Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting reasons with clearer grammar and varied vocabulary. Avoid repetition (‘I think’) and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. I can remember facts and vocabulary quickly because I use mnemonic techniques and regular revision. As a result, studying feels more efficient and less stressful.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence admitting the mistake, then give specific details in chronological order. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I felt sorry' or 'I apologised to him') and use linking words like 'so' or 'after that' for coherence. Keep it to 3–4 sentences and include a brief result or reflection.

Exemplo: Yes, I once forgot my friend’s birthday last weekend, which upset him. To make amends, I apologised and bought him a basketball because we used to play together in middle school. He appreciated the gesture, so our friendship was fine afterwards.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence saying what you need to remember, then list 2–3 specific items with brief reasons. Avoid filler words ('uh', 'actually') and repetitive phrasing. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' and be precise about why these items matter.

Exemplo: In daily life I need to remember important dates and routines. For example, I keep track of family birthdays and traditional festivals so I can celebrate with them, and I also remember plans with my girlfriend to maintain our relationship. These reminders help me stay organised and connected.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct statement of your main strategy, then describe briefly how you use it and why it works. Fix grammar ('I usually make notes on paper') and add a linking phrase like 'for example' to give a short specific detail. Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: I usually write important things down on paper to remember them. For example, I keep a small notebook with tasks and dates and review it each morning, which helps me avoid forgetting appointments because the information is always visible.

× Actually, I think I'm good at memorizing things because I think my learning skill is good and memorizing something can make me feel better and I think it is good skill to me on learning.

✓ Actually, I think I'm good at memorizing things because my learning skills are good, and memorizing things makes me feel better; I think it is a useful skill for my learning.

The sentence uses incorrect adjective/adverb forms and awkward noun phrases. 'learning skill' should be plural 'learning skills' to match the general concept (also relates to singular/plural but primarily adjective/noun usage), 'memorizing something can make me feel better' is more natural as 'memorizing things makes me feel better.' 'good skill to me on learning' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'a useful skill for my learning.' Suggestions: use plural nouns for general skills, use simple present tense for habitual facts, and use natural prepositional phrase 'useful for' rather than 'to me on.'

× Yes, for sure. Last weekend I forgot my friend's birthday. I'm so sorry to him.

✓ Yes, for sure. Last weekend I forgot my friend's birthday. I'm so sorry about it.

The phrase 'sorry to him' incorrectly uses a preposition with the emotion; English speakers say 'sorry about it' or 'sorry to him' with different structure. Since the referent is the birthday, 'sorry about it' is clearer. If apologizing directly to the person, use 'I'm so sorry' or 'I'm so sorry to him that I forgot.' Suggestion: choose 'sorry about it' for the event, or 'I'm so sorry that I forgot' when addressing the person.

× And then I bought a good gift to him that is a basketball.

✓ Then I bought him a nice gift: a basketball.

'bought a good gift to him' incorrectly uses the preposition 'to.' The correct structure is 'bought him a gift' or 'bought a gift for him.' Also 'good gift' is better rendered as 'nice gift.' Suggestion: use the indirect object without 'to' (bought him a gift) or use 'for' (a gift for him).

× We both like playing basketball when we were a middle school student.

✓ We both liked playing basketball when we were middle school students.

The sentence mismatches tense and number: 'like' is present, but context is past ('when we were'). Use past tense 'liked.' Also 'a middle school student' should be plural 'middle school students' to match 'we.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and pluralize roles when subject is 'we.'

× Actually, in my daily life I should remember a lot of things such as my family members birthday and some traditional festival.

✓ Actually, in my daily life I should remember a lot of things, such as my family members' birthdays and some traditional festivals.

Possessive and plural forms are incorrect. 'family members birthday' should be 'family members' birthdays' (plural possessive) and 'traditional festival' should be plural 'festivals' when referring to more than one. Also add a comma before 'such as.' Suggestion: use plural nouns for recurring events and possessive apostrophe for members' birthdays.

× I need to have a dinner or lunch with my family and uh, I should remember a lot of things about my girlfriend.

✓ I need to have dinner or lunch with my family, and I should remember many things about my girlfriend.

'have a dinner or lunch' is unnatural; use 'have dinner or lunch' without the article. 'a lot of things' is acceptable but 'many things' is more formal. The sentence also had filler 'uh' which should be omitted in written correction. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles before meals and avoid fillers in formal responses.

× Actually, when I need to remember important things, I usually making some notes in my paper, because I think using paper to note something is a good habit to me.

✓ Actually, when I need to remember important things, I usually make some notes on paper because I think using paper to take notes is a good habit for me.

After 'usually' the base verb 'make' is required, not the -ing form 'making.' 'in my paper' is incorrect; use 'on paper.' 'using paper to note something' is awkward; better is 'using paper to take notes.' 'a good habit to me' should be 'a good habit for me.' Suggestions: use correct verb form after adverbs ('usually make'), use correct prepositions ('on paper'), and use standard collocations ('take notes', 'habit for me').

× It is convenient and traditional.

✓ It is convenient and traditional.

While grammatically correct, the adjective 'traditional' is vague here; consider clarifying what is traditional (for example, 'traditional' compared with digital methods). Suggestion: optionally add detail: 'It is convenient and more traditional than using a smartphone.'