Flowers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use natural formal phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with correct vocabulary and avoid slang (e.g., "wanna") and redundancy. Also correct minor word choice and maintain sentence variety within the 1–5 sentence limit.

Exemplo: Yes, I love flowers. My favorite are peonies because I like their large, soft pink blooms; they feel feminine and elegant, which suits my personal style.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and tidy supporting details with linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., subject/verb agreement and remove filler words). Explain briefly how this friendship influences you to show relevance.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. A close friend is a professional florist who makes bouquets for weddings and events, and because he knows so much about flowers, we often talk about care and design, which has helped me appreciate different varieties.

Sugestão: Be clearer and correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Use linking words (e.g., "however") and provide specific, correctly spelled flower names if possible. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid vague phrases like "other than that they are just plants."

Exemplo: Not many — only a few grow near my home because my mother has a small garden. She grows orchids, marigolds, and jasmine; elsewhere in the neighborhood there are mostly ornamental shrubs rather than flowers.

Sugestão: Avoid informal fillers and correct grammar (e.g., "matches" → "match", "it's" → "its"). Be concise and describe frequency and motivation with linking words. Mention technique briefly instead of saying you pick flowers (which may be inappropriate).

Exemplo: Yes, I often photograph flowers because they fit my aesthetic. For instance, when I see a vivid red rose I usually photograph it from different angles and lighting to capture its texture and color.

Sugestão: Start with a clear general statement, then give specific examples and avoid repetition. Use concise language and one linking phrase to expand. Replace vague or repetitive words like "really" and "very" with precise descriptors.

Exemplo: Yes, sending flowers is common, especially for birthdays, weddings, and funerals. It is seen as a thoughtful gesture that expresses affection or sympathy, and many people send bouquets to mark special occasions.

× If you wanna know something about me, my favorite flowers are peonies because they're pinky and it just describes me as well, like my personality is something very girly as well.

✓ If you want to know something about me, my favorite flowers are peonies because they're pink and they describe me well; my personality is quite girly.

Uses informal 'wanna' (use 'want to') and incorrect adjective 'pinky' (use 'pink'). Pronoun/verb agreement: 'it just describes me' should match plural subject 'peonies' so use 'they describe me'. Avoid redundant 'as well' and 'something'; use clearer phrasing. Suggestion: use standard vocabulary and ensure subject-verb agreement and concise wording.

× One of my friends who is a florist and he does bouquets actually for occasions and special events.

✓ One of my friends is a florist and he makes bouquets for occasions and special events.

Sentence fragment and awkward conjunction: 'One of my friends who is a florist and he does...' combines relative clause with a separate clause incorrectly. Correct by making a main clause: 'One of my friends is a florist' and follow with coordinate clause. Use 'makes' or 'arranges' instead of 'does.' Suggestion: keep sentence structure simple: subject + verb + object.

× So sometimes we bond on talking about the flowers because he just knows so much and he I want to know more about it as well.

✓ So sometimes we bond by talking about flowers because he knows so much and I want to learn more from him as well.

Multiple issues: 'bond on talking' is incorrect collocation (use 'bond by talking'). 'the flowers' unnecessary article; use 'flowers'. 'he I want' is a typo/word order error. 'know more about it' unclear reference; use 'learn more from him.' Suggestion: proofread for typos and use correct preposition and clear reference.

× Only a few of them actually because my mom has her little garden so we only have a few flowers like santankuma, melas and orchids but other than that they are just plants.

✓ Only a few, actually, because my mom has a small garden, so we only have a few flowers like santankuma, melas and orchids; other than that, they are just plants.

Original had awkward punctuation and redundancy. 'her little garden' is acceptable but 'small garden' is more natural. Ensure commas to separate clauses. No major plural errors except clarity. Suggestion: use punctuation to clarify clauses and avoid repetition 'only a few' twice.

× I love taking pictures especially if I find flowers that really matches my aesthetics.

✓ I love taking pictures, especially if I find flowers that really match my aesthetic.

Subject-verb agreement: 'flowers' (plural) requires 'match' not 'matches'. 'aesthetics' is better as 'aesthetic' in this context or 'sense of aesthetics.' Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural subject and choose correct noun form.

× For example, I would spot a beautiful rose and it's color red.

✓ For example, I might spot a beautiful rose and its red color.

'I would spot' is conditional/modal; 'might' or 'often' fits better for habitual action. 'it's' is contraction of 'it is' but possessive needed 'its'. Use 'its red color' or 'the red color.' Suggestion: use correct possessive pronoun and appropriate modal for habit.

× I often times would pick it and take a picture and sometimes it just really depends on the angle.

✓ I often pick it and take a picture, and sometimes it really depends on the angle.

'Often times' should be 'often' or 'oftentimes'; pairing 'would' with 'often' is awkward for habitual present. Use simple present 'often pick'. Suggestion: use consistent tense for habitual actions and correct adverb form.

× The people that are very close to me often send some flowers to their loved ones, especially if there are occasions and events.

✓ People who are close to me often send flowers to their loved ones, especially on special occasions and at events.

'The people that are very close to me' is wordy; use 'people who are close to me.' Use 'send flowers' rather than 'send some flowers.' Preposition: use 'on' for occasions. Suggestion: prefer 'who' for people and correct prepositions.

× And I think it's really sweet because it's a gesture of love and giving flowers symbolizes that you really care and adore that person very much.

✓ I think it's really sweet because it's a gesture of love; giving flowers symbolizes that you care for and adore that person.

Redundancy: 'really' and 'very much' both intensifiers; simplify. 'care and adore that person very much' awkward—use 'care for and adore that person.' Suggestion: avoid repeating intensifiers and use correct verb-preposition combinations.