Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be slightly more concise and use smoother phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one supporting detail. Avoid filler words like "recently" twice or redundancy.

Exemplo: I'm a second-year medical student. I recently started an internship at a nearby pharmacy, where I'm learning practical skills and adapting to the work environment.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and hesitations, and group related ideas with linking words. Give one or two clear points (location and supportive manager) using concise sentences and linking words like "and" or "because".

Exemplo: I work at a pharmacy within walking distance of my home, so I don't have any transport issues. Also, the manager is very supportive and welcomes my questions, which helps me learn quickly.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and correct grammar (use "advise" or "give advice"). Use one linking phrase to add a reason (e.g., "because"), and be specific about how colleagues help you.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a good place to work because the atmosphere is calm and supportive. My colleagues willingly give advice and help me with practical tasks, which makes the job pleasant.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating words and streamline ambitions into one clear sentence. Use linking words (for example, "and") to connect reasons you enjoy it and a concise statement about future hopes.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy it a lot because the work is varied and my hours are flexible. I hope to progress there in the future and possibly obtain a part-time position after gaining more experience.

Sugestão: Be direct about plans and use clearer linking words like "however" to contrast work now with long-term goals. Avoid colloquial phrases like "a kind of hustle" in formal speech; instead say "temporary" or "for extra income."

Exemplo: I plan to continue working there part-time while I study as a temporary source of income. However, after I graduate in about seven years, my aim is to train and work as a doctor.

× I'm a second year medical student but I recently got an internship at a pharmacy and I'm getting used to the work environment.

✓ I'm a second-year medical student, and I recently got an internship at a pharmacy, so I'm getting used to the work environment.

Use present continuous 'I'm getting used' is fine; main issues addressed: hyphenate 'second-year' as a compound adjective and add conjunctions/commas for clarity. This keeps present tense and shows logical connection between clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× As I told you, the pharmacy is a walking distance from my house so I do not have transport problems.

✓ As I told you, the pharmacy is within walking distance of my house, so I do not have transport problems.

Use the idiomatic preposition phrase 'within walking distance of' (not 'a walking distance from'). This corrects preposition and article usage to match common English expressions. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× It's very close and the the the manager is very helpful.

✓ It's very close, and the manager is very helpful.

Remove repeated words 'the the the' and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to join two independent clauses. This improves sentence structure and readability. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× He does not mind me asking a lot of questions.

✓ He does not mind my asking a lot of questions.

After verbs like 'mind', use a gerund; use the possessive 'my' with the gerund 'asking' to make the sentence more formal and grammatically precise. Alternatively, 'He does not mind me asking a lot of questions' is common in speech but less formal. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× Yes, fortunately for me, it's not a toxic, uh, work environment where people refuse to help you.

✓ Yes, fortunately for me, it's not a toxic work environment where people refuse to help you.

Remove the comma between 'toxic' and 'work' because 'toxic work environment' is a single noun phrase; unnecessary comma interrupts phrase. This fixes article/phrase punctuation issues. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× My colleagues are very calm and they're happy when they could, umm, advice me and assist me.

✓ My colleagues are very calm, and they're happy when they can advise and assist me.

Use 'can' (present ability) instead of 'could' to match present tense context, and use the verb 'advise' rather than the noun 'advice'. Remove filler 'umm' and add comma for clarity. This corrects verb form and pronoun/verb usage. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

Examiner asked 'Would you like the place where you work?' but the student should answer the question 'Do you like the place where you work?'. In context, use 'Do you like' to ask about current preference. However as a student response, correcting the student's reply: change to 'Yes, I enjoy it very much actually.' No verb change required in student reply. Here we provide correct question form for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 9

× Yes, I enjoy it very much actually.

✓ Yes, I enjoy it very much, actually.

Add comma before 'actually' for natural speech rhythm; present simple 'I enjoy' correctly expresses current general liking. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× It's not monotonous and I have very flexible hours and I hope one day I can climb the career ladder and hopefully get get a halftime job there.

✓ It's not monotonous, I have very flexible hours, and I hope one day I can climb the career ladder and get a part-time job there.

Remove duplicate 'get', replace 'half-time' with 'part-time' (more common), add commas to separate clauses, and avoid redundant 'hopefully' since 'I hope' already conveys the idea. This corrects adverb/redundancy and word choice. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× As my colleagues told me, it's a very rewarding job.

✓ As my colleagues told me, it's a very rewarding job.

Sentence is acceptable; 'told me' (past) reporting present-general fact 'it's' is correct. No correction needed. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I plan on continuing to work there as a part time student.

✓ I plan to continue working there while I am a part-time student.

Use 'plan to' and 'continue working' for smoother verb construction; 'while I am a part-time student' clarifies timing. Hyphenate 'part-time'. This fixes preposition and phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× It's not my job preference, it's a kind of hustle.

✓ It's not my preferred job; it's more of a side hustle.

Use 'preferred job' instead of 'job preference' for natural phrasing and 'side hustle' is the common expression. Use semicolon or period to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× But after seven years I'll graduate and hopefully I'll become a good doctor.

✓ But in seven years I'll graduate, and hopefully I'll become a good doctor.

Use 'in seven years' or 'after seven years' is acceptable; 'in seven years' is more natural for expected future time. Keep future 'I'll graduate' consistent. Add comma before coordinating conjunction. Grammar problem type ID: 7