Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, use present simple for current facts, and remove fragments. Avoid tense errors and unnecessary repetition. Add one or two specific details about the course to enrich the answer, linked smoothly with a conjunction.

Exemplo: I’m a student at Gunnaractive University in Amritsar, studying a short dietetics course. I chose this course to apply my biology background, and I find practical classes—like nutrition assessment—especially useful for my future career.

Sugestão: Answer directly and briefly. Use a clear opening sentence stating you do not work, then explain what you are doing now and a specific plan for the future. Correct phrasing: “I’m not working at the moment.” Use linking words like 'so' or 'and' to connect ideas coherently.

Exemplo: I’m not working at the moment; I’m studying a dietetics course full-time. After I finish, I plan to continue my studies in Australia to specialise further in clinical nutrition.

Sugestão: Clarify whether you mean workplace or study place and avoid hesitation. Use present simple to describe quality and give two specific reasons with linking words. Replace vague phrases with precise descriptions of staff support and learning facilities.

Exemplo: I’m referring to my university rather than a workplace, and it’s an excellent learning environment. The teachers are supportive and explain complex topics clearly, and the campus facilities—like labs and study rooms—help me understand difficult material.

Sugestão: Give a direct personal statement and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid meta-comments and maintain natural phrasing. Use present simple for preferences and concrete examples of what you like about the campus.

Exemplo: Yes, I like the place where I study because the campus is calm and close to nature. For example, there are many trees and flower beds, which make it a peaceful place to study and relax between classes.

Sugestão: Be precise about your future plans and correct the course names. State one clear goal, give a concise reason, and include a specific step (where and what you will study). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “how species differs.”

Exemplo: After finishing my dietetics course, I plan to study speech pathology in Australia because I’m fascinated by language development and therapy. I hope to specialise in helping children with speech delays by completing a postgraduate diploma there.

× After finishing my high school.

✓ After finishing high school, I wanted to make use of my biology knowledge and study something that would become useful for me.

This fragment lacks a main verb and does not form a complete sentence (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Combine it with the following idea to make a complete sentence and match tense: use past reference to finishing school and link purpose with a full clause. Suggestion: connect with a comma and add a subject and verb ('I wanted').

× That's why I enroll in a short term course and I really enjoying it.

✓ That's why I enrolled in a short-term course and I am really enjoying it.

Two issues: tense and verb form (IDs 6 and 10). 'Enroll' should be past ('enrolled') because it follows the past action of finishing school; 'enjoying' requires a helping verb ('am') to form present continuous. Also add a hyphen in 'short-term'.

× Well, I recently mentioned earlier that I'm not working, I'm a student so I'm focusing on my dietitian course and after that I plan for to pursue my further study in Australia.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I'm not working; I'm a student, so I'm focusing on my dietitian course and after that I plan to pursue further study in Australia.

Pronoun/time phrase redundancy and awkward phrasing (ID 12). 'Recently mentioned earlier' is redundant; use 'As I mentioned earlier'. 'Plan for to pursue' is incorrect; use 'plan to pursue'. Drop 'my' before 'further study' for natural collocation. Use punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× I'm not working right now. I'm a student, so where I study it is very good place and environment, friend friendly, like teachers are very cooperative and uh, they can explain each and everything in more precise way that I understand single word and which would become very helpful for me to learn any difficult topics.

✓ I'm not working right now; I'm a student. The place where I study is very good, with a friendly environment. The teachers are very cooperative and can explain everything precisely so I can understand each word, which helps me learn difficult topics.

Multiple errors: awkward adjective/adverb use and word order (ID 13) and sentence structure (ID 26). 'Friend friendly' should be 'friendly', 'each and everything' is redundant — 'everything' or 'each word'. 'in more precise way' should be 'precisely' or 'in a more precise way'. Reorder clauses to be clear and concise, use commas and relative clauses correctly.

× I really like the place where I study because I’m not working at the moment and the campus is calm and friendly.

✓ I really like the place where I study because I am not working at the moment, and the campus is calm and friendly.

Minor tense/contract form: expand contraction for formality and add a comma before 'and' joining independent clauses (ID 26). This preserves present-simple routine and improves clarity.

× Well, currently I'm enrolled in a dietitian course, but after that I want to study in a speech pathologist course at Australia because I found out it is very fascinating to learn about how they how species differs and how we teach to the other students to speak different words like that's why it is was my future plans.

✓ Currently I'm enrolled in a dietitian course, but after that I want to study a speech pathology course in Australia because I find it very fascinating to learn how speech varies between people and how we teach others to speak; that's why it is my future plan.

Multiple tense and vocabulary errors: use present simple 'find' for current feelings (ID 6). 'Speech pathologist course' should be 'speech pathology course' (noun form). 'At Australia' is incorrect preposition; use 'in Australia' (ID 11). 'How species differs' is incorrect subject and verb agreement and word choice; use 'how speech varies between people' (IDs 27 and 19). Remove redundant 'it is was' and use singular 'plan' for 'future plan' (ID 1). Reorder and simplify for clarity.