Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 「Taroti」「holds the mag」「Karen done」など、聞き取りにくい語や不自然な表現があります。おそらく “karaoke,” “holds the mic,” “have karaoke at home” などを意図していると思われるため、正確な語彙を使いましょう。また、時制を統一し、“Whenever I go...” とする必要があります。最初に好みを明確に述べ、その後に歌う場所・好きな曲・理由を2文程度で具体的に説明すると、より自然で効果的です。

Exemplo: Yes, I’m a big fan of singing. Whenever I go to karaoke, I’m usually the person who holds the microphone for a long time and sings several songs. I especially enjoy Japanese and Chinese songs because singing helps me relax and express my feelings.

Sugestão: 「naturally get it」は意味が曖昧で、「I learned by myself」または「I have a natural sense of rhythm」のように具体化するとよいです。“talented of singing” は “talented at singing” に修正し、過去の経験には過去形を使いましょう。回答が一文に長くつながっているため、直接的な答え、経験、感想の3文に分け、 “When I was...” や “Because...” などのリンク表現を明確に使ってください。

Exemplo: No, I’ve never taken formal singing lessons. I mostly learned by singing with a friend who was very talented. We used to practise together, and it created some wonderful memories because we enjoyed collaborating on different songs.

Sugestão: 質問は「誰のために歌いたいか」なので、最初に “I mainly sing for myself” と明確に答えましょう。「stim」はこの文脈では不適切で、 “sing” または “perform” を使うべきです。また、「声を保ちたい」という考えは “I want to maintain my voice as I get older” と表現できます。年齢の部分が不明確なので、将来の目的と気分転換という理由を分けて、3文以内で説明してください。

Exemplo: I mainly sing for myself, but I would also like to sing for my close friends and family. Singing helps me improve my mood, and I want to maintain my voice as I get older. I would especially enjoy performing for people who appreciate the same kinds of music as I do.

Sugestão: 意見は明確ですが、文法と意味のつながりを整理する必要があります。“it’ll be to relieve the stress” ではなく “it can relieve stress” と言いましょう。「誰でも幸せを感じる」という部分は、 “It can lift people’s spirits” のように自然に表現できます。最初に結論を述べ、ストレス軽減と具体的な結果をリンクワードで説明すると、内容がより効果的になります。

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. Singing can relieve stress and help people forget their worries for a while. For example, singing with friends can create a cheerful atmosphere and make everyone feel more connected.

Sugestão: 回答は好みと理由を含んでいますが、「piano music with ringing sounds」や「prom music」は文脈に合わず、意味が伝わりにくい表現です。歌声を聞く質問なので、 “I enjoy listening to people singing, especially with piano accompaniment” のように直接答えましょう。“those type” は “that type” または “those types” にし、リラックスできる理由を具体的に述べてください。

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy listening to other people sing, especially when they are accompanied by a piano. The combination of a gentle voice and piano music helps me feel calm. I usually listen to this kind of music when I’m tired or don’t feel like singing myself.

Sugestão: 6つの回答の中では最も明確で、直接的な答えと具体例があります。ただし、 “formal license” は授業を受けたかどうかには適切でなく、ここでは “formal training” または “professional instruction” が自然です。また、過去の経験には “I wanted to keep singing as a hobby” と過去形を使いましょう。ドキュメンタリー制作と、正式なレッスンを受けなかった理由を自然な接続詞で結びつけると、さらに改善できます。

Exemplo: No, I’ve never taken a formal singing class. The closest experience I’ve had was making a documentary about a singing teacher, which allowed me to learn a little about vocal training. However, I’ve always kept singing as a hobby rather than studying it professionally.

× Whenever I went to Taroti, I'm definitely the person that holds the mag for a long time and sing different songs.

✓ Whenever I go to Taroti, I'm definitely the person who holds the microphone for a long time and sings different songs.

The sentence describes a repeated habit, so use the present tense: go, holds, and sings. Because the subject is the third-person singular noun person, the verb sing must become sings.

× Whenever I went to Taroti, I'm definitely the person that holds the mag for a long time and sing different songs.

✓ Whenever I go to Taroti, I'm definitely the person who holds the microphone for a long time and sings different songs.

The subject of sings is the singular noun person, so the verb needs the third-person singular ending -s: sings.

× I especially like to sing Japanese songs and Chinese songs and sometimes I also have Karen done because I really feel like Cinny is the thing and let my dress out and like different room.

✓ I especially like singing Japanese and Chinese songs, and sometimes I also do karaoke because singing helps me express myself and enjoy different places.

The original sentence contains incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. Use a clear subject and verb in each clause, and connect the ideas with appropriate conjunctions. The phrase do karaoke is also the natural verb phrase.

× No, I just naturally get it and when I was there I still have a friend who is super talented of singing and we just sing together and which gave me a super great memory because I feel like how wonderful it could be for two people to collaborate in a super great way.

✓ No, I learned naturally, and when I was there, I had a friend who was super talented at singing. We sang together, which gave me a great memory because I realized how wonderful it could be for two people to collaborate.

The sentence refers to a past experience, so use past-tense forms: had, was, and sang. The preposition after talented is at, not of. Separating the ideas into two sentences also makes the past-time sequence clearer.

× No, I just naturally get it and when I was there I still have a friend who is super talented of singing and we just sing together and which gave me a super great memory because I feel like how wonderful it could be for two people to collaborate in a super great way.

✓ No, I learned naturally, and when I was there, I had a friend who was super talented at singing. We sang together, which gave me a great memory because I realized how wonderful it could be for two people to collaborate.

The correct collocation is talented at singing. Use at after talented when describing a person's ability in an activity.

× I only stim for myself and I also want to stim for my throat as I don't want my sound sound sounds weird or odd when I grow up maybe they especially turn to fifty or forty and it's also a way to make my mood better.

✓ I only sing for myself, and I also want to sing to exercise my throat because I don't want my voice to sound weird or odd when I grow older, perhaps when I turn forty or fifty. It is also a way to improve my mood.

After want to, use the base form of the verb: want to sing. When describing an activity, sing is the appropriate verb. The sentence has also been divided and reorganized to avoid several incorrectly connected clauses.

× I only stim for myself and I also want to stim for my throat as I don't want my sound sound sounds weird or odd when I grow up maybe they especially turn to fifty or forty and it's also a way to make my mood better.

✓ I only sing for myself, and I also want to sing to exercise my throat because I don't want my voice to sound weird or odd when I grow older, perhaps when I turn forty or fifty. It is also a way to improve my mood.

After want, use the structure want + object + to + base verb: want my voice to sound. The original phrase sound sound sounds contains repeated verbs and does not have a correct subject-verb structure.

× I only stim for myself and I also want to stim for my throat as I don't want my sound sound sounds weird or odd when I grow up maybe they especially turn to fifty or forty and it's also a way to make my mood better.

✓ I only sing for myself, and I also want to sing to exercise my throat because I don't want my voice to sound weird or odd when I grow older, perhaps when I turn forty or fifty. It is also a way to improve my mood.

In a future-time clause beginning with when, use the present simple rather than will: when I turn forty or fifty. The phrase grow older is also more suitable than grow up when referring to increasing age.

× Of course, because it'll be to relieve the stress and to let anyone, especially if you think well, you can let them to feel like oh everything is quite great so they would say wow for everything comes.

✓ Of course. Singing can relieve stress and make people feel that everything is going well, so they can feel happy about their lives.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. Use a clear subject, such as singing, followed by parallel verbs: relieve and make. Also, let requires the structure let + object + base verb, not let them to feel.

× Of course, because it'll be to relieve the stress and to let anyone, especially if you think well, you can let them to feel like oh everything is quite great so they would say wow for everything comes.

✓ Of course. Singing can relieve stress and make people feel that everything is going well, so they can feel happy about their lives.

Can is appropriate for expressing the possible effect of singing. The phrase it'll be to relieve is not grammatical in this context. Use can relieve instead of will be to relieve.

× Of course, because it'll be to relieve the stress and to let anyone, especially if you think well, you can let them to feel like oh everything is quite great so they would say wow for everything comes.

✓ Of course. Singing can relieve stress and make people feel that everything is going well, so they can feel happy about their lives.

After make + object, use the base verb without to: make people feel. Similarly, let takes a base verb: let them feel, not let them to feel.

× Yeah, I prefer the piano music with ringing sounds together because it can also keep my inner self calm and whenever I don't want to sing I just listen to those type of prom music, it also can help me a lot.

✓ Yeah, I prefer piano music with ringing sounds because it can also keep me calm. Whenever I don't want to sing, I listen to those types of music, and it can help me a lot.

The demonstrative those refers to a plural noun, so use types, not type. Alternatively, you could say that type of music when referring to one type.

× Yeah, I prefer the piano music with ringing sounds together because it can also keep my inner self calm and whenever I don't want to sing I just listen to those type of prom music, it also can help me a lot.

✓ Yeah, I prefer piano music with ringing sounds because it can also keep me calm. Whenever I don't want to sing, I listen to those types of music, and it can help me a lot.

The original sentence joins several independent clauses with commas, creating a comma splice. Use a full stop and a conjunction to separate and connect the ideas correctly.

× No, I have never taken a singing class. The closest experience was when I made a documentary about a singing teacher, but I didn't have any formal license because I just want to keep it as a hobby.

✓ No, I have never taken a singing class. The closest experience was when I made a documentary about a singing teacher, but I didn't have any formal training because I just wanted to keep singing as a hobby.

The sentence describes the speaker's past reason at the time of making the documentary, so use the past tense wanted rather than the present tense want. The phrase formal training is also the natural expression for education or instruction in singing.