Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct institution name capitalization and add a short detail about your role. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors.

Exemplo: I work as a medical intern at Mono Medical College and Hospital. I assist doctors on wards and help with patient examinations and basic procedures.

Sugestão: Use proper article and preposition usage and make the timeline clearer. Use linking words to connect current and future placements.

Exemplo: I’m currently working in the gynecology and obstetrics department as a medical intern. After this rotation, I will move to the internal medicine department to gain broader clinical experience.

Sugestão: Avoid grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Use one or two clear reasons with specific examples and linking words. Correct subject-verb agreement and article use.

Exemplo: Yes, it’s a great place to work because the staff are friendly and supportive. For example, my mentor and professors always answer my questions and give constructive feedback that helps me improve my clinical skills.

Sugestão: “Would like” phrasing is odd here; use “Do you like…?” structure by stating reasons succinctly. Replace unclear word “approvable” with ‘approachable’ or ‘supportive’. Fix tense and reduce repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I really like working there because my mentors and professors are very approachable. They don’t mind when I ask the same question more than once, which makes learning easier.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid repeating “in future.” Use correct preposition after ‘degree’ and a brief reason for choosing cardiology. Include one linking phrase for fluency.

Exemplo: In the future, I hope to pursue an MD in cardiology because I’m fascinated by heart diseases and I want to treat patients with complex cardiovascular problems.

× I work as a medical intern in mono Medical College and hospital.

✓ I work as a medical intern at Mono Medical College and Hospital.

Use 'at' for institutions/places (preposition error type 11) and capitalize proper nouns. Also use 'Hospital' as part of the name. Suggestion: say 'at Mono Medical College and Hospital.'

× Currently I'm working at gynecology and obstetrics department as a medical intern.

✓ Currently I'm working in the Gynecology and Obstetrics Department as a medical intern.

Use 'in' for departments (preposition error type 11) and capitalize the department name. Also include 'the' before department for specificity (article error type 22). Suggestion: 'in the Gynecology and Obstetrics Department.'

× Then I will join at internal medicine department.

✓ Then I will join the Internal Medicine Department.

Do not use 'join at' in this context; use 'join' with the object (sentence structure error 26) and include 'the' for the specific department (article error 22). Capitalize department name. Suggestion: 'I will join the Internal Medicine Department.'

× Yes, it is very good place to work because it has a very friendly environment.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place to work because it has a very friendly environment.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'very good place' (article error type 22). Suggestion: include 'a' to make the noun phrase grammatical.

× My mentor CA and all of my professor are very supportive.

✓ My mentor CA and all of my professors are very supportive.

Plural subject requires plural noun 'professors' (singular/plural issue type 1 and subject-verb agreement type 27). Suggestion: use 'professors' when referring to multiple people.

× They always answered my all questions and they helps me to improve my skill.

✓ They always answer all my questions and they help me to improve my skills.

Use present simple 'answer' and 'help' for habitual actions (present tense issue type 6). 'All my questions' order is more natural (sentence structure 26). 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' to refer to abilities (singular/plural issue type 1). Suggestion: 'They always answer all my questions and help me improve my skills.'

× Yes, I would love the place where I work because my mentors and all my professors are always approvable.

✓ Yes, I love the place where I work because my mentors and all my professors are always supportive.

'Would love' is inappropriate when stating a general preference for a place of work (modal/tense issue type 7/6); use present simple 'love'. 'Approvable' is incorrect word choice (incorrect use of adjectives type 13); 'supportive' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: 'I love the place... because my mentors ... are always supportive.'

× They don't mind when I repeat my questions.

✓ They don't mind when I repeat my questions.

This sentence is grammatically correct. Keep as is. Note: It uses correct negation and tense appropriate for habitual actions.

× In future, I would love to pursue a MD degree on cardiology because I want to be a cardiologist in future.

✓ In the future, I would like to pursue an MD degree in cardiology because I want to be a cardiologist.

Use 'the' with 'future' when referring to a general future time (article error type 22). Use 'would like' instead of 'would love' for stating a plan (modal verb/tense nuance type 4/7). Use 'an' before 'MD' because 'MD' begins with a vowel sound (article error type 22). Use 'in cardiology' (preposition error type 11) rather than 'on cardiology'. Avoid repeating 'in future' twice (sentence structure error 26). Also 'pursue an MD degree in cardiology' is the natural collocation. Suggestion: 'In the future, I would like to pursue an MD degree in cardiology because I want to be a cardiologist.'