Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise, directly state the hometown in one clear sentence, avoid repetition and unfinished clauses. Add a brief supporting detail if needed. Use correct tense and sentence structure.

Exemplo: My hometown is Bangkok, the capital of Thailand. I was born and raised there and enjoy its lively atmosphere.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence naming what you like, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because/so). Avoid fillers and incomplete sentences. Use correct district name and vocabulary (e.g., Sukhumvit, chaotic, convenient).

Exemplo: I like the convenience of my hometown Sukhumvit in Bangkok because there are many shopping malls and a wide variety of street food nearby. As a result, I can easily meet friends or find anything I need.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear time expression: use present perfect to show duration (have lived) and give the exact period or 'since' + point in time. Avoid extra nouns or incorrect forms.

Exemplo: I have lived in Sukhumvit district in Bangkok since I was born, so I have lived there for about 24 years.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/so). Use accurate vocabulary (pollution, crowded, busy) and concise phrasing. Avoid hesitations and correction mid-sentence.

Exemplo: In my opinion, Sukhumvit is not a great place for young people because it is very crowded and suffers from heavy air and noise pollution. As a result, outdoor activities are limited and living costs are relatively high.

× I was born and raised in Bangkok since I was born, and Bangkok is the capital of Thailand, which is.

✓ I was born and raised in Bangkok, which is the capital of Thailand.

The phrase 'since I was born' is redundant after 'was born' and conflicts with simple past. Use a concise past passive 'was born and raised' to describe origin. Also the clause 'which is' is incomplete; combine to 'Bangkok, which is the capital of Thailand.' Suggestion: keep past tense for birth and raising and remove redundant parts.

× MMM, I, I have been lived in Sukumi district, which is the most chaotic areas in the in Bangkok.

✓ I have lived in Sukhumvit district, which is one of the most chaotic areas in Bangkok.

The present perfect 'have been lived' is incorrect; use 'have lived' to express an action continuing to present. 'Sukumi' is likely 'Sukhumvit' and 'the most chaotic areas' should be 'one of the most chaotic areas' for grammatical and meaning accuracy. Remove duplicate 'in the'.

× But what I love the most in my, in my hometown is uh, the convenience because I can umm, go through shopping mall or access food.

✓ But what I love most about my hometown is the convenience because I can go to shopping malls and get food easily.

Sentence has fillers and incorrect prepositions: 'go through shopping mall' is wrong; use 'go to shopping malls.' 'Access food' is awkward; use 'get food' or 'access food easily.' Remove repeated 'in my' and fillers for clarity.

× Any, any places that I.

✓ Any places that I need are nearby.

This fragment is incomplete and lacks a verb. Provide a complete clause matching context: 'Any places that I need are nearby.' Ensure present simple tense to state general fact.

× I have a living and succumbed district in Bangkok since I was born.

✓ I have lived in Sukhumvit district in Bangkok since I was born.

The original mixes incorrect verb forms 'have a living and succumbed' and wrong district name. Use present perfect 'have lived' with 'since' to indicate duration from birth to present. Correct 'succumbed' to 'Sukhumvit.'

× In my opinion I think my hometown is not good for young people because in circumvent they sorry in Sukhumvit it's contain a lot of pollution and chaotic and busy city.

✓ In my opinion, my hometown is not good for young people because Sukhumvit has a lot of pollution and is chaotic and busy.

Multiple errors: 'in circumvent' is wrong—use 'Sukhumvit' directly. 'It's contain' is incorrect subject-verb form; use 'has' or 'contains.' Adjectives need linking verb 'is chaotic and busy.' Remove 'they sorry' filler. Use present simple to state a general opinion.