Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity and grammar, give a direct topic sentence, and add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Use simpler, correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary to express contrast between memorable and forgettable things.

Exemplo: Not really. I tend to remember things that have strong emotional impact, such as important events, but I quickly forget boring or unimportant details. For example, I can recall a memorable trip for years, while I often forget small daily tasks after a day or two.

Sugestão: Organise the answer with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details in chronological order using linking words. Correct tense use and pronouns will make the story clearer. Keep it to 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I have. Once I lost my backpack while visiting another city in Singapore, and it contained my money and passport. As a result, I was unable to return home and had to wait two days for the authorities to help me replace my documents. It was a stressful experience but I learned to be more careful.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence about daily priorities, then add one or two specific tasks and a reason using linking words. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "summer", "first-year", "aim for a higher band") and simpler sentence structure.

Exemplo: At the moment, my main daily priority is studying for the IELTS because I am a first-year university student and I want to achieve a higher band score. For example, I study vocabulary and practice speaking for an hour each day so I can improve before the next test.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence about your methods, then list 1–2 specific strategies and how they help, using linking words for coherence. Improve grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I use several methods to remember important things. For example, I keep notes and reminders on my phone and use apps to set alarms, so when a task is due I check the app and complete it. Also, I write short to-do lists each morning to stay organised.

× Not really because something that have a strong press to me that I will remember for a long time, just one or two years, but something it's not really interesting or something it's so bored.

✓ Not really, because something that has a strong impression on me I will remember for a long time, maybe one or two years, but something that is not interesting or is boring I can't remember for long.

Original uses incorrect pronouns and verbs: 'have' should agree with singular 'something' (has), 'press' is wrong word; 'impression' is correct noun, and 'it's so bored' incorrectly uses 'bored' (adjective describing people) instead of 'boring' (describing things) or 'is boring'. Also remove redundant clauses and fix word order for clarity.

× I can't remember for a long time, just one day or two days that I was unforgettable.

✓ I can't remember for a long time; maybe only one or two days, then I forget.

Sentence uses contradictory and incorrect phrasing: 'that I was unforgettable' is incorrect—'unforgettable' means memorable. Use 'forget' to express losing memory. Simplify and use consistent tense.

× Definitely, yes. I lost my backpack with my money and my passport inside and I come to another city in Singapore and that's mean I lose that passport, so I can't go back to my country and I need to wait there for two days for the government to solve that the problem of me.

✓ Definitely, yes. I lost my backpack with my money and passport inside when I came to another city in Singapore, which meant I lost my passport, so I couldn't go back to my country and I had to wait there for two days for the government to resolve the problem.

Mix of present and past tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'come' should be past 'came'; 'that's mean' should be 'which meant'; 'I lose' should be past 'I lost'; 'can't go back' should be past 'couldn't'; 'need to wait' should be past 'had to wait'; 'solve that the problem of me' is ungrammatical—use 'resolve the problem'. Maintain past tense for past events.

× What do you need to remember in your daily life?

✓ What do you need to remember in your daily life?

This sentence is correct. No grammatical changes needed.

× Now I'm in a summertime and I'm a first year student in university so the only thing I need to remember now is learn IELTS and prepare for my next IELTS test to have to try to roll the M that I have really want.

✓ Now it's summer and I'm a first-year university student, so the only thing I need to remember now is to study for IELTS and prepare for my next IELTS test to try to reach the band score I really want.

Several errors: 'in a summertime' should be 'it's summer'; 'a first year student in university' should be 'a first-year university student'; missing 'to' before verb 'learn'—use 'to study for'; 'have to try to roll the M' is unclear—replace with 'try to reach the band score'. Use noun forms and articles correctly.

× I have several way to remember thing.

✓ I have several ways to remember things.

Number agreement and pluralization: 'way' should be plural 'ways' and 'thing' should be plural 'things'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'I have' is correct but needs plural nouns.

× The first one I I think it's really helpful that I will take note in my phone, in the apps and when I need to know what I need to do and the thing I need to remember I will open that up and look inside that.

✓ The first method, which I think is really helpful, is that I take notes on my phone in an app; when I need to remember what to do, I open it and check.

Clumsy pronoun use and tense: remove duplicated 'I', use 'take notes' not 'take note', 'in the apps' should be 'in an app' or 'in apps', and 'open that up and look inside that' is redundant—use 'open it and check'. Keep present tense for habitual actions.

× So I will remember the thing I need to do.

✓ So I remember the things I need to do.

For habitual actions use present simple rather than future 'will'. Also pluralize 'things' to match general sense.