Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Good direct response and relevant details. Improve accuracy and fluency: correct small grammar mistakes, avoid vague phrases like "quite a different", and combine ideas with linking words to sound more natural. Keep length under five sentences and vary vocabulary (e.g., "populated" instead of "crowded").

Exemplo: I come from Shuchang, a relatively small city. Unlike major cities such as Shanghai, it isn’t densely populated, so the atmosphere is peaceful and relaxed. Also, we experience four distinct seasons, which makes the scenery change a lot throughout the year.

Sugestão: Content is personal and relevant but contains grammar errors and some unclear/incorrect words ("while the child", "poor memories"). Replace with precise expressions ("when I was a child", "fond memories"). Use linking words to connect reasons and feelings. Avoid repetition and keep to 3–4 concise sentences.

Exemplo: I especially enjoy the local noodles in my hometown because they are flavorful and comforting. When I was a child, my grandmother often cooked them for me, so they feel like comfort food. Eating them now always brings back fond memories of my family.

Sugestão: Clear timeline and relevant details. Improve grammatical tense (use present perfect or simple past correctly) and smoother linking between sentences (use "after that" or "since then"). Reduce minor errors like capitalization after commas. Keep concise.

Exemplo: I lived in my hometown for about 18 or 19 years before I left for university. Since then I’ve been studying in Nanjing for my master’s degree, so I usually only return home during long holidays or special occasions.

Sugestão: Answer is clear and supported by reasons, but repetitive. Improve cohesion by using linking words (e.g., "because", "therefore") and provide a brief suggestion or comparison to enrich the response. Use varied vocabulary ("limited facilities", "outdated"). Keep within five sentences.

Exemplo: Not really, because the city is rather old and has limited entertainment facilities. For example, there is only one small, outdated shopping center, so young people often have few places to socialize. As a result, many young residents prefer to move to larger cities for more options.

× Also, we have 4 distinct seasons so it feels quite a different throughout the year.

✓ Also, we have four distinct seasons, so it feels quite different throughout the year.

The adverb 'quite' is fine but the article 'a' before 'different' is incorrect because 'different' here is an adjective modifying the general experience and does not need an indefinite article. Also write numbers under 10 as words ('four'). Add a comma before 'so' when joining clauses. Suggestion: remove 'a' and write 'four'.

× They are very delicious and I like to eat them every day while the child.

✓ They are very delicious and I liked to eat them every day when I was a child.

The phrase 'while the child' is ungrammatical. Use a temporal clause 'when I was a child' to indicate past habitual action. Also match tense: 'liked' is better to describe past habitual preference. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' and past tense for repeated past actions.

× My grandma often cooked them for me so it feels like a comfortable food.

✓ My grandma often cooked them for me, so they feel like comfort food.

Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'noodles' and 'comfort food' is the correct noun phrase; 'comfortable food' is incorrect collocation. Use present tense 'feel' when speaking generally about the food. Add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: use 'they feel like comfort food.'

× Eating them always reminds me of my grandma and brings me some poor memories.

✓ Eating them always reminds me of my grandma and brings back some sad memories.

'Poor memories' is incorrect collocation; 'sad memories' is appropriate. Also add 'back' after 'brings' to express recalling. Keep tense simple present. Suggestion: use 'brings back some sad memories.'

× I had lived in my hometown for about 18 or 19 years, Then I went to the university.

✓ I lived in my hometown for about 18 or 19 years, then I went to university.

Past perfect 'had lived' is unnecessary because the sequence of past events is clear; use simple past 'lived'. 'Then' should not be capitalized mid-sentence. Also English usually omits 'the' before 'university' when speaking of attending as a student. Suggestion: use simple past and lowercase 'then'.

× Now I'm still pursuing my master's degree in Nanjing, which is far away from my home, so I can only go back home during some long holidays or special occasions.

✓ Now I'm still pursuing my master's degree in Nanjing, which is far from my home, so I can only go back during long holidays or on special occasions.

Use 'far from my home' rather than 'far away from my home' for conciseness. Omit redundant 'home' in 'go back home' after 'back'; 'go back' implies returning home. Use 'during long holidays' or 'on special occasions' for correct prepositions. Suggestion: streamline phrasing as above.

× Young people usually don't have anywhere to have fun.

✓ Young people usually don't have anywhere to have fun.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; however 'anywhere to have fun' is colloquial but correct. No change needed. Explanation: subject-verb agreement is correct: 'young people' with 'don't'.

× There is only one shopping center and it is quite small and old.

✓ There is only one shopping center, and it is quite small and old.

Original sentence is grammatically correct; added a comma before 'and' for clarity when joining independent clauses. No change in number is required. Suggestion: keep structure but add comma for readability.