Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your response is clear and relevant but has minor grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try a concise topic sentence, correct verb forms, and one or two supporting details linked logically. Avoid repeating the same idea (focusing on health) twice.

Exemplo: I used to work as a teacher in India, but at the moment I’ve taken some time off to focus on my health. For example, I now exercise regularly and follow a healthier diet, which has improved my energy and mood.

Sugestão: Good direct answer and personal comment. Make sentences more natural by combining ideas and correcting small errors (‘everyday’ -> ‘every day’). Add a brief specific detail about what made it amazing.

Exemplo: I worked at MAS International School in India, which was a great place for a new teacher. For instance, I had supportive mentors and opportunities to lead small projects, so I learned a lot in my first year.

Sugestão: Strong, detailed response with personal example. To improve, reduce repetition (‘because’ used twice) and tighten sentences using linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘in particular’. Correct tense/word choice (organising -> organizing/organising consistent).

Exemplo: Yes, it was a very supportive workplace. For example, my colleague Mia showed me around on my first day and helped me organize lesson plans, so I never felt like an outsider.

Sugestão: Clear and positive answer. Improve coherence by starting with a direct topic sentence, then add linking words (however, also) and a specific example of learning from students. Avoid present-tense inconsistency (‘we are able’ -> ‘I was able’ or ‘we could’).

Exemplo: I’m not working right now, but the school I worked at was excellent. For example, colleagues always helped with tasks, and I learned a lot from my students’ questions, which improved my teaching techniques.

Sugestão: Answer communicates uncertainty but is disfluent and contains filler language. Begin with a clear topic sentence about current situation, remove fillers, and give a brief plan or timeline. Use linking words (however, although) and correct phrasing (‘I haven’t figured things out’ not ‘haven't figured out anything quite often’).

Exemplo: At the moment I haven’t decided on my exact plans; I’m taking a break to recover my health. However, I’m hopeful I’ll return to teaching in the future, perhaps after a few months of rest and retraining.

× Actually, I have been exercising and eating a healthy diet to improving my health and it's been really great.

✓ Actually, I have been exercising and eating a healthy diet to improve my health, and it's been really great.

The phrase 'to improving' incorrectly uses the -ing form after 'to' which here is part of an infinitive (to improve). Use the base form 'improve'. Also add a comma before 'and' to link two independent clauses. Suggestion: use infinitive after 'to' when expressing purpose: 'to improve'.

× I actually enjoyed everyday being a teacher.

✓ I actually enjoyed every day being a teacher.

'Everyday' (one word) is an adjective meaning commonplace; the intended phrase is 'every day' (two words) as an adverbial phrase meaning 'each day'. Use 'every day' when referring to frequency. Suggestion: replace 'everyday' with 'every day'.

× I would say yes because I never felt like an outsider or a beginner when I started my career because everyone was really supportive, especially my colleague Mia.

✓ I would say yes because I never felt like an outsider or a beginner when I started my career; everyone was really supportive, especially my colleague Mia.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but contains a run-on using 'because' twice. This correction addresses sentence structure by replacing the second 'because' with a semicolon to avoid redundancy and clarify ideas. Suggestion: avoid repeating conjunctions; split or use punctuation to join related clauses.

× She just showed me around on the first day and helped me with organising my work plans and helping me get through every single day.

✓ She showed me around on the first day, helped me organize my work plans, and helped me get through every single day.

The list mixes different verb forms ('helped' and 'helping') leading to parallelism error. Use the same past tense form for each coordinated verb: 'showed', 'helped', 'helped'. Also use commas to separate items. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure in lists of actions.

× At the moment I'm not working, but if I have to talk about the place I worked, it was amazing because everyone was always there to give you a hand in whatever task you are doing.

✓ At the moment I'm not working, but if I talk about the place I worked, it was amazing because everyone was always there to give you a hand with whatever task you were doing.

Tense and agreement inconsistent: 'if I have to talk' is awkward here; 'if I talk' fits better. Also change 'you are doing' (present) to 'you were doing' to match past context of the workplace. Use 'give you a hand with' as the correct collocation. Suggestion: keep tense consistent in conditional or narrative contexts.

× We are able to learn from them every day.

✓ I was able to learn from them every day.

Context refers to past employment, so present tense 'are able' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'was able' (or 'could') to match the time frame. Also switch to 'I' since the student talks about personal experience. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time referred to in context.

× To be honest, I mean between things I haven't figured out anything quite often.

✓ To be honest, between things I haven't figured out anything yet.

The phrase 'quite often' conflicts with 'I haven't figured out anything' and makes sentence unclear. 'Yet' is appropriate after present perfect negative to indicate something remains unresolved. Also 'I mean between things' is awkward; simplified to 'between things' retained but better phrasing would be 'as for the future, I haven't figured anything out yet.' Suggestion: use 'yet' with present perfect negatives and simplify phrasing.

× Uh, but I am positive that I'll love to work as a teacher in the future as well.

✓ Uh, but I am positive that I'd love to work as a teacher in the future as well.

Use of 'I'll love to' is incorrect for expressing willingness or desire. Use 'I'd love to' (I would love to) to express a strong desire or preference. 'I'll' suggests future certainty about an emotional state rather than intention. Suggestion: use 'would love to' when saying you want to do something in the future.