Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "check up my phone" and "check if") and reduce redundancy about frequency. Use a linking word to connect the topic sentence and the supporting detail.

Exemplo: Not really — I rely on the calendar app on my phone. For example, I check it each morning to see appointments or meet-ups, so I don’t miss important events.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and give one specific concise example with chronological linking words (e.g., "then," "since then"). Correct tense and avoid unnecessary phrases like "it was really embarrassing story." Focus on the result and the change you made afterward.

Exemplo: Yes. Once I forgot that a tutoring session had been rescheduled, so I arrived at the old time and had to apologise to the student and her parents. Since then, I always update my calendar and set reminders.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence, then list two or three specific examples using linking words (e.g., "for example," "also"). Fix grammatical errors ("due dates," remove duplicate words) and finish the sentence. Avoid trailing off at the end.

Exemplo: As a university student, I need to remember academic deadlines and timetable changes. For example, I track assignment due dates and lecture cancellations, and I also note social club meetings and part-time work schedules.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and one or two specific methods, using linking words like "and" or "also." Remove repetition ("all the all of them") and improve phrasing ("ask people to confirm"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: I write confirmed events in my calendar or a notes app and set reminders. I also ask friends or colleagues to confirm details so I’m less likely to forget.

× Not really, and that's why I totally depend on the calendar application on my phone.

✓ Not really, and that's why I totally depend on the calendar application on my phone.

No correction needed for verb form; sentence is grammatical. 'Depend on' correctly uses base verb and the rest is fine.

× So every morning or every evening I check up my phone to check if there is an appointment or meet up with friends.

✓ So every morning or every evening I check my phone to see if there is an appointment or a meetup with friends.

'Check up my phone' is incorrect collocation; use 'check my phone'. 'To check if' is acceptable but more natural is 'to see if'. 'Meet up' as a noun should be 'a meetup' or use the verb form 'meet up with friends'. The problem relates to verb/noun forms and collocation.

× Yes I have and it was really embarrassing story.

✓ Yes, I have, and it was a really embarrassing story.

Missing commas for clarity and missing article 'a' before 'really embarrassing story'. The tense 'have' (present perfect) is fine when followed by past reference; main issue is article usage and punctuation.

× I forgot that the tutor time for my student has changed because she had an appointment that day so I had to apologize so much to her and her parents.

✓ I forgot that the tutorial time for my student had changed because she had an appointment that day, so I had to apologize a lot to her and her parents.

'Tutor time' is incorrect noun choice; 'tutorial time' or 'tutoring time' fits. Use past perfect 'had changed' to show the change occurred before the forgetting, and 'apologize so much' is unnatural; 'apologize a lot' or 'apologize profusely' is better. Added comma before conjunction.

× And since then I try to think, write things in my calendar and remind myself.

✓ And since then I have tried to think ahead, write things in my calendar, and remind myself.

When referring to a habit that started in the past and continues, use present perfect ('have tried'). Added 'ahead' for 'think' to clarify meaning and added commas for parallel structure.

× Well, since I am still a university student, I have to remember all the school stuff such as due date for the assignments or any changes on lecture schedules.

✓ Well, since I am still a university student, I have to remember all the school stuff such as the due dates for assignments or any changes to lecture schedules.

Use plural 'due dates' to match multiple assignments and include article 'the'. Use 'assignments' without 'the' when general. Use 'changes to' not 'changes on'. This is preposition and article/number correction.

× Also I have I am a member of social clubs.

✓ Also, I am a member of social clubs.

Extra 'I have' is an erroneous insertion. Removing it corrects sentence structure and yields a clear subject-verb clause. Added comma for flow.

× At the same time I have to keep track of meetings or.

✓ At the same time, I have to keep track of meetings.

Sentence is incomplete with dangling 'or.' Removing 'or' completes the sentence. Added comma for flow.

× Well, as soon as they are confirmed I try to write all the all of them down on my calendar or notepad app and I also ask people around me that what I remember is correct, so I try not to miss them.

✓ Well, as soon as they are confirmed, I try to write all of them down on my calendar or notepad app, and I also ask people around me whether what I remember is correct, so I try not to miss them.

Fixed redundancy 'all the all of them' to 'all of them'. Added comma after 'confirmed' and before conjunction for readability. Use 'whether' not 'that' to introduce an indirect yes/no question. The verb forms were fine but phrasing and conjunction use needed correction.