Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. State your status once, then add one or two concise supporting details (when you started university and whether you plan to work now). Use linking words like "and" or "so" for coherence and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "a student at university" or "a university student").

Exemplo: I'm a university student. I recently started my studies after finishing school, so I haven't begun full-time work yet. However, I might look for part-time jobs once I settle into my course.

Sugestão: Start with a clear direct statement and reduce fillers and hesitations. Correct small grammar: say "I'm not an official employee" or "I'm not employed full-time". Add a brief detail about what you teach or who your students are to make the answer specific.

Exemplo: I don't have an official job, but I teach private lessons at my home. I mostly tutor high-school students in English and math, usually two or three students per week.

Sugestão: Give a concise reasoned answer: one sentence stating your opinion followed by one specific reason. Avoid repeating the same point (convenient, comfortable, freedom) multiple times—choose the strongest two reasons and link them with "because" or "as".

Exemplo: Yes, it's a good place to work because it's comfortable and convenient. For example, teaching at home lets me set flexible hours and create a relaxed atmosphere for my students.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeating phrases (calm, comfortable, suits me). Provide one specific example of what you enjoy about the atmosphere, and use a linking phrase such as "because" to connect your opinion with the reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I like working at home because the atmosphere is calm, which helps both me and my students concentrate. For instance, I can arrange a quiet, well-lit corner specifically for lessons.

Sugestão: Be clearer and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence about your uncertainty, then give a realistic plan or ambition. Avoid unclear phrases like "I will be at Diplomat which which commute with international companies." Instead explain the role you aim for (e.g., diplomat or a job involving international companies) and provide one reason or step you will take.

Exemplo: I don't have exact plans yet, but I hope to work in international relations. For example, I aim to become a diplomat or work for a multinational company, so I'm planning to study foreign languages and international law to prepare for that role.

× Well, actually now I'm a student of at school.

✓ Well, actually now I'm a student at school.

The article 'a' before 'school' is unnecessary when using the preposition 'at'. Use 'at school' to indicate being enrolled; 'a school' would be used with verbs like 'attend' or phrases like 'a student at a school'. Suggestion: say 'I'm a student at school' or 'I'm studying at the university.'

× Recently I got into university and now I'm a student of a university.

✓ Recently I got into university and now I'm a student at a university.

Use 'at a university' rather than 'of a university'. The preposition 'at' is standard when referring to attendance. Alternatively, omit the article: 'I got into university' is also acceptable in some varieties of English. Suggestion: 'I got into university' or 'I got into a university and now I'm a student there.'

× But, but it's just early to start a work, so yeah.

✓ But it's just too early to start work, so yeah.

Use 'too early' instead of 'just early' to express premature timing. Also, 'work' as an uncountable noun does not need the article 'a'. Saying 'start a work' is incorrect. Suggestion: 'it's too early to start working' or 'it's too early to start work.'

× Well, actually now, now I'm not officially worker, but I teach some students at my home, so I work as a teacher now.

✓ Well, actually now I'm not an official worker, but I teach some students at my home, so I work as a teacher now.

The noun 'worker' requires an article 'an' to be grammatically correct in this context. Alternatively, use 'not officially employed' which is more natural. Suggestion: 'I'm not officially employed' or 'I'm not an official worker.'

× So yeah, that's my current uh, work.

✓ So yeah, that's my current work.

Removing filler 'uh' makes the sentence clearer. 'Current work' is correct; no article is needed because 'work' is uncountable here. Suggestion: 'That's my current work' or 'That's my current job.'

× You know, my home is very convenient and comfortable for me and I feel free and independent at my home and I can do or I can speak as I want.

✓ You know, my home is very convenient and comfortable for me, and I feel free and independent at home; I can act and speak as I want.

Avoid repeating 'my home'—'at home' is idiomatic. 'Do or I can speak' is ungrammatical; use parallel verbs 'act and speak'. Also combine clauses with commas or semicolons for clarity. Suggestion: 'I feel free and independent at home; I can do and say what I want.'

× So definitely yes, my workplace, I mean, my home is very good place to work.

✓ So definitely yes, my workplace, I mean my home, is a very good place to work.

Add the indefinite article 'a' before 'very good place'. Also remove the comma before 'my home' and place commas correctly around the parenthetical phrase. Suggestion: 'my home is a very good place to work.'

× Uh, definitely yes 'cause the vibe and atmosphere is very calm and very comfortable for me and it really suits for me.

✓ Uh, definitely yes, because the vibe and atmosphere are very calm and comfortable for me, and they really suit me.

Use 'because' instead of informal 'cause'. Subject 'the vibe and atmosphere' is plural, so use 'are'. 'Suit' does not take 'for'—use 'suit me'. Suggestion: 'the atmosphere suits me' or 'it really suits me.'

× Yeah, my answer is yes.

✓ Yes, my answer is yes.

The original is acceptable conversationally but placing 'Yes' first is more natural. No major grammar error; this is style. Suggestion: simply 'Yes.'

× Well, my future work plans are not exact now yet, but I know I will be at Diplomat which which commute with international companies.

✓ Well, my future work plans are not definite yet, but I know I want to be a diplomat who will work with international companies.

'Not exact now yet' is unidiomatic; use 'not definite yet'. 'I will be at Diplomat' is incorrect—use 'be a diplomat'. 'Which which' is duplicated and wrong; use 'who' for people. 'Commute with international companies' is incorrect verb choice—'work with' or 'deal with' is appropriate. Suggestion: 'I want to be a diplomat who will work with international companies.'