Flowers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and sentence fragments.

Exemplo: Yes, I love flowers. My girlfriend introduced me to them, and now I arrange a bouquet for her every month as a gift.

Sugestão: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement) and vary vocabulary slightly. Begin with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific effects or reasons using a linking word.

Exemplo: Yes, my girlfriend loves flowers. Whenever I give her flowers, they brighten her day and show my affection, so I often choose bright roses or lilies for special occasions.

Sugestão: Be specific and correct vocabulary and pronunciation. Use one clear topic sentence and provide specific examples with linking words. Remove fillers and correct names/spelling.

Exemplo: Yes, there are many common flowers near my home, such as gumamela and bougainvillea. I especially like the gumamela because of its bright red colour, so I pick some occasionally to make bouquets for my girlfriend.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and a concise structure: topic sentence plus brief supporting detail with linking words. Avoid unnecessary hesitation and incorrect verb forms.

Exemplo: Yes, I often photograph the bouquets I arrange at the flower shop. I take pictures to remember the arrangement and to show my girlfriend before I give it to her.

Sugestão: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear opinion, then give a concise reason with a linking phrase and a specific example if possible.

Exemplo: Not really. I think many couples can't afford to buy flowers regularly, so sending bouquets is usually reserved for special occasions like anniversaries or weddings.

× Absolutely yes. I love flowers. Umm uh, since when I had a girlfriend, umm.

✓ Absolutely. I love flowers. Ever since I had a girlfriend,

The original uses 'since when I had a girlfriend' which is ungrammatical. Use 'ever since' with a point in past to indicate a continuous state from that time to now; this is a present perfect context but 'ever since I had a girlfriend' is acceptable in spoken English to introduce the time. Also remove filler words and redundant 'yes.'

× She taught me how to love flowers, so yeah, every month I arrange my own bouquet to.

✓ She taught me to appreciate flowers, so every month I arrange my own bouquet.

The phrase 'how to love flowers' is awkward; 'teach someone to appreciate' is clearer. The sentence ended with an incorrect particle 'to' which should be removed. Reorder for natural flow and remove filler 'yeah.'

× Make her a present.

✓ To make her a present.

Fragment missing the infinitive marker in previous clause. As part of the previous sentence, use 'to make her a present' or combine with prior clause. Corrects sentence fragment and aligns grammar.

× My girlfriend love flowers so much.

✓ My girlfriend loves flowers so much.

Subject 'my girlfriend' is third person singular so the verb needs an -s in simple present: 'loves.'

× Every time I give her a flower it makes her happy, it makes her heart flutter and it is my way to show my affection to her.

✓ Every time I give her a flower, it makes her happy and makes her heart flutter; it is my way of showing my affection to her.

Use parallel structure: 'makes her happy and makes her heart flutter.' Also use 'way of showing' rather than 'way to show' for natural phrasing. Add commas and a semicolon for clarity.

× At home there's a lot of common flowers, umm, we have gumamela, bougainvillea and etcetera.

✓ At home there are many common flowers; we have gumamela, bougainvillea, and so on.

Use 'there are' with plural noun 'flowers.' 'A lot of' is acceptable but 'many' is more natural here. 'Etcetera' should be 'and so on' or omitted; include commas properly.

× So I really love the guma Mela because it's, it has umm, virgin, the color or red, uh.

✓ So I really love the gumamela because it has a vivid red color.

Original has word order and vocabulary errors: 'guma Mela' should be 'gumamela.' 'Virgin' is incorrect; likely meant 'vivid.' Use 'has a vivid red color' for correct adjective-noun order.

× So I pick them every once in a while to give it to my girlfriend.

✓ So I pick them every once in a while to give to my girlfriend.

Pronoun agreement: 'them' refers to flowers (plural) so use 'give them to my girlfriend' or omit 'it.' Better: 'to give to my girlfriend.' Remove extra 'it.'

× Absolutely, when I go to a flower shop and arrange my bouquet of flowers to give it to my girlfriend. I took a picture of it to yeah, of course for memory, uh, before giving it to her.

✓ Absolutely. When I go to a flower shop and arrange my bouquet to give to my girlfriend, I take a picture of it for memories before giving it to her.

Tense consistency: use present simple 'go' and 'arrange' for habitual actions, not past 'took.' Remove filler words and fix infinitive/object pronoun: 'arrange my bouquet to give to my girlfriend' and 'take a picture of it for memories.'

× I think not really because most of couples in our country they have.

✓ I don't think so, because most couples in our country don't have enough budget to buy flowers.

Original has double subject 'most of couples ... they have' and incorrect negation. Use 'I don't think so' and 'most couples ... don't have enough budget.' Also 'most of couples' should be 'most couples.'

× They have not enough budget to buy some flowers.

✓ They do not have enough budget to buy flowers.

Word order: 'not enough' should follow auxiliary ('do not have enough'). 'Some' is unnecessary; 'buy flowers' is natural. Use contracted or full negation appropriately.