Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and accurate: begin with a clear topic sentence naming the place, correct place names and grammar, and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use one or two specific supporting details with correct plural/singular and prepositions. Also keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I come from Mataram, the capital of West Nusa Tenggara on the island of Lombok. Lombok is well known for its beautiful beaches and mountains, and it attracts many tourists every year.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence (I like...) and give specific reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words (for example, because, and, also) and avoid unclear phrases like 'eat it by the fuse'. Mention a specific dish or how it is eaten to add concreteness.

Exemplo: I like the traditional food in my hometown because it is very flavorful and unique. For example, Sate Rembiga is a spicy grilled meat dish that many tourists enjoy, and people often eat it with spicy sambal and rice.

Sugestão: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer first (I have lived there for X years / since I was born). Avoid confusing phrases and keep it short. If you add extra detail, make it coherent and relevant.

Exemplo: I have lived in Mataram for 18 years; I was born and raised there. I grew up attending local schools and still have most of my family in the city.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use clear linking words (because, for example, also). Correct grammar (is surrounded by, activities to do). Give two specific activities or facilities that appeal to young people and finish the answer with a short concluding sentence.

Exemplo: Yes, I think Mataram is a good place for young people because it is surrounded by outdoor activities. For example, young people can go surfing at popular beaches or hike Rinjani (Mount Rinjani) and visit waterfalls nearby, which makes life there active and fun.

× My hometown is Mataram city which is located in West Nusa Tangara.

✓ My hometown is Mataram city, which is located in West Nusa Tenggara.

The place name was misspelled and the clause needs a comma before 'which'. Use correct proper noun spelling 'Nusa Tenggara' and add a comma to introduce the nonrestrictive relative clause.

× It is a part of a small island in Indonesia named Lombok.

✓ It is on a small island in Indonesia called Lombok.

Use 'on' for location on an island (preposition) and 'called' is more natural than 'named'. Also 'part of a small island' is inaccurate: a city is on an island, so change to 'on a small island'.

× Lombok is really famous of their vacation spots such as beaches, mountain.

✓ Lombok is really famous for its vacation spots, such as beaches and mountains.

Use 'famous for' not 'famous of', and match singular/plural: 'mountains'. Use the possessive adjective 'its' for Lombok (singular place), and include 'and' between list items.

× The things that I like in my hometown is their traditional food.

✓ The thing I like about my hometown is its traditional food.

Subject-verb agreement and reference: 'The thing' (singular) requires 'is'. Use 'about' not 'in', and 'its' for the town's possession rather than 'their'.

× Most of the people who came to the Lombok, they're really appreciate for the food because the taste is so savory and also you can eat it by the fuse, so it's interesting to do.

✓ Most of the people who come to Lombok really appreciate the food because it tastes savory, and you can eat it with your hands, so it's interesting.

Use present simple 'come' for general statements. Remove unnecessary comma and contraction 'they're'. 'Appreciate' does not take 'for' in this context; use direct object. Use 'it tastes' rather than 'the taste is so savory'. 'Eat it by the fuse' appears to be incorrect — likely 'with your hands' or 'using a fork'; choose 'with your hands'. Remove 'to do' which is unnecessary.

× I have lived here for 18 years old, which mean I have lived here since I was a baby, not born yet, so I can say that as my journey to live in Lombok, so yeah.

✓ I have lived here for 18 years, which means I have lived here since I was a baby, so I can say that Lombok has been my home for my whole life.

Do not add 'old' after a duration: say 'for 18 years'. Use 'means' to agree with singular 'which'. 'Since I was a baby' is sufficient; 'not born yet' is incorrect. Rephrase to sound natural and grammatical.

× I think my hometown is a good place for young people because it surrounded of many vacation to do and to go.

✓ I think my hometown is a good place for young people because it is surrounded by many places to visit and activities to do.

Use passive 'is surrounded by' rather than 'surrounded of'. 'Many vacation to do and to go' is ungrammatical; replace with 'places to visit and activities to do'.

× Especially there are a lot of beaches, mountain, waterfall and fun fact in Lombok they are one of the highest mountain named Rigeni Mountain.

✓ There are a lot of beaches, mountains, and waterfalls. A fun fact is that Lombok has one of the highest mountains, Mount Rinjani.

Use plural forms 'mountains' and 'waterfalls'. Break into two sentences for clarity. Use 'Mount Rinjani' (correct name) and 'one of the highest mountains' rather than 'they are one of the highest mountain'.

× So I think that's.

✓ So I think that's all.

The sentence is incomplete; add 'all' to finish the idea and make a complete utterance.