Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 内容：回答直接，但信息有重复和不够具体（例如“planning data”和“budget data”重复）。语言：句子结构和语法多处错误（例如“Enter in multinational pharmaceutical company”“handle with the project”）。连贯性：缺少连接词，句子不够流畅。 改进建议：回答时先用一句主题句直接说明职业，然后用1–2句补充具体职责，避免重复；注意基本语法（主谓一致、动词搭配）；使用连接词（such as, for example, and）使信息更连贯。练习时请把每个句子控制在5句以内并保持自然口语表达。

Exemplo: I work as a management accountant at a multinational pharmaceutical company. My main responsibilities include preparing financial statements and creating budgets. I also handle project-related financial planning, such as forecasting costs and monitoring project expenses. For example, I prepare monthly reports to help project managers control spending.

Sugestão: 内容：回答提到了公司名称和业务领域，但信息表达不清晰（语法错误，术语使用不准确）。语言：句子结构混乱，缺少定冠词和复数形式错误（“three business sector”应为“three business sectors”）。连贯性：最后的“which is famous in all the”不完整。 改进建议：用一句话说明公司和其主要业务部门，然后用一句补充公司特点或规模。注意名词复数、定冠词以及完整句子表达。

Exemplo: I currently work at Mark, a pharmaceutical company. The company has three main business sectors: healthcare, life sciences, and electronics. It is well-known internationally for its innovative products in these areas.

Sugestão: 内容：表达肯定并给出原因，但原因不够具体且有语法错误（“provide”应为“provides”，“it also have”应改）。连贯性：用词重复，句子可更简洁有力。 改进建议：先简短肯定，再列举一到两个具体优点，用连接词连贯句子；注意主谓一致与代词用法。可以举具体福利或例子增强说服力。

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. Mark provides many benefits for employees, including competitive health insurance and flexible working hours. Additionally, the company has a friendly atmosphere where colleagues regularly share knowledge to help each other improve.

Sugestão: 内容：回答结构清晰（两点原因），但表达重复且有语法和用词错误（“college”误用，应为“colleagues”；主谓不一致；重复“the the”）。细节不足，未举例证说明“welfare”具体是什么。 改进建议：修正词汇错误和语法，分别展开两点原因并给出具体例子（例如培训机会、保险、年假）。保持句子简短、连贯，使用连接词如“first”与“second”。

Exemplo: Yes, I really like my company for two main reasons. First, my colleagues are friendly and supportive; for example, we have weekly knowledge-sharing sessions. Second, the company provides good welfare benefits such as comprehensive health insurance and paid training courses.

Sugestão: 内容：有明确的五年计划，但表述含糊且未完成（最后一句不完整）。时间表达不准确（“At the beginning of three years”不清晰）。语言和语法问题较多（“master degree”应为“master’s degree”；“pass the exam”需说明是哪种考试）。 改进建议：用一两句清楚地阐述五年计划的主要目标和步骤，明确时间点和具体目标（例如考取CPA、攻读硕士），并补充自己希望提升的技能。保持句子完整并使用连接词。

Exemplo: I have a five-year plan focused on career development. In the next three years I plan to pass the ACCA exams and then enrol in a university to complete my master’s degree in accounting. Besides that, I want to improve my financial modelling skills by taking online courses and applying them to real projects.

× I work as a management accountant. Enter in multinational pharmaceutical company.

✓ I work as a management accountant in a multinational pharmaceutical company.

原句断裂成两部分，“Enter in multinational pharmaceutical company.” 没有主语和谓语，且动词enter用法不当。应把信息合并成完整句子并使用介词in表地点。建议将两句合并为“I work as a management accountant in a multinational pharmaceutical company.” 以形成完整的主谓结构并正确使用介词。

× In my daily work, I need to prepare the financial statement and budget data and planning data and also handle with the project.

✓ In my daily work, I need to prepare financial statements, budget and planning data, and also handle projects.

原句中时态总体为一般现在时，但存在可数名词单复数错误（financial statement → financial statements），并且短语冗长、搭配不当（handle with → handle projects/handle a project）。同时列举项应使用并列结构并用逗号分隔。建议使用复数和正确动词搭配：handle projects。

× Currently I work at Mark which is a pharmaceutical company and there are three business sector including healthcare, life science, electronic which is famous in all the.

✓ Currently I work at Mark, which is a pharmaceutical company. It has three business sectors including healthcare, life sciences and electronics, which are well known worldwide.

原句句子过长且结构混乱：缺少标点，名词复数形式错误（sector → sectors），并且“electronic” 用作名词不当，短语“famous in all the”不完整。需拆成两个句子，修正复数和名词形式，并补全比较对象为“worldwide”。建议拆句并使用正确复数形式和名词形式：life sciences, electronics。

× Yes, definitely. Mark provide many benefits for employees such as it also have the friendly atmosphere among colleagues and they can share the knowledge with each other to improve.

✓ Yes, definitely. Mark provides many benefits for employees, such as a friendly atmosphere among colleagues where they can share knowledge with each other to improve.

原句主谓不一致：Mark（单数）应与动词provides（第3人称单数）一致；此外“it also have”主谓不一致且多余主语“it”。并且“the friendly atmosphere among colleagues”前不需要定冠词“the”，而“share the knowledge”在这里更自然为“share knowledge”。建议使用第三人称单数动词形式并删去多余代词，优化定冠词使用。

× First the college are friendly and they also can share knowledge with me and besides that the the company also provide welfare.

✓ First, the colleagues are friendly and they can share knowledge with me. Besides that, the company also provides good welfare benefits.

原句中“college”拼写错误，应为colleagues（同事）；此外“the the”重复；主谓不一致（company → provides）。句子太长应拆分为两句以提高清晰度，并修正名词拼写和动词形式。建议检查单词拼写并保持主谓一致，使用简单句分开表达不同内容。

× Currently, I have a five years plan. At the beginning of three years, I plan to pass the exam and go to university to finish my master degree. And besides that I would like to improve my.

✓ Currently, I have a five-year plan. In the first three years, I plan to pass the exam and go to university to finish my master's degree. Besides that, I would like to improve my professional skills.

原句存在数词与名词的搭配错误（a five years plan → a five-year plan）、时间表达不当（At the beginning of three years → In the first three years），学位名词应为master's degree，句尾不完整（I would like to improve my.）。建议使用复合形容词five-year，正确的时间短语in the first three years，且补全要提高的内容（例如 professional skills）。