Flowers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer conveys meaning but is slightly contradictory and a bit wordy. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no or brief stance), avoid contradicting phrases, and use one or two specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., however, but, and). Keep it to a maximum of 3–4 concise sentences.

Exemplo: I do like flowers, especially roses of different colors. However, I wouldn’t say I’m obsessed with them; I mainly enjoy giving roses to friends and family on special occasions.

Sugestão: Good use of a specific example, but avoid generalizations (e.g., “mostly women love flowers”). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give the example using linking words (for example, for instance). Keep sentences tighter and more natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. For instance, my friend Rita is very into gardening and keeps a small flower terrace where she grows roses and marigolds.

Sugestão: The answer is relevant but repetitive and has filler words (uh). Make a clear opening sentence, follow with specific supporting details (types of flowers, places), and reduce hesitation. Use linking phrases (because, so, for example) to make it coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because my countryside town is close to green forests and has many gardens. For example, people grow roses, marigolds and wildflowers along the roads and near houses.

Sugestão: Clear content but filled with hesitations and slightly long. Begin with a direct statement (no, I don't usually), then add specific circumstances and a linking word (however, but). Mention frequency and purpose briefly to enrich the response.

Exemplo: I don't take flower photos every day, but I sometimes do when I visit a new place or when I notice attractive blooms. For example, at my school there are many colorful plants and I often photograph them to post on Facebook.

Sugestão: Your answer gives historical context and current practice, which is good, but avoid hesitations and unclear phrases ("guards and courtesies"). Be specific about occasions and use linking words (for example, nowadays, however). Keep it concise and precise.

Exemplo: In the past, flowers were used mainly for religious offerings and formal ceremonies. However, nowadays people commonly give flowers as gifts on occasions like birthdays, Mother’s Day and weddings.

× 'I'm not a very huge fan of flowers, but I must admit I love flowers, mostly roses of different colors and I also love giving flowers to people.'

✓ 'I'm not a big fan of flowers, but I must admit I like them, mostly roses of different colors, and I also like giving flowers to people.'

'huge' is an adjective that is unnatural with 'fan' in this context; use 'big fan'. Repetition of "love flowers" is stylistically heavy; change one to 'like them' for variety and naturalness. Added commas to separate clauses for clarity.'

× 'Well, here in Nepal, mostly women love flowers and I do have some female friends and they're really very much into flowers.'

✓ 'Well, here in Nepal, most women love flowers, and I have some female friends who are really into flowers.'

'mostly women' is better expressed as 'most women' (quantifier usage and natural word order). 'I do have' is unnecessary emphatic auxiliary; use 'I have'. 'they're really very much into flowers' is wordy; reduce to 'who are really into flowers' to match subject-relative clause structure.'

× 'For example, a friend of mine called Rita, she loves flowers and she does have a flower garden at her terrace as well.'

✓ 'For example, a friend of mine called Rita loves flowers, and she has a flower garden on her terrace as well.'

'a friend of mine called Rita, she loves' is a comma splice/redundant subject; combine or use relative clause. 'does have' is unnecessary emphasis; use 'has'. Use preposition 'on' with 'terrace' rather than 'at'.'

× 'I live in a countryside, uh, it's not very remote, but it is, uh, surrounded by, uh, forest, green forest.'

✓ 'I live in the countryside; it's not very remote, but it is surrounded by green forest.'

'a countryside' is incorrect article use; use 'the countryside' (uncountable noun). Redundant commas and filler words removed. 'surrounded by forest, green forest' is repetitive; use 'surrounded by green forest' for clarity.'

× 'And there are a lot of, uh, places where you can grow flowers.'

✓ 'There are many places where you can grow flowers.'

'a lot of' is informal; 'many' is more natural in this context. Removed filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas.'

× 'So yes, my locality has a lot of flowers of different varieties.'

✓ 'So yes, my area has many flowers of different varieties.'

'locality' is a less natural word in this context; 'area' is more idiomatic. 'has a lot of' -> 'has many' for formality and conciseness.'

× 'Uh, I don't do it as a routine, but sometimes I do occasionally when I'm, uh, visiting a new place and I see flowers then I love taking photos.'

✓ 'I don't do it as a routine, but sometimes I take photos when I'm visiting a new place and I see flowers.'

'do occasionally' is redundant with 'sometimes'; remove redundancy. 'I love taking photos' is acceptable but repetitive; simplified to 'I take photos' to match conversational tense and flow. Removed filler words.'

× 'Umm, and I've worked as a teacher and my school does have a variety of flowers and I sometimes love taking their photos and posting them on social media like Facebook.'

✓ 'I've worked as a teacher, and my school has a variety of flowers; I sometimes take photos of them and post them on social media like Facebook.'

'does have' is unnecessary emphatic auxiliary; use 'has'. 'taking their photos' is ambiguous; 'take photos of them' clarifies the object. Split into two clauses for clarity and correct punctuation.'

× 'Uh, in the past, people normally used to offer flowers to guards and courtesies, but this has changed recently.'

✓ 'In the past, people normally used to offer flowers to guests and courtesies, but this has changed recently.'

'guards and courtesies' seems incorrect word choice; likely intended 'guests' or 'courtesies' is wrong. Assuming 'guests' fits cultural practice. 'used to' correctly indicates past habit; retained. If original meant 'guards and courtiers', clarify vocabulary.'

× 'People have also started giving flowers, gifting flowers actually, uh, to people on special occasions like birthdays, maybe like Mother's Day or weddings and any other special celebrations like this.'

✓ 'People have also started giving flowers, actually gifting them to others on special occasions like birthdays, Mother's Day, weddings, and other celebrations.'

'giving flowers, gifting flowers actually' is repetitive; combine into one phrase. Replace 'to people' with 'to others' for conciseness. Removed filler 'uh' and redundant 'like' before Mother's Day. Streamlined list punctuation.'