Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, correct or avoid unclear words (“miniproference”), and add one specific supporting detail. Keep responses to no more than 3–4 sentences and use linking words if adding details.

Exemplo: I come from Roopa district in the western part of Nepal. It is a hilly area known for its scenic views and quiet villages, which make it an attractive place for nature lovers.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, additionally) to add two specific details—give a brief example to show rather than repeat. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (“downtown” is incorrect for a rural area).

Exemplo: I especially like the peaceful atmosphere and natural beauty of my hometown. For example, there are clear rivers and green hills that make it a relaxing place to walk, and the friendly neighbors often organize community festivals.

Sugestão: Give a precise, grammatical answer. Avoid vague or incorrect time phrases (“all this year”). Start with a direct topic sentence stating the duration, then add a short supporting detail about whether you plan to stay or move, using linking words if needed.

Exemplo: I have lived there all my life — I’m 25 years old. However, I’m considering moving to Kathmandu next year for work, although I visit my hometown often.

Sugestão: Clarify and organize your response. Begin with a clear opinion (yes/no and reason), then provide two specific supporting points with linking words (for example, because, however). Avoid filler words and repeated fragments. Use precise comparisons and correct grammar.

Exemplo: Yes, I think it is a good place for young people because it now has better schools, improved roads, and basic facilities. However, while development has brought modern buildings and jobs, it has also slightly reduced the natural, peaceful environment that made the town special.

× I am basically from Roopa district which is located in the miniproference in the western part of Nepal.

✓ I am basically from Roopa district, which is located in the mid-western part of Nepal.

The phrase 'miniproference' is incorrect; likely intended 'mid-western'. Also missing comma before the relative clause. Use 'mid-western' as correct adjective and 'part of Nepal' is fine. Suggestion: use 'mid-western' and include a comma before 'which' to separate the clause.

× It is surrounded by beautiful hills and has a peaceful environment.

✓ It is surrounded by beautiful hills and has a peaceful environment.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct. Included here only to confirm correctness and that 'a peaceful environment' is appropriate.

× What I like most about my downtown is it's peaceful environment and natural beauty.

✓ What I like most about my hometown is its peaceful environment and natural beauty.

'Downtown' is the wrong word for 'hometown'; use 'hometown'. 'It's' is a contraction of 'it is' or 'it has'; the possessive pronoun 'its' is required here. Suggestion: use 'hometown' and 'its' for possession.

× It has uh, rivers, hills, and fresh air which makes it very relaxing.

✓ It has rivers, hills, and fresh air, which make it very relaxing.

When listing plural nouns, no article is needed before 'rivers' and 'hills'. Also, the relative clause refers to multiple items ('rivers, hills, and fresh air'), so the verb should be plural 'make' not 'makes'. Add a comma before 'which'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× I also like the friendly people who create create a warm and all welcoming atmosphere.

✓ I also like the friendly people who create a warm and welcoming atmosphere.

The word 'create' is repeated; remove the duplicate. 'All welcoming' is incorrect; use 'welcoming' or 'all-embracing' depending on meaning. Suggestion: 'warm and welcoming' is a common collocation.

× Well, I have been living there for my whole life.

✓ Well, I have been living there my whole life.

Drop 'for' with 'my whole life' after 'have been living' — both are used but 'my whole life' is more natural without 'for'. The present perfect continuous is appropriate to indicate an action continuing up to now.

× I am 25 and I have spent all this year in my hometown.

✓ I am 25 and I have spent all my life in my hometown.

'All this year' suggests the current year, which conflicts with 'my whole life'. Likely intended 'all my life'. If the meaning was the current year, say 'this year I have spent in my hometown.' Choose 'all my life' to match age context.

× Add some It's my hometown down down, a good place for young people because it has become more developed with better roads, school and basic facilities.

✓ It's my hometown and a good place for young people because it has become more developed with better roads, schools, and basic facilities.

Remove extraneous 'Add some' and duplicated 'down down'. Use 'and' to connect clauses. Use plural 'schools' and include commas in the list. Ensure sentence flows: 'It's my hometown and a good place...'

× There are that.

✓ There are many such improvements.

The fragment 'There are that.' is incomplete and unclear. Provide a complete noun phrase to clarify, for example 'There are many such improvements.' or 'There are many new facilities.' Suggest replacing fragments with complete sentences.

× There are also more modern buildings now compared to the past, although it is tricky with natural and peaceful environment.

✓ There are also more modern buildings now compared to the past, although it is tricky to keep the natural and peaceful environment.

Original 'it is tricky with natural and peaceful environment' is ungrammatical. Use 'tricky to keep' or 'difficult to maintain' and include articles: 'the natural and peaceful environment.' Suggestion: 'difficult to maintain the natural and peaceful environment.'