Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise: state the place clearly, avoid fillers (umm, so), correct grammatical errors, and give one clear detail with a linking word. Pronunciation of place names should be clear. Keep to 1–2 sentences.

Exemplo: I come from Tokyo. Specifically, I live in Shinagawa, which feels quite quiet and almost rural because only a few people live in my neighborhood.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one specific supporting detail using linking words (for example, because/so). Correct grammar (school is near my house) and avoid repetition and fillers.

Exemplo: What I like most is that my school is very close to my house, so I don't have to wake up early in the morning. This saves time and makes daily life much more convenient for me.

Sugestão: Use the present perfect continuous or present perfect correctly (I have lived there for... / I have been living there for...). State the time clearly, then add a brief supporting detail. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases.

Exemplo: I have lived there for eleven years. I moved to Shinagawa when I was eight, and I've been living there ever since.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give a specific reason with linking words (for example, because/so). Use correct grammar (my school includes an elementary and a junior high school / it is suitable for children). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repeating phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. It is a good place for young people because there are both an elementary and a junior high school nearby, so children can easily walk to school and join local activities.

× I like they are my school near my house, uh, so I don't have to wake up early in the morning.

✓ I like that my school is near my house, so I don't have to wake up early in the morning.

The student used 'they are' incorrectly to refer to 'my school' and used a wrong clause structure. Replace with 'that' to introduce the clause and use correct subject 'my school' with verb 'is'. This fixes reference and subject-verb agreement.

× So I, it is very easy, useful for me And, uh, this is the one of my favorite parts.

✓ So it is very convenient for me, and this is one of my favorite parts.

The phrase 'easy, useful' is awkward for describing proximity; 'convenient' is the appropriate adjective. Remove the extra pronoun 'I' and the article 'the' before 'one of my favorite parts'. Use a comma and conjunction 'and' correctly.

× I have been live there for 11 years.

✓ I have lived there for 11 years.

The present perfect continuous 'have been living' or present perfect 'have lived' are correct; 'have been live' is ungrammatical. Use 'have lived' to express duration up to now, or 'have been living' if emphasizing ongoing action.

× When I was 8 I moved to the town and began to live.

✓ When I was eight, I moved to the town and began to live there.

Spell out small numbers in speech transcripts is optional, but grammatically add 'there' to complete 'began to live'. The phrase 'began to live' is awkward; 'began living there' or 'started living there' is more natural. Also add a comma after the introductory clause.

× So yeah, it is I I suppose it's wrong period.

✓ So yeah, I suppose that sentence was wrong.

Original is fragmented and repeats 'I'. Restructure to a complete sentence: subject 'I', verb 'suppose', and object clause 'that sentence was wrong'. Avoid filler 'period' in spoken correction.

× As I said, they are my school which include an elementary on junior high school.

✓ As I said, my school includes an elementary and a junior high school.

The pronoun 'they' incorrectly refers to 'my school'. Use 'my school' as subject and correct verb form 'includes'. Use 'and a junior high school' not 'on'.

× So it is very suit for children such as them.

✓ So it is very suitable for children.

Use the adjective 'suitable' rather than 'suit'. Remove 'such as them' which is unnecessary and unclear. Keep the sentence concise and grammatically correct.

× which is the look to look which is looked like rural area because any a few people live there.

✓ which looks like a rural area because only a few people live there.

This fragment has multiple errors: use 'looks like' for appearance, 'a rural area' with the article, and 'only a few people' to indicate small population. Remove redundant words 'the look to look' and 'looked'.

× So it is very suit for children such as them. So yeah, that's why I think so.

✓ So it is very suitable for children. So yeah, that's why I think so.

In the first sentence change 'suit' to 'suitable' (adjective); ensure subject-verb agreement earlier where 'my school includes' was corrected. The rest is acceptable conversationally.