Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh, um), correct plural/singular and article use, and limit to 2–4 sentences. Use one linking phrase to add a distinctive detail.

Exemplo: I’m from Pokhara in Nepal, a city famous for its natural beauty and scenic views. It’s often called the City of Seven Lakes, and despite being busy in some areas, you can easily find peaceful natural spots around the lakes.

Sugestão: Give one clear topic sentence and then a specific example to support it; remove hesitations and vague phrases. Use a linking word (for example/for instance) and correct grammar (all age groups). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: What I like most is the natural scenery and peaceful atmosphere. For example, families often spend weekends by the lakes or on short hikes, so people of all age groups can relax and enjoy outdoor activities.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear time reference, avoid repeating the same idea, and correct tense and phrasing. Use one linking phrase if adding a short reason or current situation. Limit to 2 sentences.

Exemplo: I’ve lived in Pokhara all my life — for 18 years. I’m currently staying in Kathmandu for a month, so I really miss the lakes and quiet atmosphere back home.

Sugestão: Provide a concise opinion with one or two specific reasons and avoid fillers. Use correct noun phrases (famous destination, Fewa Lake) and a linking word (because, for example). Keep to 2–3 sentences and give a concrete example of opportunities.

Exemplo: Yes, I think Pokhara is great for young people because tourism creates many jobs in hotels, restaurants and travel services. For example, many young entrepreneurs start guesthouses or guide services around Fewa Lake, which helps them gain practical business experience.

× I come from Pokhara, Nepal, a famous city of our country which is well known for its natural beauty and scenic view.

✓ I come from Pokhara, Nepal, a famous city in our country which is well known for its natural beauty and scenic views.

Use 'in' rather than 'of' for location within a country. Use plural 'scenic views' to match general reference to multiple views.

× It is also known as the city of Seven Lake.

✓ It is also known as the city of Seven Lakes.

Use plural 'Lakes' because the proper name refers to a group of seven lakes. If treating as a proper name, use the standard plural form.

× Although it is a city with bustling uh environment, one can find nature even it it's umm cues.

✓ Although it is a bustling city, one can still find nature even in its queues.

Original sentence has word order and word choice errors. 'A city with bustling environment' should be 'a bustling city'. 'Even it it's umm cues' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'even in its queues' or 'even nearby'. Ensure clear words and correct preposition 'in'.

× The best feature of my hometown is its natural beauty and breathtaking environment.

✓ The best features of my hometown are its natural beauty and breathtaking environment.

Subject 'features' should be plural when listing two items; therefore use plural verb 'are'. Alternatively keep singular 'feature' and list one item. This addresses subject-verb agreement and article usage.

× I think that even if it's a city, one can find nature and reconnect with it.

✓ I think that even though it's a city, one can find nature and reconnect with it.

Use 'even though' rather than 'even if' to state a factual contrast. The rest is grammatically correct.

× It is a peaceful, uh, place where uh, all age group of people can live happily and comfortably.

✓ It is a peaceful place where people of all age groups can live happily and comfortably.

Use 'people of all age groups' or 'all age groups of people' with plural 'groups' and correct word order; remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× My whole family is the local residents of Pokhara and I have lived there since my birth.

✓ My whole family are local residents of Pokhara and I have lived there since I was born.

'Family' can be plural as 'are local residents' in British English; 'the local residents' is redundant. Use 'since I was born' as a natural expression rather than 'since my birth'.

× It's been 18 years since I have lived in Pokhara and I find my hometown the best place to live in and recently I am in Kathmandu for a month and I miss my hometown.

✓ I have lived in Pokhara for 18 years and I find my hometown the best place to live. Recently I have been in Kathmandu for a month, and I miss my hometown.

Use 'have lived for 18 years' rather than 'It's been 18 years since I have lived' which is awkward. Use present perfect continuous 'have been in Kathmandu' or present perfect 'have been' for recent time period. Break into two sentences and remove redundant ending preposition.

× Yes, I believe that my hometown is a perfect place for young people because it is one of the famous destination of our country and there are lots of opportunities where young people can build their career in business.

✓ Yes, I believe that my hometown is a perfect place for young people because it is one of the famous destinations of our country and there are many opportunities where young people can build their careers in business.

Use plural 'destinations' and 'many' instead of informal 'lots'. 'Careers' should be plural to match 'young people' plural subject.

× There are lots of hotels and restaurants which umm flourish because of Favour Lake and one can use its advantages.

✓ There are many hotels and restaurants that flourish because of Fewa Lake, and people can benefit from it.

Use 'that' instead of 'which' in restrictive clause; 'Fewa Lake' is correct name (not 'Favour'). Use 'people can benefit from it' instead of awkward 'use its advantages'. Replace 'lots of' with 'many' for formal tone.