from my perspective it is so absurd that I once got frightened.

✓ I know people have different opinions about this, but I don't think Saint can bring happiness to people. To begin with, happiness is relevant to one's financial situation or family circumstances. From my perspective, it is so absurd that I once got frightened.

The original contains several run-on sentences and comma splices, in which independent clauses are joined without appropriate punctuation or conjunctions. Dividing the ideas into separate sentences makes the structure grammatically complete and easier to understand.

× Therefore I can't listen to me singing.

✓ Therefore, I can't listen to myself singing.

The subject and object refer to the same person, so the reflexive pronoun myself is required instead of the object pronoun me.

× When I listened to it, I could diminish my stress or feel relieved.

✓ When I listen to them, I can diminish my stress or feel relieved.

The student is describing a usual or repeated effect of listening to other people sing, so the present tense is more appropriate. Use listen and can rather than the past-tense forms listened and could. Them is also more suitable because it refers to other people singing.

× Therefore, there wasn't enough time for me to learn singing.

✓ Therefore, there wasn't enough time for me to learn how to sing.

When learn refers to acquiring a skill, it is normally followed by how to plus the base verb. Therefore, learn how to sing is more grammatically appropriate than learn singing.