Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: - Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, danh từ số nhiều/ít, mạo từ). Ví dụ: "a school for gifted students", "passed the entrance exam". - Trả lời trực tiếp hơn bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, rồi bổ sung chi tiết rõ ràng (tối đa 3-4 câu). - Tránh từ thừa và lỗi phát âm; luyện phát âm các từ như "exam", "proud". - Sắp xếp ý mạch lạc: nêu bạn là học sinh → tên trường → đặc điểm → cảm xúc và lí do.

Exemplo: I am a student at Guo Hou Hui High School, a school for gifted students. I had to pass a competitive entrance exam to get in. I feel very proud because the selection is strict and the teachers are supportive.

Sugestão: - Trả lời rõ ràng, ngắn gọn: nêu nơi làm việc và thời gian (Ví dụ: "This summer I worked..."). - Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác: "part-time jobs", "coffee shop", "supermarket". - Hạn chế lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (thứ tự từ, thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động đã xảy ra). - Thêm 1 câu chi tiết ngắn giải thích mục đích hoặc cảm nhận.

Exemplo: This summer I worked part-time to gain experience. I had two jobs: one at a coffee shop and another at a supermarket. It helped me learn how to serve customers and manage tasks under pressure.

Sugestão: - Trả lời trực tiếp: "Yes" hoặc "No" rồi giải thích ngắn gọn. - Tránh lặp và nói lan man; liên kết ý bằng từ nối (because, so, however). - Giải thích lý do cụ thể vì sao không tốt (môi trường, nhiệm vụ, không phù hợp với mục tiêu nghề nghiệp). - Nêu mục tiêu nghề nghiệp ngắn gọn và liên kết với lí do không phù hợp.

Exemplo: No, I don't think it was an ideal place for me because the work was repetitive and I want to pursue a career in music. Working there did not help me develop the vocal or performance skills I need.

Sugestão: - Câu chủ đề rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng "No, I wouldn't" hoặc "No, I don't". - Giải thích cụ thể vì sao cảm thấy căng thẳng (ví dụ: đồng nghiệp, lịch làm việc, áp lực hoàn thành nhiệm vụ). - Sử dụng thì chính xác và hoàn chỉnh câu (ví dụ: "If I'm late, I get scolded"). - Thêm ví dụ ngắn minh họa hậu quả của stress tại nơi làm việc.

Exemplo: No, I didn't enjoy working there because it made me feel stressed. For example, if I was late I was often scolded by the manager, which made me anxious about shifts.

Sugestão: - Trả lời rõ ràng bằng một câu chủ đề: nêu kế hoạch chính (ví dụ: continue studying, pursue music). - Tránh câu mơ hồ; cụ thể hóa bước tiếp theo (học lên, tìm việc liên quan đến âm nhạc, luyện thanh, tham gia thử giọng). - Dùng cấu trúc tương lai đơn hoặc dự tính (I plan to..., I want to...). - Thêm 1-2 chi tiết thực tế và ngắn về cách đạt được mục tiêu.

Exemplo: Right now I want to focus on my studies and prepare for a career in music. I plan to take vocal lessons, join the school choir, and attend auditions in the next two years to gain performance experience.

× Yes, I'm a student in Guo Hou Hui High School which is a school for gifted student.

✓ Yes, I'm a student at Guo Hou Hui High School, which is a school for gifted students.

The adjective 'gifted' modifies 'students', which should be plural. Use the preposition 'at' for schools and add a comma before the relative clause. Suggestion: say 'a school for gifted students' or 'a school for gifted children.'

× My school must pass away the entrance of UH Examine to become a student, so I very proud of myself.

✓ My school requires passing the UH entrance exam to become a student, so I am very proud of myself.

The original uses incorrect modal and verb forms ('must pass away', 'Examine') and omits the verb 'am'. Use 'requires passing' or 'you must pass' and correct noun 'exam'. Ensure subject-verb structure: 'I am very proud.'

× In this summer I I have some chop to to try to to to have experience some jobs like I work at coffee and work at a a supermarket.

✓ This summer I had some short jobs to gain experience, such as working at a cafe and at a supermarket.

Tense should be past ('had') for completed summer experience. Many word choices are incorrect: 'chop' -> 'short jobs' or 'part-time jobs'; 'to have experience' -> 'to gain experience'; 'work at coffee' -> 'work at a cafe'. Also remove duplicate words. Ensure verb forms match subject and past context.

× I think is is not a excellent place to work because I think I want to uh, I want to become a singer to sing a song and before and perform some performance.

✓ I don't think it is an excellent place to work because I want to become a singer and perform on stage.

Use negative 'don't think' and correct word order 'it is'. Use article 'an' before vowel-sound 'excellent'. Simplify redundant phrases: 'become a singer' and 'perform on stage' are clearer than 'sing a song and before and perform some performance.'

× No, I don't like the place where I work because I feel stressed when I walk it in there.

✓ No, I don't like the place where I work because I feel stressed when I walk in there.

Incorrect insertion of object 'it' after 'walk'. The correct phrase is 'walk in there' or 'go in there'. Use 'enter' or 'go into it' if including an object: 'when I walk into it.'

× For example, when I I am not on time, I will I will be.

✓ For example, when I am not on time, I become very anxious.

Original sentence is incomplete and repetitive. 'I will I will be' lacks a complement. Provide a clear result clause: 'I become very anxious' or 'I feel stressed.' Use simple present for habitual situations.

× Now I just want to study more and my future work plans is that I had a walk in cool place and walk in a short.

✓ Now I just want to study more, and my future work plans are to find a job in a pleasant place for a short period.

Subject-verb agreement: 'plans are' not 'plans is'. 'I had a walk in cool place' is unclear and incorrectly tense. Clarify intent: 'find a job in a pleasant place' and 'for a short period' if that was intended. Use infinitive 'to find' after 'plans'.