Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but a stronger topic sentence and more concise, natural phrasing would improve it. Begin with a direct statement (e.g., "I'm a student") then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unnecessary time phrases and keep sentences short (max 3–4).

Exemplo: I'm a student. I just finished 12th grade and I'm preparing to start a commercial pilot course in Canada this November.

Sugestão: This response is direct and appropriate. To sound more natural, give a brief expansion that links to your study plans rather than repeating. Use a simple linking phrase and keep it concise.

Exemplo: I don't work at the moment; I'm a student focusing on pilot training, so I'm concentrating on my aviation studies.

Sugestão: You repeat earlier points and use awkward phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence about the school, then give one or two specific positives with correct vocabulary. Avoid irrelevant words and correct plural/possessive forms (e.g., "music facilities" → "good facilities").

Exemplo: Although I don't work there, the flight school I study at, called 12 Zero, is excellent. It has modern aircraft and good training facilities, which help students learn effectively.

Sugestão: This answer is confusing with many errors and exaggerated or unclear details. Give a single clear opinion and support it with specific, realistic details. Use linking words (e.g., "also, because") and correct nouns/quantities. Avoid hyperbole and unrelated facts.

Exemplo: Yes, I like the school. It is in northern Canada and very convenient because supermarkets and student housing are close to the air base, and the school operates a modern fleet with experienced instructors.

Sugestão: The idea is relevant but the answer has vocabulary mistakes and unclear details ("airline planet pilot", unrealistic amount). Give a clear sequence: short-term plan, long-term goal, and specific targets. Use correct terminology and realistic details.

Exemplo: In the short term, I plan to work as a flight instructor after I finish my training. Later, I hope to join a major airline such as Etihad or Emirates and fly commercial aircraft as a captain or first officer.

× I have just completed my 12th grade earlier this year and now I'm preparing to pursue a commercial pilot's license in Canada this November.

✓ I completed my 12th grade earlier this year and now I'm preparing to pursue a commercial pilot's license in Canada this November.

The original mixes present perfect 'have just completed' with a specific time expression 'earlier this year'. In English, present perfect is not normally used with definite past time expressions. Use simple past 'completed' with the specified time 'earlier this year'. Suggestion: use present perfect only for unspecified past time or simple past with specific time expressions.

× As I said before, I am a student so I don't really work.

✓ As I said before, I am a student, so I don't really work.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' joining two independent clauses. Add the comma to improve sentence structure and clarity.

× I study at 12 Zero which is a flight school in Canada and it is quite nice and has a music facilities and aircraft fleet.

✓ I study at 12 Zero, which is a flight school in Canada; it is quite nice and has music facilities and an aircraft fleet.

Errors: plural/Article mistakes and punctuation. 'a music facilities' is wrong because 'facilities' is plural and should not have 'a'; use 'music facilities'. 'aircraft fleet' usually takes an article 'an' or 'the' depending on context; 'an aircraft fleet' fits here. Also add commas and a semicolon to separate clauses. Suggestion: match singular/plural and use appropriate articles.

× If you talk about half's error, it is quite a nice right school in northern Canada.

✓ If you are talking about the school's location, it is a quite nice school in northern Canada.

Multiple problems: unclear phrase 'half's error' seems incorrect—assume intended 'school's location' or 'the place'. 'it is a quite nice right school' is ungrammatical: 'quite nice school' needs an article 'a' and 'right' is unnecessary. Use present continuous 'are talking' for this conditional reference. Suggestion: clarify the meaning and use correct articles and adjective order.

× It also has a lot of conveniences like supermarkets are located quite near to the air base in 1000 amazing modern fleets with good instructional quality.

✓ It also has many conveniences, such as supermarkets located quite near the air base, and a modern fleet of about 1,000 aircraft with good instructional quality.

Problems: 'a lot of conveniences' is awkward—'many conveniences' is better. 'like supermarkets are located' is ungrammatical; use 'such as supermarkets located'. Preposition 'near to' should be 'near'. 'in 1000 amazing modern fleets' is incorrect: intended meaning is a fleet of about 1,000 aircraft; reorder to 'a modern fleet of about 1,000 aircraft'. Suggestion: break into clearer phrases and correct prepositions and noun phrases.

× I intend to work as a flight instructor after finishing my flight training and after that I want to become an airline planet pilot when I finally have $1500 and that's it.

✓ I intend to work as a flight instructor after finishing my flight training, and after that I want to become an airline pilot when I have saved $1,500.

Errors: 'airline planet pilot' is nonsensical; should be 'airline pilot'. 'when I finally have $1500' is informal and unclear—use 'when I have saved $1,500'. Remove filler 'and that's it' in formal response. Keep present/future intent: 'intend' and 'want' are correct. Suggestion: use precise vocabulary and proper number formatting.

× I would probably like to fly for Etiquette or Emirates in the future.

✓ I would probably like to fly for Etihad or Emirates in the future.

'Etiquette' appears to be a mispronunciation or misspelling of the airline name 'Etihad'. Proper nouns must be correct. Pronoun error classification used because wrong word choice affects reference. Suggestion: check proper names of airlines and spell them correctly.