Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "I'm a student") then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and correct collocations (study biology, scientific laboratory, internship). Use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I'm a university student and I will graduate next year. I study biology and chemistry, and after graduation I hope to do an internship in a scientific laboratory to gain practical experience.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer: if you don't work, say so immediately, then explain briefly why. Remove hesitations and keep to one or two supporting sentences with clear reasons.

Exemplo: I don't have a job right now because I'm focusing on my studies to graduate next year. I prefer to concentrate on coursework and laboratory training before starting part-time or full-time work.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give specific reasons and examples. Correct vocabulary (molecular laboratory, feel more fulfilled). Use one linking word to connect reason (because, since) and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I think a molecular laboratory would be a good place to work because I am passionate about biology and would enjoy doing hands-on experiments. Working there would help me develop practical skills and feel professionally fulfilled.

Sugestão: Respond succinctly: state whether you would like it, then give one or two clear reasons with specific details. Avoid repeating the same adjective; show variety in vocabulary (rewarding, stimulating).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like the place where I will work because biology fascinates me and the work would be intellectually stimulating. I expect the job to be rewarding and to help me grow professionally.

Sugestão: Begin with a concise topic sentence describing your main plan, then add specific steps or goals. Use correct grammar ("My plan is to...") and include concrete actions (internships, research, further study). Limit to two sentences.

Exemplo: My main plan is to work in a research laboratory and gain expertise in molecular biology. To achieve this, I will apply for internships, attend workshops, and possibly pursue a master's degree to deepen my knowledge.

× I'm currently a student, I will graduate next year, uh, I'm studying on biology, umm, biology and chemistry.

✓ I'm currently a student; I will graduate next year. I'm studying biology and chemistry.

The sentence mixes tenses and contains incorrect preposition use ('studying on biology'). Split into two sentences for clarity and use simple present for study ('I study' or 'I'm studying') and future for graduation ('I will graduate next year'). Remove the preposition 'on' after 'studying'. Suggestion: Use 'I'm studying biology and chemistry' or 'I study biology and chemistry'. Use punctuation to separate ideas.

× So afterwards I hope to start the new and umm, internship, uh, in a company or some uh, scientistic laboratory.

✓ So afterwards I hope to start a new internship in a company or a scientific laboratory.

'the new internship' is incorrect here; use the indefinite article 'a' for a non-specific internship. 'Scientistic' is not correct English; use 'scientific'. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: use 'a new internship' and 'a scientific laboratory'.

× Umm, I'm working. I'm starting now actually, uh, I'm not working because umm, I need to focus on schools to achieve my dreams and uh, yes, achieve and complete and, uh, to work on some.

✓ I'm not working at the moment because I need to focus on school to achieve my dreams and gain new skills.

The original repeats contradictory statements ('I'm working' then 'I'm not working'). Use present continuous or simple present consistently. 'Schools' should be singular 'school' in this context. 'Work on some' is incomplete; clarify purpose such as 'gain new skills'. Suggestion: choose one clear statement and remove fillers.

× I think the molecular laboratory is good place because I'm really keen on biology and it makes me film more fulfilling and enjoy.

✓ I think the molecular laboratory is a good place because I'm really keen on biology and it makes my work more fulfilling and enjoyable.

Missing article before 'good place' ('a good place'). 'film' is a typo; intended word likely 'feel' or 'make'. 'Makes me film more fulfilling and enjoy' is ungrammatical; correct to 'makes my work more fulfilling and enjoyable.' Suggestion: use articles and correct adjectives/adverbs.

× I enjoy it actually and I think it the best way or best withdraw.

✓ I enjoy it, and I think it is the best option for me.

Sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrase 'best withdraw'. Replace with 'best option' and include the verb 'is'. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases and include linking verb.

× Actually, I would like, I would like the place where I will work because as I said, biology is really interesting subject and I think that my job is really incredible and fulfilling, makes my life fulfilling and yes.

✓ Actually, I would like to work at the place where I will be employed because, as I said, biology is a really interesting subject and I think my job will be incredible and fulfilling; it will make my life satisfying.

Redundant 'I would like' repeated; awkward clause order. 'Interesting subject' needs article 'a'. Use future tense 'will be employed' to match 'will work' and revise sentence for parallel structure. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use correct articles and tense consistency.

× My future work plan you work hard and achieve all my goals and the and acquire and new knowledge that I have never thought about.

✓ My future work plan is to work hard, achieve all my goals, and acquire new knowledge that I never imagined.

Original lacks a main verb ('is to') making it a sentence without proper structure. Remove redundant words ('the and acquire and') and use parallel infinitive forms ('to work', 'to achieve', 'to acquire'). 'Never thought about' is awkward; use 'never imagined' or 'never thought I would have'. Suggestion: start with 'My future work plan is to...'.}]}END_OF_RESPONSE_MARKER