Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và câu bỏ dở. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể liên quan (ví dụ: địa điểm nổi tiếng, hoạt động). Sử dụng liên từ phù hợp và kết thúc câu đầy đủ. Tránh dùng từ mơ hồ như “some” quá nhiều và sửa lỗi chia thì/động từ.

Exemplo: My hometown is Tanghua City in central Vietnam. It is known for family-friendly attractions like Vincennes Park, where children can play in the playground and watch street performances. Many local festivals are held there during holidays, so families often visit to enjoy games and food.

Sugestão: Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề thể hiện ý chính (ví dụ: điều bạn thích nhất). Sau đó đưa ra 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể và dùng từ nối để liên kết ý. Tránh liệt kê quá nhiều tên nơi nếu không giải thích vì điều đó không cung cấp thông tin cụ thể.

Exemplo: What I like most about my hometown is its variety of entertainment options. For example, Inkham Plaza offers modern cafes and cinemas, while Samsung Beach is perfect for relaxing walks and taking photos. These places make weekends enjoyable for both locals and visitors.

Sugestão: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (thời thì, mạo từ) và trình bày rõ mốc thời gian. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu khoảng thời gian, rồi giải thích ngắn gọn lý do và kết quả. Dùng câu liên kết để mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: I have lived in Tanghua City since I was in secondary school, so for about ten years now. My family moved because I had to change schools, and the new house is very close to my new school. This made my daily commute much more convenient.

Sugestão: Cần diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn và sửa lỗi từ vựng/thiếu từ (ví dụ “realize” không đúng, “straight day” không tự nhiên). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề khẳng định, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và ví dụ hoạt động. Sử dụng liên từ để nối các ý và tránh cấu trúc lặp lại.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a great place for young people because there are many green parks nearby. After a long day, young people can relax by taking walks, playing sports, or joining traditional games in the parks. These activities help them stay active and meet friends.

× My hometown is Tanghua City, which is located in central Vietnam.

✓ My hometown is Tanghua City, which is located in central Vietnam.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatical. (Included because fits allowed types; no change.)

× There are some famous buildings where children can visit in the holiday, such as Vincennes.

✓ There are some famous buildings that children can visit during the holidays, such as Vincennes.

Use 'that' or 'which' to introduce a defining relative clause for buildings (structure). 'Where' incorrectly suggests a place rather than buildings. Use 'during the holidays' rather than 'in the holiday' for correct preposition and plural form. Suggestion: replace 'where' with 'that' and 'in the holiday' with 'during the holidays'.

× People can enjoy some games or.

✓ People can enjoy some games there.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'or' creating a sentence fragment (sentence structure error). Remove the trailing 'or' and add a location adverb like 'there' to complete the idea. Suggestion: avoid leaving coordinating conjunctions at the end and finish the list or the clause.

× I think I enjoy going to some entertainment place in my hometown.

✓ I enjoy going to entertainment places in my hometown.

Use plural 'places' to match 'going to' as a habitual action and remove redundant 'I think I' which weakens the statement. 'Some' is unnecessary here; use plural noun 'places'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general habitual activities and avoid redundant filler phrases.

× There are several tourist attractions such as Inkham Plaza, Samsung Beach, or Yahoo Dynasty where people can take a photo to record.

✓ There are several tourist attractions, such as Inkham Plaza, Samsung Beach, and Yahoo Dynasty, where people can take photos to record their visit.

Use 'and' (not 'or') when listing known items (conjunction error). Use plural 'photos' for general action and add 'their visit' to clarify purpose. Also add commas for listing and relative clause placement. Suggestion: use 'and' between list items and plural nouns for general activities.

× I have lived there since I was in secondary school.

✓ I have lived there since I was in secondary school.

Sentence is correct use of present perfect with 'since'. No change needed.

× At that time, my family decided to change home because I need to change school.

✓ At that time, my family decided to move because I needed to change schools.

Mixing past and present tenses is incorrect. Change 'need' to past 'needed' to match 'decided'. 'Change home' is unnatural; use 'move'. 'Change school' better as 'change schools' or 'transfer schools'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past events and use natural collocations ('move', 'change schools').

× The new school is nearby my new house, so it's convenient to me.

✓ The new school is near my new house, so it's convenient for me.

Use 'near' rather than 'nearby' before a noun (nearby is adjective/adverb but 'near my house' is idiomatic). Use 'convenient for me' rather than 'to me'. Suggestion: use correct preposition pairs ('near' + noun; 'convenient for').

× Yes, it is.

✓ Yes, it is.

No correction needed; response is grammatical and appropriate.

× The nearby areas have a lot of green parks where children and young people can realize and unwind after a straight day.

✓ The nearby areas have many green parks where children and young people can relax and unwind after a long day.

Use 'many' with countable plural 'parks' rather than 'a lot of' (both possible but 'many' more concise). 'Green parks' is fine. 'Realize' is incorrect verb; likely meant 'relax'. 'Straight day' is non-idiomatic; use 'long day'. Suggestion: choose correct verbs ('relax'), use idiomatic expressions ('after a long day'), and match quantifiers to nouns.

× They can go for a walk or play some traditional games with them.

✓ They can go for a walk or play some traditional games together.

Original uses 'with them' which creates unclear or incorrect reference (pronoun error). Use 'together' to indicate people participate jointly. Suggestion: avoid introducing extra pronouns that confuse the subject; use 'together' or 'with each other' for reciprocal actions.